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Hi Botto, thank you for explaining your intentions. I was slapping myself for not getting the finer points of the story (e.g. heat-detecting torpedoes) and the ending.
I thought John can walk is because of the operation. What leads me to this conclusion is John thanking Matt for the operation money before John talks about the Mayan Star. I suggest cutting out the first part that speech so that we can focus mainly on the Star's "secret".
I totally missed Megan's healed vision is a revelation because I actually forgot that she's blind! And that's part of my fault. We know about her blindness mainly via dialogue from another character, but I cannot recall Megan doing anything that implies she's blind. Since her blindness is an integral part of the twist, I suggest giving her some action that blind people usually do. But I guess if this is played on screen, her blindness would be more obvious. I agreed with you that Megan should be kept in the script.
About Rick and Kylie at the end, why would Rick allow Kylie to be in his car when Kylie is both a robot and an enemy? At first, I don't get the intention of the scene, but now that Kylie is trying to kill Rick, maybe showing Kylie clutching a weapon would make her intention more clear.
I really want to read another draft of this story.
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Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.