Way over-written first page, but it picks up after that thankfully. The jokes were all groaners, until that last one which was crude adult humour. I didn't mind the shift with that joke because it comes from Junior and Franky finds it funny but Dino doesn't get it, it works because the other two didn't get Dino's jokes before that. Representing two different styles of jokes, and you set it up really well. The comedy is the strongest part about this, and that's no small feat. This is structurally great comedy.

Unfortunately, it's just a joke, not a story. The characters are strong, the dialogue works, the writing is pretty good once it gets into its groove.