Hi writer,

Quoted Text This continues on for the next few minutes...

Hopefully you don’t want the viewer to watch people getting on a plane for a few minutes.

Quoted Text makes small chat

has a small chat

Not sure what to say about this. It's hard to enjoy a story when there is no one to care for. We are literally just observes of this thing that happened. I have no emotional connection to any of it.

I don’t really think you pulled off whatever you were trying to pull off. Hit and a miss for me, sorry.

Criteria has been met.

All the best.

I try not to make a habit of commenting/responding to other comments, (sorry, Warren) but I meant to add this to my review, and forgot.

I could be wrong but I think the writer means: 'small talk'.
polite conversation about unimportant or uncontroversial matters, especially as engaged in on social occasions.

In a longer script it'd be a cheat. In a fiver-pager I understand the need for brevity, but you're effectively asking the actor to improvise, or that it would be MOS.

Quoted from LC I try not to make a habit of commenting/responding to other comments, (sorry, Warren) but I meant to add this to my review, and forgot. I could be wrong but I think the writer means: 'small talk'. polite conversation about unimportant or uncontroversial matters, especially as engaged in on social occasions. In a longer script it'd be a cheat. In a fiver-pager I understand the need for brevity, but you're effectively asking the actor to improvise, or that it would be MOS.

Either way, but yes that seems more likely, makes no difference to the scoring for this one.

I think this suffers from having no real protagonist or antagonist.

But it does have an interesting use of the sanitiser and is definitely horror... and you avoided the cliche zombie angle.

Unfortunately without any characters to root for I struggled to engage.

Not a big fan of this one. It met the criteria with no issues but it's just not very interesting. You can almost hear the maniacal laughter from the Russian. Why would anyone unleash a contagion without an antidote in this day and age? Give it a day and it'll be all over Russia, too. They really didn't think this one through.

No characters, except for the Russian, so really no points there; and no dialog, just V.O.

"This continues on for the next few minutes" is not going to work on screen. You can drop this line entirely, or use a series-of-shots if it's important to show many people boarding.

The way to highlight a sign is either with a FAVOR: or INSERT: directive in the action. Something like
FAVOR: Placard above the dispenser reads in bold letters "REMEMBER YOUR HYGIENE IN THIS FLU SEASON AND PLEASE CLEANYOUR HANDS." (not sure the exact wording is important, but it's fair to tell people how you envision it)

When something is FAVORed, the director will highlight it in some way... center on it, illuminate it, etc. An INSERT focuses this part of the scene almost exclusively on that object, and usually ends with RETURN TO SCENE.

The comment about what the people are not is not necessary.

The dialogue is a bit on the nose, but it kinda works in that explaining-to-someone-else-as-we-watch-it-happen way.

The logic issue (beyond a virus somehow creating biomass from nothing) is that a 100% communicable disease with no antidote isn't going to stop at the US border.

More hand sanitizer delivery agent! This time those pesky Russians are up to their old tricks.

The V.O. kicks in at just the right time. You say the people don't turn into zombies or werewolves or vampires, fine. But really they're just rabid werewolves without the cool werewolf abilities.

You didn't need to do the flashback, you would have set up nice anticipation if the flight attendant had entered the cockpit just before everyone turned. And more V.O. so we know the plan is going off the rails.

I thought this would have been one of those near-miss tales, the destruction of the U.S. narrowly averted due to one flight attendant's thoughtfulness. But no, you wanted the destruction to continue, so the goop survives to infect someone on the ground. So the whole point of this story is to tell how the goop got into the U.S. But it was already coming to the U.S., the Russian plan is fulfilled, there's no central character that comes out of this, there was no plan to stop the flight that ended up failing because the flight never made it...it's basically meaningless.

Also...what's to stop the virus from killing the whole world, Russians included?

Nice idea, good horror, the writing is decent. I got the most character from the caricature Russians, which isn't a good thing. Good effort though.

Quoted from FrankM When something is FAVORed, the director will highlight it in some way... center on it, illuminate it, etc. An INSERT focuses this part of the scene almost exclusively on that object, and usually ends with RETURN TO SCENE.

I learned something new. i've never seen FAVOR before. Thanks for sharing. (Don't take this comment to mean this is my script. I just saw the review and this stood out. Might be my script. Might not.)

The ending was a little confusing.  Like the man decided to use the gel/liquid/lotion from the HS whilst he's in the middle of a search of the downed plane?  But it's like he knew it was deadly and decided to infect himself?  I assume that from the grins wryly.  It's a little odd.  But if that man was say Russian.  And you made him speak as oppose to the V.O. Russian.  Perhaps I'd see where you're coming from with the United States will collapse line.  The idea is essentially very similar to my own.  It's a decent thought if I do say so myself.  The story overall is alright.  Could be better executed for me.  It does meet the criteria though.