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Drop Point Knife by Peter Unger - Action, Drama -  Drop Point Knife is the story of a lobster fisherman who after the death of his wife, finds comfort in the arms of a prostitute. Her journey parallels his and the potential for a legitimate relationship does not solve their problems, but instead shatters everything they know leaving carnage in their wake.  93 pages - pdf, format


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I like this, the music choices were good, and the description and action were for me near perfect, but something bothered me as I was reading it, the dialogue. in certain parts like the gym scene around page 27. The description was wonderful but the dialogue let it down, and it was this scene that it really started to play on my mind. But this is just one persons opinion, but if I was you I’d look at the dialogue again and try to make it much tighter, faster and snapper.
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