Glad you took my comments as intended! Sometimes bending genres can work. Sometimes not. Cowboys and Aliens springs to mind as one that failed pretty miserably.

I think it failed in WDKY because you created this really dark, gritty, dare I say, realistic world early on and so it was especially jarring when the supernatural aspects appeared.

Like I said, if you can keep that dark tone throughout and lose the supernatural part, then I honestly think you'll have something special on your hands!

Good luck!

Gary

Sorry to hear Shawn's script wasn't chosen.

I want to thank everyone for wishing me luck and I'd also like to wish Janet good luck. I think enough people like sci-fi in the vein of Stream to give it a real shot.

I look forward to the coming weeks and reading people's thoughts on my work. There is one thing that makes me both happy and sad, though. I'm glad two SS people are in the running, but I'm sad one (or both) of us must lose. But I do hope one of us wins!

Breanne -

If Stream loses to yours, it'll be an honor.  

As a new member over there, I'm kinda hesitent to go for a read / review of both of your scripts.

It's one thing to offer some thoughts here and try and help improve your work, but it's another thing to have to chose between you two regarding the quality of your work.

I need to chew on this for a day or two.

Shawn.....><

Quoted from Breanne Mattson Sorry to hear Shawn's script wasn't chosen.

Me too.

Which is Breanne's, anyway?  just curious.

Hey Reaper -

Breanne's is Warning Shot.  Mine's Stream of Consciousness.

For everyone who has read either Breanne's or mine - please, do lend your reviews and honest opinions on both (whatever they are!) Though...remember...hell hath no fury like a female writer scorned!

Just kidding.

Kind of.

Quoted from wonkavite Though...remember...hell hath no fury like a female writer scorned!

See, that's the kind of Shite I'm worried about...

One of 'ems gonna kill us.

Shawn.....><

Quoted from wonkavite Breanne - If Stream loses to yours, it'll be an honor.

Same here.

Quoted from Ledbetter As a new member over there, I'm kinda hesitent to go for a read / review of both of your scripts. It's one thing to offer some thoughts here and try and help improve your work, but it's another thing to have to chose between you two regarding the quality of your work. I need to chew on this for a day or two. Shawn.....><

I appreciate your concern, but please don't worry about that. I'm thankful for all comments, positive or negative. Please vote for the script you think is best, even if it's not mine.

Quoted from Guest Which is Breanne's, anyway?  just curious.

Quoted from wonkavite Breanne's is Warning Shot.  Mine's Stream of Consciousness.

Yes, thank you for answering.

Sorry that Shawn’s script didn’t get the vote because he deserved it – agree with Mo, how did the watermark script get the nod?!

Good news to hear that Janet and Breanne are up for ScriptShadow crowd next week - that makes it 5 weeks in a row for SS. Good stuff.

And although I just said it another thread – I also want to go on record again and wish Phil a speedy recovery.

Shawn,

My man, all may not be lost! Just saw this over on the comment section in this week's AF nominees:


Sheebshag: How come Gravity Kills is next week's AF review? Last time I checked What Doesn't Kill You was clear in the lead?

Carsonreeves1: Hmm, I may have messed up on that. The whole "kill" word confused me. If so, I will change it.

Breanne -- Warning Shot... sounds good by the info I read... I'll try to get to it.

I won't be posting reviews over on SS as I'm not a member, nor do I care to register over there, and that's nothing against you.  Devil in D Minor was great and if you really did get better as a writer like you said in your thread, Warning Shot should be super badass.  


Shawn-- thinking extra carefully about it, I think rolo is right.  Either bring your twist in early or leave it out all together.  I can understand people getting disappointed with what you tried to do.  Give it to us upfront or not at all (Sort of reminds me... I remember when I went to the movies and saw Jeepers Creepers.  All the stalling and the suspense and the final reveal:  he's a demon monster.  Big disappointment, followed by several unanimous groans from moviegoers.) I, personally, didn't have a problem with it.  My major problem was that I found myself "rooting" for a child molesting fuck... "kinda."  I almost had to take a shower after reading your script, solely for that reason.


Regarding the one script "Play with Me" that I see posted on that list.  That's a bold statement by the writer:  "nerdy, smart, and funny in a way The Big Bang Theory will never be."  That alone makes me want to read it over all the others.  Big Bang Theory is one of the best shows on TV, brilliantly written, IMO.

Quoted from Toby_E Shawn, My man, all may not be lost! Just saw this over on the comment section in this week's AF nominees: Sheebshag: How come Gravity Kills is next week's AF review? Last time I checked What Doesn't Kill You was clear in the lead? Carsonreeves1: Hmm, I may have messed up on that. The whole "kill" word confused me. If so, I will change it.

And I just went over there and seconded it.
Asked Carson to consider a recount or just review both scripts.

Fingers crossed for you, Shawn!

Regards,
Brett

Quoted from Electric Dreamer And I just went over there and seconded it. Asked Carson to consider a recount or just review both scripts.

I'm not that familiar with the process, but does he go by actual votes? I got the impression the votes were really just recommendations.

Quoted from Toby_E Shawn, My man, all may not be lost! Just saw this over on the comment section in this week's AF nominees: Sheebshag: How come Gravity Kills is next week's AF review? Last time I checked What Doesn't Kill You was clear in the lead? Carsonreeves1: Hmm, I may have messed up on that. The whole "kill" word confused me. If so, I will change it.

Quoted from Electric Dreamer And I just went over there and seconded it. Asked Carson to consider a recount or just review both scripts. Fingers crossed for you, Shawn! Regards, Brett

Hey guys,

Thanks for the love! I was going to let it go even though I thought I had the lead.

I really appreciate you guys stepping in and doing that. It’s too nice. I mean it.

Btw…who is sheebshag?  Does he/she come over here?

I’d like to thank them outside of that thread. If you know who they are, please let me know.

Thanks again.

Shawn.....><