The Magic Letters: All Down But Nine by Sandra El. Watson - Action, Adventure - A cosmogonic explorer is Free Running. She's dividing herself in a multi-universe. Her quest is to find The Master of her race, but she's losing herself in the process.  53 pages - pdf, format

Sandra E.

Where have you been hiding at?   "Barcelona," maybe?  Why you put your name on the title is beyond me because your writing style is unique.  Just as unique as a fingerprint.  Having read your Magic Letters x-mas story, I had to read this.

This is a good example of creative writing.  Describing things without the use of camera direction.  Very good for the most part.  Of course I have to pointout the couple of POV's you used and well fair enough, I can see your side of things here.  

Good visual descrptions throughout.  page#11 F key #11 was interesting. I have to admit, if no one read your x-mas story, they'll be lost with some parts of this.  4 example Page#11, Ret and Moira caught by the GOM.  He tells her to go upstairs and Moira replies, "Oh No.  The last time I went up stairs with someone in here, I wound up pregnant."  Funny IMO.  (Okay, well maybe they wouldn't be lost.  Strike that)

I thought the dialogue was very good mixed with a little comedy too.   Some of my highlights...

Pseudo, "Can we play a bit?  Just to third base and I wont go further?"
References to the greenhouse and peeing Green reminded me of RV's script, "Green."
Moira and Elwood exchange.  "The weather outside is frightful, but in here my dear it's delightful."

Glad to see you kept some of the other characters.  Is this going to become a series?  Why? because I feel their is more here then meets the eye.

Anyway, this was very entertaining, a few laughs, written very well and I enjoyed this little piece.

L8R

Ghostwriter

Quoted from ghost and_ghostie gal Sandra E. Where have you been hiding at?   "Barcelona," maybe?  Why you put your name on the title is beyond me because your writing style is unique.  Just as unique as a fingerprint.  Having read your Magic Letters x-mas story, I had to read this. This is a good example of creative writing.  Describing things without the use of camera direction.  Very good for the most part.  Of course I have to pointout the couple of POV's you used and well fair enough, I can see your side of things here.   Good visual descrptions throughout.  page#11 F key #11 was interesting. I have to admit, if no one read your x-mas story, they'll be lost with some parts of this.  4 example Page#11, Ret and Moira caught by the GOM.  He tells her to go upstairs and Moira replies, "Oh No.  The last time I went up stairs with someone in here, I wound up pregnant."  Funny IMO.  (Okay, well maybe they wouldn't be lost.  Strike that) I thought the dialogue was very good mixed with a little comedy too.   Some of my highlights... Pseudo, "Can we play a bit?  Just to third base and I wont go further?" References to the greenhouse and peeing Green reminded me of RV's script, "Green." Moira and Elwood exchange.  "The weather outside is frightful, but in here my dear it's delightful." Glad to see you kept some of the other characters.  Is this going to become a series?  Why? because I feel their is more here then meets the eye. Anyway, this was very entertaining, a few laughs, written very well and I enjoyed this little piece. L8R Ghostwriter

Dear Ghostwriter,

I'm glad you enjoyed this. You know what? I had completely forgotten to mention the fact that yes, this was intended to be a continuation and a series that I'm developing. At the time of writing I was following on the tail-winds of the 7WC, challenging myself for the output, and also trying to pack and get organized for the trip. How is it that a person forgets the obvious? I don't know.

Where have I been hiding? Mostly in the stateroom #10524 on the Norwegian Jade since last night, after a beer at Tankaards Beer and Whiskey Bar. I'll be back in Barcelona tomorrow morning. Yay!!!

I'm just wondering right now, besides the use of the lovely: To Be Continued, how does one write: Last time on Magic of Letters... yada-yada-yada... Is there some kind of special format to that used in television writing? Curious and curioser.

The F #11 key? Ooooh! It's a doozy. Gets me everytime.  

The reference of peeing green is indeed a hint of RV's script. Green is also a reference of Tifferet which is a level in the worlds one learns in the study of Kabbalah. Green is also symbolic of vegetation, the process of photosynthesis and thus: life's processes. Happy is he who pees green.

Is this a series? Yes. It was clear to me that I would keep writing these characters after the 7WC.

Thank you again so very much for the read. It's a mystery to me how these guys do their thing, but that's part of what I especially enjoy-- their preoccupation with each other's psyches and the games they like to play while existing in a reality governed by forces that they maneouver within to extract the most pleasure.  

Sandra

Quoted from Sandra Elstree. I'm just wondering right now, besides the use of the lovely: To Be Continued, how does one write: Last time on Magic of Letters... yada-yada-yada... Is there some kind of special format to that used in television writing? Curious and curioser.

No need to really worry about that.  Say if you were to ever option this, they'll do it the way they want anyway.  But having said that, Screenwriting has gone liberal now days, so as far as I know there is no one particular format.  It's been done several different ways.  Usually quick flashes from the previous episode to get everyone up to speed.

For this, just your series title and the name of the episode.  If they like that episode, then readers will go back and catch the previous.  One example "The Magic Letters II" All Down But Nine.  Or just leave it how you got it.  

This episode stands alone for the original.  So I wouldn't worry about it.

L8R

Ghostwriter

Sandra –

This was very creative, full of whimsy, and half-thoughts… I tried to mind meld with your script but my mind over-percolated at page 15 on a long piece of dialogue. Sorry, Sandra. I really wish I could tune into your script but alas fair princess, I cannot transmute your story to logic. All I know is that I don’t want to go in the upstairs room either!

Gary

Quoted from grademan Sandra – This was very creative, full of whimsy, and half-thoughts… I tried to mind meld with your script but my mind over-percolated at page 15 on a long piece of dialogue. Sorry, Sandra. I really wish I could tune into your script but alas fair princess, I cannot transmute your story to logic. All I know is that I don’t want to go in the upstairs room either! Gary

Thank you Gary. I'm pretty pure sure I know the dialogue you're talking about. If it's the part with the Devil knife, then yes, I had fun including that. It's actually a true story. The Devil knife exists and is currently behaving itself in the kitchen drawer as far as I know. When I get back, I'll check and give it a little talking to, just to make sure it keeps its sharp point to itself.  

I thought for a bit more than a moment on whether I should write it or not, but you know me, I couldn't help myself. I thought, "Well, this is important right now and even if I kill it later, I'll keep it for now."

As far as logic goes, the logical thing for me to do regarding this script is to not have bothered in the first place. Well, that blows the logic theory all to Hell. For awhile, anyways. I'll find the logic, I'm sure. Eventually. But where? Where logic doesn't exist. Where's that? Kay. Forget that one. It's too easy.

Logic has a probable cause and consequence factor. We're speaking of statistical analysis and numerical reliability. In other words, It seems reasonable. Also, there's a recognizable flow of cause and consequence. There's a recognizable pattern. If the pattern is not recognizable, then it's deemed illogical.

Again, thank you Gary. I will continue to work on the logic factor. Something compels me to explore the medium in many ways. I don't know why or what it is, but it's interesting and a joy.

OK, here's the lost poem that was half resurrected:

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I had written a poem on that "logic point". It's a sharp point-- just like the Devil knife.  , but a Spanish friend dropped by the hotel this evening and we engaged in a Kabbalistic discussion-- I had left my computer open and hadn't saved it. Dave didn't know and had closed it up. Oh well, here's a new one and the other is flotondo somewhere in never-never land.  

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What be logic?
That I know?
Eye-See
Gra-pple
Tug of woe  

Please do tell me
What it be?
Log-ic
Creat-
I-vity

** I can't remember who it is, but someone on here has a wonderful quote from Wayne Gretsky.

These aren't the exact words I don't think, but it's close to this:

You miss 100% of the shots you don't take.

I'm taking the shots. They may be long and they may be wide, but I like taking the shots.

Angle on, Sandra. Angle on.