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Bobble-ageddon - WT (currently 1308 views)
AnthonyCawood
Posted: June 5th, 2019, 6:39pm
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This made me smile and then laugh, good comedy writing here. The story lost me a couple of time, but that's probably me. Was certainly pretty unique. Good effort
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Spqr
Posted: June 6th, 2019, 12:34pm
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A cute story with a couple of lightweight characters and a big dildo that's about to screw the Earth. A sex comedy is not one of the approved genre fusions, however.
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Zack
Posted: June 6th, 2019, 1:11pm
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This one might be my favorite thus far. Literally no complaints I can think of. Great, visual writing. It all flowed very well. A fast, funny read. Nailed the comedy and the sci-fi. Great work here.
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FrankM
Posted: June 6th, 2019, 9:24pm
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Absurd enough to be a sci-fi comedy, nice fusion there. If the government in Brazil (1985) had a space force, it would have sent Hector. Loved the SUPERs, which got all the best lines.
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ReneC
Posted: June 7th, 2019, 10:10am
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Wow, that first page blew me away. I was set for a good ride, but alas, it fizzled soon after. The premise is great, it's got the perfect tone, and the characters are good (Hector is great). The dialogue gets into wink-wink-nudge-nudge territory with the witty banter that isn't really witty. You were doing better with playing it straighter and letting the absurdity of the situation carry the comedy. The flashback was a bit awkward, but it's hard to do it any other way because of the restrictions. You could lose the part about the backup pilot and just stick with the situational comedy, no need to explain why a broken pilot is in space. I'd also lose the spoiler with the asteroid in the beginning. Show us the bobblehead, and leave the asteroid as the twist it is. Maybe it's a swarm of asteroids, obviously debris from the same planet and no explanation needed. One of the rare ones that nailed the criteria too. Excellent entry all around.
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jayrex
Posted: June 7th, 2019, 5:02pm
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I like this one. Meets the criteria easily. I can see the writer had fun writing this one. A fun read. I like the take on the bobblehead angle. Nice unexpected ending too.
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DustinBowcot
Posted: June 8th, 2019, 2:52am
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A decent effort... Maybe a B- Not bad considering those straws you were clutching at.
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