Quoted from cloroxmartini regarding the topic of the thread, this Q&A with Robert McKee might shed some light on you and your writing habits/skills. http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1250887607/

Thanks Clorox. There's a lot of useful information in that post.

Sandra

Quoted from sniper Hey Enter, Welcome to the boards. I don't think you blew it at all I just think you commented on a script where the writer is not around - that happens a lot. It can be tricky to know who's around and who's not - especially for newcomers. While it's no guarantee, if there's a nickname (in parenthesis) next to the author's name, it usually indicates that the author is - at least - a member here. Anyways, good luck with future reviews and your script. Cheers Rob

Ciao Rob,..

I and the writer were in direct communication. What I did notice was though this writer was very corrective-critical of other's minor spelling mistakes, punctuation marks, etc,.. when I read their short, it had even more than  those they were criticizing.


I think a novice writer doesn't need the weight of criticism on format, spelling, or other minor editorial duties, but the emphasis should be on the story, character arcs, confusing clues, descriptions, etc.  The major editing I always do last, and can accept others doing this as well. I'm interested in story first, format a close second.

I think if we are going to help each other, we should find out what the writer wants to focus on, and stay there mainly, THEN add as a PS any other corrections we feel are needed to be expressed.

I want to know if I entertained you. I want to know if I succeeded in surprising you. I want to know if I created enough sympathy for my protagonist, that she/he is memorable, and hopefully original.

I want to stop starting every paragraph with an "I".

Enter,

Welcome! I am going to do some Asian travelling for a few months from November, so you helped whet my appetite for it further. Any tips to the virgin traveller? Oh, and what were you favourite places, etc?

What was your script?

Andrew[/quote]


Ciao Andrew, Thank you for your welcome.. Asia is not the same place today as it was 30 years ago. I arrived in India in 1974, through Nepal, Thailand, Indonesia, and the Pacific Islands before that. That time was the end of the world that preceded it for thousands of years. Then they started to join the 20th century, with all its toys, cravings, and possessing of "things". The old tolerance and curiosity changed slowly in to greed and wanting in the Asians. I can not fault them, as that was/is reality.

What I'm trying to say is that what I saw, you won't find it, UNLESS you get off the beaten trail, throw away that fricken' guidebook that tells you every hotel, restaurant, and train to catch to be where at what time for some event. Travel light in your clothes and mind, judgement should be replaced with awe and curiosity. Throw away your watch, or at least do not wear it. Listen  instead of teach. Love where you are or leave. Learn patience, and the valueless of time. Try to find the magic in timelessness. Do not be on a schedule. Make plans you expect to change or forget.

I can mention all the best beaches, but let existence drive your adventure. Let yourself learn from the Asians, they are smarter than the Westerners in many ways, and many more beautiful ways. Asia is a small word that encompasses a huge space, that can not be explained unless you experience its depths first hand.

My advice; Go with a friend (optional), Hand baggage only, buy as you need along the way. The longer the better; if you really want to come home with a real memory, think no less than 3 months. Anything less is not enough time to release the West out of your head and feel a comfort zone of belonging instead of watching Asia through a storefront window. The lower you travel on the luxury scale, the more you will see, feel, and remember. Careful who you trust. And remember; "Life is But a Joke."

Enter

What a fantastic bit of writing...

Better advert for your script than any of the others I've read. What's the link?

Quoted from JonnyBoy What a fantastic bit of writing... Better advert for your script than any of the others I've read. What's the link?

You talking to me?

Yep. And I'm serious.

It would be my pleasure to exchange our artworks.

My present draft is not up on SS, just the older heavier  version, So I can send todays' draft to you on WORD, or tell me how to replace the old version up on here with the newest.

Quoted from enter It would be my pleasure to exchange our artworks. My present draft is not up on SS, just the older heavier  version, So I can send todays' draft to you on WORD, or tell me how to replace the old version up on here with the newest.

Submit it and tell Don in the comments section that it is a new draft that should replace the old one.

Enter,

Some lovely words of inspiration there.

I have 3 months in Asia - it can be expanded - en route to Australia for a year, and a planned year in Canada thereafter. However, plans change and I am open for that. The only definite is to remain outside of England for a lengthy period.

The excitement is building, and by headed alone, I think it is possible to test myself. My single biggest goal is to discover, and ultimately expand my pallet for writing. Definitely going to veer off the guide book, identikit tour.

Thanks for the inspiring words.

Andrew

Here's what I'll do: I'm PM you my email address. Send me the script, and submit it to Don at the same time. I'll give it a read and write my review, and once the new draft is up (you'll get an email from Don) then PM me again with the link. I'll then post my review - that'll move the script back up to the top of the pile, meaning more people are likely to read it. Sound good?

I'll happily accept the return read. Here's the one you can have a look at: Nothing Left to Say (just click the link).

[quote=AndrewAllen]Enter,

Some lovely words of inspiration there.

I have 3 months in Asia - it can be expanded - en route to Australia for a year, and a planned year in Canada thereafter. However, plans change and I am open for that. The only definite is to remain outside of England for a lengthy period.

The excitement is building, and by headed alone, I think it is possible to test myself. My single biggest goal is to discover, and ultimately expand my pallet for writing. Definitely going to veer off the guide book, identikit tour.

Thanks for the inspiring words.


Ciao Andrew,..I spent more than 30 years in Asia, even married a couple, and gained some great experience/memories from the inside.

My all time favorite place was Goa, India. Those early days in the 70's is the legend that keeps it alive today.. Very unique in the world. It has its dangers, but more than enough good experiences available to balance. Mainly the most dangerous thing there is you, and what you may do to yourself.."Keep Your Head".

The problem with me giving any advice on where for you to go, is that it all has changed so much since last I was there maybe 10 years ago. So, Besides the over played-out Hotspots, like Koh Samui, Bali, Khatmandu, Chang Mai, etc., I can't help you out with anything I can promise is pure magic. Viet Nam???? Hunan, China???

Once the hotels go up in remote tropical areas, and direct flights from everywhere flyin day and night, all hell breaks loose, modernity invades, and the old rich patina of history and culture gets too shiny and gets replaced with neon signs, and you can't find a unpolluted spot on the beach next to anybody except a fat bleached white family from Wisconsin eating McDonald's, the place is finished for me.

As for me, I'd put Goa on a short stay visit, and spend my real time in Kerala. Much the same , minus a lot of wannabe Western hippies with the wrong consciousness, always making a wrong turn..Always be wary when someone flashes you a Peace sign, while they are wearing a Ché Guevera t-shirt.


May the sun always shine on your path...Enter

Quoted from JonnyBoy Here's what I'll do: I'm PM you my email address. Send me the script, and submit it to Don at the same time. I'll give it a read and write my review, and once the new draft is up (you'll get an email from Don) then PM me again with the link. I'll then post my review - that'll move the script back up to the top of the pile, meaning more people are likely to read it. Sound good? I'll happily accept the return read. Here's the one you can have a look at: Nothing Left to Say (just click the link).

Okay, Sounds great!...Give me a few hours to clean up my screenplay  from WORD who thinks it's very funny to put in blank spaces and change spacing every so often. And then will follow your whole idea.

Quoted from Old Time Wesley By the way I dislike your avatar because everyday I am forced to see hundreds of girls with those huge glasses and find it annoying. A few years ago those huge glasses were comedic and props and now they are the style.

Did you have nothing better to do with your time (like writing?) than to be rude to a new member? This is the sort of thing that puts people off forums. And you're an administrator! You should know better.

To paraphase an old saying: If you've got nothing better to say, better to say nothing.

I want to be serious, I really do. It's just that I know the odds are so heavily against me that at times it hardly feels worth it. I enjoy writing when I get into it, but knowing how hard it is to get something perfect and the feeling that it's all in vain is a real hinderance.

With Eddy as your mascot, you're already off to a great start.

Up the irons, mate!!!!!