Those other scripts might have better loglines and what not.....

But they suck.  I never get past 1 or 2 pages with these submissions.

Take "Lowlife" for instance.  That one stood out the most to me and was the one I opened first.

How was the first 10?  Terrible.  I stopped after that.

I even tried reading "The Devil's Hammer" -- which is everyone's favorite in the running over there right now.  I'll pass.

I've been thinking of how to pitch my own to Carson over there, need some advice:

Quoted Text TITLE: Shards GENRE: Supernatural Thriller/Horror LOGLINE: Haunted by his dead nephew, a man travels to a secluded town to piece his memories back together only to discover tragedy waiting for him. - 88 Pages .pdf. WHY YOU SHOULD READ: "Shards" is "Silent Hill" meets "Poltergeist".  It's a supernatural thriller with perception at its core where certain people can see their dead loved ones, and the spirits of said dead loved ones believe themselves to be alive.  In order to accomplish the "spook factor" of this story I played through the video-game "Silent Hill: Downpour" and watched several "supernatural" movies that include the forementioned to deliver a chilling thrill-ride heavy with twists and an ending you'll never see coming.

Does this sit well?  I'm on the fence about submitting it with that pitch.

Quoted from Leegion I've been thinking of how to pitch my own to Carson over there, need some advice: TITLE: Shards GENRE: Supernatural Thriller/Horror LOGLINE: Haunted by his dead nephew, a man travels to a secluded town to piece his memories back together only to discover tragedy waiting for him. WHY YOU SHOULD READ: "Shards" is "Silent Hill" meets "Poltergeist".  It's a supernatural thriller with perception at its core where certain people can see their dead loved ones, and the spirits of said dead loved ones believe themselves to be alive.  In order to accomplish the "spook factor" of this story I played through the video-game "Silent Hill: Downpour" and watched several "supernatural" movies that include the forementioned to deliver a chilling thrill-ride heavy with twists and an ending you'll never see coming. Does this sit well?  I'm on the fence about submitting it with that pitch.

Just my opinion, but I think you kind of make it sound like you played a video game, watched a couple of movies, and decided to write a script.

Here's my quick take on the logline and pitch:

LOGLINE: A man haunted by the ghost of his nephew travels to a secluded town to recover from amnesia, but finds only tragedy waiting for him.

WHY YOU SHOULD READ: "Shards" is a supernatural and psychological thriller centering on perception. The living see their deceased loved ones and the dead believe they're alive. It's a chilling thrill ride with one twist after another and an ending you'll never see coming. If you think you've already got it figured out, you're wrong. Dead wrong.

All that said, I'm presuming the man didn't kill his nephew. Pleeeaaase tell me the man didn't kill his nephew haha.

I just went over and gave A Cinematic End some love.

I actualy liked it better than the Devil's Hammer.

Great job and good luck!!!

Shawn.....><

Quoted from Ledbetter I just went over and gave A Cinematic End some love. I actualy liked it better than the Devil's Hammer. Great job and good luck!!! Shawn.....><

Thanks for the support man.

Quoted from Breanne Mattson Just my opinion, but I think you kind of make it sound like you played a video game, watched a couple of movies, and decided to write a script. Here's my quick take on the logline and pitch: LOGLINE: A man haunted by the ghost of his nephew travels to a secluded town to recover from amnesia, but finds only tragedy waiting for him. WHY YOU SHOULD READ: "Shards" is a supernatural and psychological thriller centering on perception. The living see their deceased loved ones and the dead believe they're alive. It's a chilling thrill ride with one twist after another and an ending you'll never see coming. If you think you've already got it figured out, you're wrong. Dead wrong. All that said, I'm presuming the man didn't kill his nephew. Pleeeaaase tell me the man didn't kill his nephew haha.

It's the second draft of another story, this time with a more supernatural tone than a detective thriller, which it was before.  That second idea works better.

Never been good at coming up with inticing loglines unless it's fantasy.

Thanks.

And no, he didn't kill his nephew.  He's just haunted by him.  

Hey Demento,

I just went over and looked...

It looks like you're still in the running.

You stand a pretty good chance of pulling the vote off, man.

We're all routing for ya.

Shawn.....><

Quoted from Leegion And no, he didn't kill his nephew.  He's just haunted by him.

Hope it didn't come across like I was fishing for spoilers. I only brought it up because it's so obviously what will come to a reader's mind after reading your logline.

Good luck with it.

Nah, it's fine.  It never comes up in-script.  He's never suspected.  The story's really not about the murder of the nephew, but more about fragmented minds and perception, what is real, what is false, etc.

Forgive me for my silliness - but this just seems like another version of this site. What is the great attraction to send scripts to this place?
Some guy chooses what he will will review and read? That's it?
Sorry if I appear a little dense here but I'm struggling to see what the big deal is.

What's the point?

He's got access to producers and the like. He helped one guy to sell his script. I think it was Mark Walberg's production company bought it.

R

Quoted from rendevous He's got access to producers and the like. He helped one guy to sell his script. I think it was Mark Walberg's production company bought it. R

It was called 'The Disciple Program'.

Scoob, I reckon Led would be the best person to tell you about Script Shadow and Carson, and how valuable the experience was, seeing as his screenplay rated highly and now he has a producer attached.

I'd like to get over there and vote... but I seriously have no idea how that place works. It's a great script... read it this morning in a little over an hour. Great story. At first the start seems like it's stuck on for no reason, but it plays in nicely at the end.

Quoted from Scoob Forgive me for my silliness - but this just seems like another version of this site. What is the great attraction to send scripts to this place? Some guy chooses what he will will review and read? That's it? Sorry if I appear a little dense here but I'm struggling to see what the big deal is. What's the point?

Yeah, like Libby and ren mentioned, the site has value.

Simply Scripts is a place where your script is read, reviewed, and other writers offer insight as to how to make it better. It's a process that can take days, weeks, months...

ScriptShadow is a forum where you go through a two day head to head contest against several other writers. The readers over there often only read a few pages and in some cases, only the logline and then vote on their favorite.

After that, the peer reviews stops almost as quickly as it starts. It really is a wild weekend.

Demento prolly hasn't gotten much sleep this weekend.

Carson makes the final call on which script gets reviewed by him.

Based on his review, the writer can receive some attention from anyone in the industry who keeps up with Carson. He does have a lot of contacts and his review of my script garnered it a bit of attention, resulting in it being optioned.

The producer, who now manages my script, read the review by Carson which led him to contact me. I would most likely have never had that opportunity had I not posted it on ScriptShadow.

Because of my producer’s contacts, it's now in the hands of several CEO's of major picture companies for funding and I get daily updates on the progress by him.

A casting director has also been attached as well as negotiations with several A-list actors’ managers.

None of this would have happened had I not put my script on ScriptShadow.

Submitter is forewarned though...

The process is a bit nerve racking and the forum where your script is reviewed can be rough, but in the end it can pay off in spades.

Shawn.....><

Ah, I see. Thanks for clearing that up, appreciated

Good luck to anyone that submits anything to their site.