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Coleman
Posted: February 4th, 2012, 11:25pm Report to Moderator
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For anyone who cares to know I've dropped my script length by more than 40 pages as I tightened up scenes and cut superfluous ones.

All comments welcome and appreciated.

p.s Thanks, Don


"After Dark"
"Lie Behind the Eye"
"In Came You"
"Insatiable"
"Bethany"
"The Heartbreaker"
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Very descriptive, enjoyable.  Some run on sentences.  
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I'm glad you found my tale enjoyable. I'll work on fixing any run-on sentences I see as I continue to edit the script.


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Thanks for posting my revision, Don.

To everyone else, I condensed this story down immensely. Your critique is more than welcome.

Thank you.


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