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Tyler
Posted: July 17th, 2011, 12:33pm Report to Moderator
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In your opinions, what is an ideal way to write a shooting scene? Any suggestions?


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Bob runs down a hallway, a GUARD stands at the end of it. Bob pulls out a pistol and fires at the guard. The guard shoots back, taking cover. The guard shoots round the corner. Bang. Bob falls to the floor, hit in the leg.

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My suggestion is about as basic as it gets:

Write what's important to the scene.

In the example above, it really depends what Bob's trying to achieve.  If the guard is important, it's probably worth writing the shooting out as you have done.  If the guard isn't important, you could just write "they exchange fire", or whatever.  Write whatever you need to get across for the scene to serve its purpose, and nothing more.
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Tyler
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Thank you. So, say Bob is just trying to get to what the Guard is guarding, I could write something like "Bob shoots the Guard. The guard falls down, dead."

If the Guard was important, I suppose I would name him and give him some dialogue.
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Thank you. So, say Bob is just trying to get to what the Guard is guarding, I could write something like "Bob shoots the Guard. The guard falls down, dead."


It depends, if you want to let him die immedately. But there's no harm in writing that the guard takes cover or does some other clever trick, while Bob gets him anyway. Doing that, you can even get a chance to tell the viewer about Bobs abilities, say he's extremely good with guns, or he has incredible luck or whatever....
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I think it depends on your own style.  If you're the type of writer that is comfortable with

Bang! Bang! Bang!

And you use it effectively -- there's nothing wrong with that.  I've definitely read scripts where that has worked.  
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ajr
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My question to you is - how do you see it in your head?

If you see it as part of a fast-paced scene where someone takes multiple bullets and dies quickly, then I would write it just as you would any other action scene.

If however you see it as happening in slow motion, with a music crescendo and the like, I would write it as:

Bob rounds the corner and...

A GUN BLAST...

and Bob falls, mortally wounded...

Something like that. It also tells the director what you have in mind for the scene and puts into his or her head what your suggestion of what you want them to do.


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Tyler
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Thank you everyone. I get an idea now on what to write. Reading this, it reminds me of the scene in one of the Godfather scenes where the son is sprayed with bullets in his car. I can imagine that being written with much of detail.
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Dreamscale
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IMO, it depends on 2 things...how important the scene and characters are to the script and how long the scene plays out on film.

The longer the scene and the more important the characters and scene is, the more detailed it should be written out.

If the scene plays out at close to a minute long, then, you better be able to write it out covering close to an entire page.  Know what I mean?
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