Greetings,

Well rounded story for the page limit. Clear goal . Whistles always make good prop comedy like how you used it.  I can’t think of the movie ,but when Billy took off tweeting , it made me laugh because I related him to that one scene I watched. Whistle isn’t worth anything if no one around to hear it lol.

Not really to much to say. You know your way around a story.  Your writing is above my skill level so I can’t really give you constructive criticism.

Good job.

This one is one of the best if not the best for me. Great job for the challenge. If it was a standalone I would say she tamed that rat too easy. And İ would suggest some talk about rabbies and all. But for this its great. Now I have to reread the other entry I scored highly to score you both accordingly.

Yes, there was a story and it met the criteria. Not an interesting story for me and not very funny. I was just waiting for something to happy besides finding reasons to tweeee the whistle. Characters and dialog were so-so.

Not a bad story at all, just not for me.

What was that? Isn't it supposed to be comedy this round? It seems that you made no attempt whatsoever. It fails on criteria. It reads more like a horror.