Didn’t think you could tie up Charlie’s job and his search for a date, but you managed it. Well done!

Ahaha this was def the funniest. Woa three best entries in a raw for me.

Cute title. And cute logline.

Most of this one does not take place in the sewer unless the 'sewer' coming out of his mouth with the jokes at the dating thing counts.

So his poo talk fails then he wins the girl by washing dog poo off her shoe.

Good job getting one done so fast.

This isn't set in a sewer. The actual story is in flashback. Then they leave the sewer and it ends outside.

Definitely not one of the stronger entries.

One of my top three for sure for this round. Not sure why peeps don't think this met the criteria but it worked for me. Pretty decent banter during the speed dating and with his mate. Nice ending and solid writing. Good work, writer.

Quoted from JEStaats One of my top three for sure for this round. Not sure why peeps don't think this met the criteria but it worked for me. Pretty decent banter during the speed dating and with his mate. Nice ending and solid writing. Good work, writer.

I actually gave a reason why I don't believe this meets the criteria. Looking back, I can see some others did too.

This isn't set in a sewer.

It's like the new challenge that is meant to be on a plane. How easy to have a guy getting on a plane and then simply flashback the rest to whatever location you want?

It's cheating the challenge.

This one's tough. It's the first one that I'm feeling didn't meet the criteria. His job is tied to the sewer, but that's really all, and the challenge isn't to write about sanitation workers, the sewer is supposed to be a main setting. This doesn't do that, it could be anywhere, and it doesn't even prompt the conversation on its own, it's just there.

Otherwise the writing is pretty great, the characters are strong, the dialogue works for the most part (I wasn't terribly fond of the ending dialogue), and the story is decent. Not great, but it works.

Overall one of the better entries, but I think it does cheat the parameters. They inspired this, but it fell outside of them.

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several formatting issues slugs, p3 (pre lap), flashback etc…

This one didn't grab me; however, I appreciate the attempt at a rom-com. I don't know. Perhaps it bothers me that they went down in the Sewer to ultimately tell that other dating-story only, which didn't truly feel in the spirit of the challenge for me. I'll let you pass with the criteria though - slightly you slide through… The characters were solid, only Stella felt a bit passive.

Quoted from LC Ooh, a Romantic Comedy. I liked it. Bit of a departure from the entries steeped in gunk. I think you came close to pushing the criteria but the fact the sewer plays a big part and ties in with the denouement, well I'd let that go. A smooth read too, I wasn't pulled up by typos and the dialogue flowed nicely. Perhaps not laugh out loud but an amusing scenario and I liked the main character. Good job.

Don't care, I'm bumping this thread.  Wow, em. I hope you already wrote the rest of the script. Haha!  Sorry for my belated review.  Actually it ain't much of one...really.  

One, congrats, and two...I thought this was pretty good and damn funny. I thought that the characters were real and that you had control of them. You avoided the most common fault in screenwriting that I see, which is to put two characters out there who carry on a meaningless dialogue.  -Andrea

Hey, Andrea!

I'm still trying to get the hang of critiquing my own scripts anonymously and modestly. 'Good job' nearly got stuck in my craw. Some people lavish their scripts with praise. I used not to review mine at all but then it was a dead giveaway I was the writer.

Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the kind words.  

As I said earlier this had dialogue that made laugh   It was snappy and cool, Lib

The script scored the highest by me in any category  - a 4

Thanks, mate.  Much appreciated.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XJAkJn3rHRY

Competently written.

Sorry I missed it during the judging. I went in order from the bottom of the listing, and missed the top 3.