Thanks for the comments!  I really like Jed and Adrianna, too!  

Overall, I enjoyed this script.

The grammar and spelling were spot on. As was the dialogue.

I really enjoyed the scenes that take place at the Old West Stampede. I liked everything about them.

I also found the idea of a 21st century man using 9th century tech to defeat 19th century bad guys to be very cool.

The things that I did have an issue with:

The first scene, with the catapult, felt unneeded. I realize that it’s setting up for Kevin’s solution to the Gatling gun at the end script, but the execution of the setup feels clunky. You should find another way to get this across. Consider that it increases the cost to produce the movie for the sake of nothing more than a setup. The scene contains a fair, a lot of extras, and props.

When Jed jumps from his horse and punches Snake, it seems like a surprise. There’s no way that a person would miss the sound of an oncoming horse. Maybe you’re tossing in a bit of movie physics, which I suppose is okay.

I also have a bit of an issue with Kevin shrugging off the bullet wound.

The whole trip to the monastery seems like filler. As does Father Jake. Nothing comes of it. I suppose you may have used it as a reason for the gang to leave Kevin and Adriana behind, and maybe just to get the gangs outside the town with the Gatling gun. Again, there may be a better way to execute this goal.

July Wilson doesn’t show up until the three-quarter mark and does very little. I like the idea of the real July being a douche, but I think you should work him into the script earlier and a bit more.

I felt the “end” before Kevin goes back to his time felt a bit rushed. You may want to put a bit more closure between him, Jed, and Adriana. After all, Adriana kissed him a few times even though she’s interested in Jed. That deserves some sort of closure. Also, having Jed say something nice about the person Kevin has become would be good.

Kevin was a bit too ineffectual. I realize that in the beginning you need him to be like this, but later in the script he’s often overshadowed by Jed. His relationship with Grace also needs to be smoothed and fleshed out a bit.

It really was a breeze to read.

Good luck and good writing!