Hi, I'm looking for advice on how to write a DREAM SEQUENCE/FLASHBACK for my Sci-Fi script.

Is this the CORRECT way of writing it? Any other suggestions?

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1X9smlLhWyHS-bSmu7nse6gCnC_gZc1Q-

I'm not sure what you mean.  How it's currently written works, I think.  You could add them together into one scene, but that is just a choice over a need.  What are you trying to tell?  Do you want it to be a mystery type of scene?  Do you want us to know he's the shooter or the one getting shot?

Might want to have him squirming around a little in his sleep?  Maybe close on his face as his eyes dance behind his eyelids?

Can you elaborate a little more on what type of help? I'm not an experienced writer, but I'll try
to help if I can.  

Is it meant to be a dream sequence or a flashback? Based on the excerpt provided, it reads more like a flashback. As for the formatting, many writers are fond of using italics for flashback and/or dream scenes, yet I don't know of that is the correct format. From a reading standpoint, however, it was easy to follow.

See if you kind find a script to something with a similar scene to what you're thinking of. Perhaps search how to write and/or format a dream sequence or a flashback sequence correctly. (I'm sure you've done this already).

I actually think you got it right for the most part - other than not sure I would use the term Dream Sequence - VS. Just INSERT DREAM.

All that being said - there is always a balance between a writing objective and reader confusion - because you have the scene bouncing back and forth between the man in the bed and the dream it is a bit more confusing, i.e., versus just doing the dream all at once - something li ke:

INT. BED - MORNING - PRESENT DAY

Birds are CHIRPING from outside. The Sun BEAMING through the
bedroom window highlighting the dust in the air.

A NAKED MAN is lying in bed on his stomach. His body is
refined with every muscle pronounced.

INSERT DREAM SEQUENCE:

Dark, other than the barrel of a 9MM HANDGUN pointed at us. Then --

A finger slowly wraps around the TRIGGER

A moment passes then --

MUZZLE FLASH...BANG!!!!

BACK TO SCENE

The man GASPS. Then bolts up on all
fours...

Or something like that.

Other notes - you are overusing CAPS. They lose their effect.

Also - you writing would read more active without the ing words. For example, this:

Quoted Text Birds are CHIRPING from outside. The Sun BEAMING through the bedroom window highlighting the dust in the air. A NAKED MAN is lying in bed on his stomach. His body is refined with every muscle pronounced.

Reads crisper/more active as this:

Birds CHIRP outside. The Sun rays that beam through the
bedroom window highlight the dust in the air.

A NAKED MAN lies in bed on his stomach. His body is
refined with every muscle pronounced.


Best of luck