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Grandma Bear
Posted: October 4th, 2013, 10:31am Report to Moderator
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And that's why we love Jeff.  


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Mr.Ripley
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Wanted to pipe in quickly and give thanks to Angry Bear, Naz, LC, Reaper, and Dreamscale for having my back.

Will return this weekend.

Gabe  


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/

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Ledbetter
Posted: October 4th, 2013, 11:14am Report to Moderator
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Hey  pelgiroux,

Like Jeff said, put your work out there for us to see. Gabe has the balls to do that and take the 'constructive" criticism he gets here from people who give a shite.

But all you've done is shown how someone can be a ball-less cut throat that  slams someone work and uses it as a means to try and make yourself sound like you know screenplay writing.

The very attitude you put forth tearing down Gabe’s work reeks of an amateur who doesn’t know the first thing about the craft.

Shawn…..><  
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Mr.Ripley
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Also, wanted to thank other people such as Ledbetter, who'll want to chime in and have my back.

Gabe


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/

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That was unnecessarily harsh review from Pel. I think this is Mr. Ripley's first script, and most if not all first scripts are not Oscar contenders.

I also disagree with not posting on the Internet. SS is filled with lurking producers/agents. Even with crap stuff I've put up here, I've met some of them and even did writing work for them. On top of that, this is a great place to get free feedback and sometimes they are worth as much as the $50 I usually pay "pro" readers to review my crap.
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Wow! What a terrible, unhelpful and disparaging 'review'. Not only have you insulted the writer after reading less than 5% of his script, you've also offered some terrible advice.

You've said that he shouldn't ask anyone to review his screenplays, especially on the internet. What a crock. When I think back to the first feature I wrote & uploaded, I cringe at some of the mistakes I made. But it was the helpful comments, insights & advice from people here on SimplyScripts that helped me not only improve that first script, but also improve as a writer. That's what this community is here for - to help fellow writers improve their work & develop their craft.

Not only that, but SS is also a shop window for writers. Even if the writing of the script isn't professional standard, the actual concept alone may be enough to get someone interested. As Cooky said - producers, actors & agents lurk on here all the time looking for scripts. I've recently optioned a feature of mine to a production company. Where did they first read it? Here on SimplyScripts.
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Gabe, sorry this guy Pel gave you a hard time with his review, he seems a complete tosser anyway.  I was thinking that I owe you a read of this but the last I heard you were doing a rewrite.  Did you get it done and is this it?  I'd be happy to give it a read.  I have another feature to read this weekend but I could get to it sometime next week if you want?  pm back and let me know bud.


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Don
Posted: October 7th, 2013, 3:20pm Report to Moderator
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Folk,

I've removed the post at: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1330743919/s-68/#num68

I originally left it in place for two reasons.

1) I hate censorship in any form.
2) This was a good teachable moment for the original poster.  The response by the rest of the community was, for the most part, thoughtful and encouraging without devolving into name calling. I applaud the restraint shown by everyone.  

However, after re-reading the post and consulting with Bert I came to the conclusion that the intent of the post was not convey any constructive criticism, but simply done to elicit a reaction from board members and advertise the poster's site.  

So, I deleted the post which gives the poster a clean slate and perhaps a fresh start on the discussion board.

Don


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Mr.Ripley
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No problem. Don.

Thanks,
Gabe


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
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rolo
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Taken from pelgiroux's own blog: "Read everything other than screenplays, and write everything other than screenplays."

This has to be some of the worst advice I've ever seen on how to become a better screenwriter. The guy is clueless!

This other piece of sage advice cracked me up: " Write as often as you can."

This coming from someone, who thus far, has written a mere seven posts on his own blog in almost a year!!

Enough said!
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