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This thread is provided for information and discussion of the Killer Game.

This tracksheet will be updated at the end of each turn. Refer to this tracksheet for information you need for your turn.



A map of the ship we are using as the S.S. Craven is located at
http://www.superyacht-charters.com/yachts/my_delma/index.htm

The game thread is http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1224842216/

Rules and characters follow.  If you have any questions, please ask.  

And remember this game/exercise is meant to be atmospheric and fun – try not to take it too seriously.
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THE RULES

The object of this game is to end up as the sole survivor.  In order to survive you’ll need to be clever and ruthless, you’ll need to kill all the characters on board the S.S. Craven before they kill you.

You do this by creating engaging characters and writing engaging scenes.  You will write two scenes.  One will further the “story”, the other will get rid of the competition, and they won’t necessarily be in that order.

YOUR TURN

When it is your turn I will send an email stating that it is your turn.   I will also post that it is your turn in this discussion thread.  Refer to the discussion thread to get information you will need for your turn, i.e. who’s introduced, who’s a possible victim.  

In your email only, I will also state what type of scene you will be writing during your turn either CHARACTER or MURDER.   You may also be provided with additional instructions.

You will write a scene and post it in the game thread.  

You have 48 hrs to write your scene.  If you take longer than 48 hrs, your turn will be postponed and someone else will get a turn.  Please tell me as soon as you can if you will not make your turn so we can keep the game moving.

GENERAL SCENE GUIDELINES

You may not create new characters, not even minor ones.

A scene can be no longer than one post in a thread.  If you use Word then this is somewhere around 7,850 characters including spaces and lines.

All formatting will be left aligned (see game thread for example).  All locations slugs should be in bold. [ b ]slug[ / b ] <-- like that without the spaces.

You may have more than one location in your scene.

If you introduce a character please use the introduction provided by the player. You may modify to fit your setting but please keep it as close to the original as possible.

CHARACTER SCENE GUIDELINES

During a character scene your mission is to develop “story”.  This might be your character’s “story” or if your character has already been murdered (this might happen) then you will need to develop another character’s “story”.  You may even choose to develop more than one character.  

The important thing is that there are no murders during a character scene.    
During this scene, you should move characters around, have them talk to each other, cast suspicion, gossip.  You may move any character. Put victims in locations where they are alone and vulnerable, and killers in situations where they have no other choice but to kill.  

Make the reading interesting. Follow an earlier “storyline” or go off on your own tangent.  A character scene can be just about anything that moves the “story” forward.   I’m putting story in quotes here because there really isn’t much of a story here, more than likely there will be many fragments of stories, after all this is a game.

MURDER SCENE GUIDELINES

1. The character being murdered must have been introduced.

2. The character being murdered must be alive.

3. A murder involves two characters.  The characters must be together and alone or in a reasonably secluded situation (with someone knocked out or asleep, in the dark corner of a room).

YOU MAY NOT MOVE CHARACTERS BEFORE THE MURDER IN A MURDER SCENE. An exception can be made to this rule if no two characters are together – then you may move one and only one character.  After the murder you can move whomever you want.

You should first decide who you are going to murder.  If they are the only character in their location then they cannot be murdered.  They must have one other character in the location with them. The other character is their killer.   When you write the scene you will have one character kill the other.  

A character is not considered dead unless we see the murder and identify the body.  Missing characters are not dead.

MOVING CHARACTERS

A character is considered moved when they exit a location. Placing them in a new location after that ends the move but does not count as a move in itself.  

So if John Doe is IN TRANSIT from the Sun Deck to the Gymnasium, then he can appear any where on the ship on his way to the Gymnasium. Of course, if he ends up on the Tank Deck he should probably have a good excuse.  He can arrive at this new location even if it is a MURDER scene, but once he arrives there an exit from that location is considered a new move.

This is also true of characters that are MISSING.

SPECIAL STUFF
Captain Cornetto will take the first turn for each round (I go before everyone else).  Dr. Bert Newcomer will take the last turn for each round (he’ll clean up the mess).

Dr. Bert Newcomer also has a special ability and you can decide if he gets to use it. He can resurrect one character during his first turn. However, he can only resurrect this character if he is still alive. If you think you’ll be one of the first to go and you want a second chance at life then keep Dr. Newcomer around.  Or perhaps you think differently…

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Mcornetto/Captain Cornetto

Introduction:  CAPTAIN CORNETTO laughs.  His jiggling rotund belly and not-quite-grey-bearded face gives the impression of a younger Santa but the anagram lies behind his eyes.

Background:  Captain of the S.S. Craven.  He is currently under investigation for the disappearance of the passengers and crew of the S.S. Romero. He was the only survivor. He claimed it was the “Bermuda Triangle” and that he couldn’t remember what happened on that ship.  In an effort find out he is undergoing regression therapy.  Just this morning he had a breakthrough, he said he could see the face of the person responsible for the S.S. Romero disaster but he couldn’t remember that person’s name – yet.

Nic/Nic Beqiri

Introduction: NIC BEQIRI, 20's, enters the room and everybody stares. His trusted camera hangs around his neck, one hand on it, ready for action.  His face, a twisted smile, that seems more crazy than angry or happy.

Background: Nic Beqiri is a journalist photographer who always seems to be "right on the scene" when murders happen. He has made a fortune selling those exclusive scoops to the tabloids. He's a bit of a strange one though, and no one seems to like him very much. One prosecutor disliked him so much that he charged him with one of the murders he was "right on the scene" for.  The charges were dropped but the prosecutor  still insists to this day that Nic is guilty, and he says it's not just the one murder.  Nic wasn't going to show up when he was invited to the S.S. Craven.  But that voice inside his head told him to come, that voice he's never told anyone about practically insisted he be on the ship.  And he should bring his camera.

Mr. Ripley/Gabriel M. Ripley

Introduction: GABRIEL M. RIPLEY sits alone at the far corner of the room, eating his dinner. He appears as a business man dressed in his suit and with his hair jelled back. But his stern composure reflects something else.  

Background: Considered as one of the wealthiest man in the world, he lives in a mansion up on the hills of Stanches with his butler, Stolas. He rarely goes out except for business. His life story is shrouded in mystery and conspiracy. The most present conspiracy has Mr. Ripley linked to 20 deaths (some say more) including the latest deaths of Mr. Peter Jacobs, head tycoon of the automobile industry; Mr. Randal Williams, owner of Software Tech, the biggest franchise ever in computer software; and Mr. Thomas Pierce, a up and coming senator. However, he was acquitted from all charges due to insufficient evidence.

MBCgirl/Mistress Morgan Cooper

Introduction: Mistress Morgan Cooper's shapely legs appear from the cab as it comes to a stop at the pier.  She's curvy in all the right places and smiles a delicious smile that sparkles in her emerald green eyes while pushing back her auburn hair.  She looks at her watch...so much about life is about timing.  She carries herself with an old school "English proper" way...which somehow gives her a look of classic innocence...even though her life has been anything but that!

Background:  She comes from Swindon, England. No one knows her full background, as it has been mysteriously misplaced.  She claims to have lost her entire family in a devastating storm off the coast of Wales.  These days - she lives a charmed life as the owner of a Marketing firm, wining and dining clients of a number of large companies.  Still, no matter how she has tried to perfect her life on the outside...there is still something brewing just below the surface and it isn't pretty.

Stebrown/Ste Brown

Introduction: STE BROWN(20s), sits at the bar with a deck of cards. He shuffles them without effort as his gaze falls across the other inhabitants of the bar.
A bottle of WILD TURKEY on the bar in front of him, his glass full. He knocks it back.

Background: Ste Brown has three vices; gambling, drink and women. On a recent trip to Vegas, Ste was found to be counting cards at blackjack. Beaten within an inch of his life, Ste went looking for a different life. What he found was a strange Priest in Ireland who promised him all he could ever want; the ability to have as much drink, women and gambling without any consequences. Well, there is one consequence and it is deadly one. People start to wind up dead wherever he goes.

Dreamscale/Bush

Introduction: BUSH (40’s), large…maybe too large…obviously notices, as a hot BLONDE , at least half his age, sits down next to him at the otherwise empty bar.  He glances over, smiles…very awkward…but very planned.  She’s already entranced…something about his easy going way…his worldly, honest eyes…maybe his dilated pupils.  A camera flashes behind them…


Background: Five Gold medals at Sarajevo, three knee reconstructions, and forty pounds are a world away, but the legacy of this sports playboy, and his four revolution “Dreamscale” have stood the test of time.  The fact that his last two wives “mysteriously” died while skiing; leaving him in excess of $25 Million, has been media and camera fodder…much deserved media and camera fodder.  Here we go again…

Blakkwolfe/T. Joe

Introduction: T. JOE busses tables in the elegant stateroom. His faded Kill 'Em All t-shirt stained with sweat under the requisite plastic apron.  He strains slightly as he picks up the plastic tub of dirty dishes and moves to the next table.

Background: A few years back, there was a Government type who needed his mistress "taken care of." It was supposed to be an easy hit. It wasn't.
A dozen or so fake names and odd jobs later, he finds himself here.

He's thirty, maybe forty, the handsome type that hates to shave except when he has to. He keeps his streaky grey hair tied in a loose ponytail, more out of necessity than style...Friends used to call him Black Wolf, back in another life. But for right now, T Joe will do just fine.
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Bert/Dr. Bert Newcomer

Introduction: DR. BERT NEWCOMER (40), the ship's physician, exits the infirmary, and with a wry mix of amusement and contempt, he eyes the passengers that mill about the ship.  His slightly graying hair lends him an air of dignity that some might even consider attractive -- were it not for the smug arrogance that infuses his every word.  The crew does not much care for Dr. Newcomer, and most passengers soon follow suit.

Background: Once a respected biochemist, Bert is now exiled from the world of science and academia after falling into disgrace. His unauthorized clinical trials of untested medications in human subjects met with disastrous results.  Bert has now been reduced to this -- dispensing aspirin and Dramamine to dimwitted tourists on a second-rate cruise line.  He is a tired and bitter man.  But there are some who say his clandestine experimentation on human subjects continues to this day...

Me/Countess Zadora

Introduction: Countess Zadora of Sweden seems to appear magically out of the fog.  She is tall, dressed in black with snow white hair and blue eyes. Blue eyes that frequently change with her mood -- to obsidian black reflecting her true dark nature.

Background: Countess Zadora is originally from Sweden... or so she says...  A nosy reporter once joked that the only Count she'd ever been near was Dracula. No one ever found out what he meant since he died in a freak accident shortly after making that joke. Somehow he managed to trip and impale himself on hundreds of Swedish wooden matches.

There has been many men in her life, most notably the Russian drug lord Vlad the Inhaler and the most famous one of all Vlad the Invader aka Putin. She's been seen playing on both sides of the fence though because when it comes to money and blood, they both taste the same no matter who you extract it from...

Itmightbeorange/Dana Orange

Introduction: Dana Orange, a 23 year-old insomniac with a short stature and petite frame, sits slovenly on a weathered wooden bench near the edge of the pier. She turns to the boat to see the other guests have started to arrive. She pulls her worn olive jacket closer, picks up the black guitar case sitting near her foot, and approaches the ship. She leans the case on the side of the boat and with one foot on the boat and one hand on the railing, she pulls herself up, momentarily revealing the shiny object tucked purposefully inside her boot.

Background:  Failed writer and musician Dana Orange has had her streaks of bad luck. If it isn't her pets succumbing to horrible accidents involving blenders it's critics reviewing her music with harsh words. With one critic saying, "If it sounds like cats clawing at a radiator, It might be Orange™," Dana has vowed to not let the negativity of others stop her from living her dream. Unfortunately, tourists in floral shirts aren't exactly her prime audience. "Just one more time, "she constantly swears, "If I have to play 'Copa Cabana' one more time I don't know what I'm going to do..."

Alffy/Alffy Hudson

Introduction: Alffy Hudson, a young looking 30 year old, leads a well dressed business man across the dining room and to his table. He pulls out the chair and the business man removes his jacket, hands it to Alffy and sits. Alffy swings the jacket on the back of the chair and extends his hand waiting for a tip, a fake smile plastered across his mush. The man ignores his gesture and picks up the menu. Alffy smiles and swaggers off toward the bar, removing a wallet from his pocket. He pulls out a handful of crispy notes, stuffs them in his uniform pocket and tosses the rest in a nearby rubbish bin.

Background: Forced to leave his previous job as a Postman after allegations of stealing mail. All charges were dropped after the accuser, manager of the office, abruptly left town for no apparent reason. He left behind only a note which stated he had family issues and needed some space, he has not been heard of since. Alffy thought it best to leave and start a fresh, nothing to taxing as he is financially sound for the time being, twelve years of stealing birthday cards can add up to a tidy sum.

GM/Patrick (Spud) Murphy

Introduction: Patrick (Spud) Murphy stands behind the bar polishing glasses and watches the first class passengers eat. his smart black suit and white shirt give him an air of someone important. To many he in fact would be the most important person on the ship, he is the head barman, he alone holds the keys to the booze store.

Background: His name badge may say Patrick Murphy, his application form lodged with the cruise company may say Patrick Murphy, but this is Michael O'Neil, once a semi-pro boxer from Galway, Ireland. Mixed up with the wrong crowd north of the border he was paid to throw a fight and he is adamant he had every intention of throwing that fight. He cannot quite remember what exactly happened but when the final bell rang he had not only won but his opponent was in a coma, one he would not recover from. Fearing for his life Michael fled for the US that night and has never returned to Ireland, now Patrick Murphy he is keeping himself hidden on cruise ships serving drinks to rich Americans and occasionally serving rich American widows.

Patrick still watches the passengers eat, one seems to be getting much more of his attention than the rest. He drops a glass with a SMASH, the sound is hidden by the noises from the passengers, only one or two seem to notice. Patrick stares at the unseen person in the dining room, he looks like he has seen a ghost.

Sandra E:/Sandra

Introduction: Sandra rushes to the ship at last. Her long brown hair is tucked up under a turquoise scarf; around her neck dangles a small leather pouch and she's carrying a small piece of luggage. She clutches at the pouch momentarily, closes her eyes and whispers something before boarding the ship.

Background: Sandra is a private cook and counselor to an esteemed military officer who likes to keep his affairs private. Her confidence is golden, but after discovering a family secret, the stew pot has thickened. It seems Sandra is carrying more aboard than just luggage. This is her sabbatical- a time to sort everything out, but things are about to get more complicated.


Yohn Yohnson/Yohn Yohnson

Introduction:
YOHN presses the half dangling fake moustache firmly back on to his face. He glances across the room from behind the bar... no one saw. He continues to clean a glass. A curvy blonde catches his eye. He smiles and tries to impress her with a display of his bartender skills. He throws a glass over his shoulder and spins around to catch it... the glass smashes on the floor. Yohn keeps his cool demeanor and continues to smile as the blonde walks away laughing.

Yohn fixes his side parting and uncomfortably adjusts a bulge in his pants... a gun shaped bulge.

Background:
Yohn Yohnson, or atleast that's his current undercover alias.  Yohn is a hot shot PI out to make a name for himself.  His current case has him investigating the death of a Mr Randal Williams, believed to be linked to one GABRIEL M. RIPLEY.  This case has brought Yohn to the boat as he trails Mr Ripley and tries to find adequete evidence to link Ripley to Williams' demise.  Yohn has been come under heavy scrutiny in the past for allegedly placing evidence where there was none to be found, in order to send down those he was investigating.
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My turn is done.  The tracksheet is updated. Emails are sent.  Morgan is up next.  
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Yohn ---- YOU KILLED ME

My face exploded haha. So this makes me the first dead guy actually since i guess nobody would bring me to life, at least only if they need a photo session.

Bert i promise to make you the best photos ever if bring me back hehehe.

Yohn you'll pay for this (jokkin)


Ha! It was an accident NiK!

I blame ghostly Sandra for freaking me out and making a gun go off in my pants!
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The last two entries by bert and mcornetto were great!

The plot is most definitely thickening! Can't wait for more
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I've been away for a day and the discussion board is blitzed!! So much to keep track of but the story is turning out great. I wondered if this would take an age to complete but everyones so into it they are writing their scenes in no time at all.

Yohn and Bert both wrote great scenes. I loved the way you suggested many different murders Bert, very misleading. Michael, are you dead or not? I can't keep up...Why did I have to fiddle with the pyramid doh!


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This is all very interesting.

Cornetto has nine lifes.  I wonder if Bert can borrow a few?


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It just keeps getting better and better!
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Congrats, Bert. you added alot of twists and turns within a small post.

Interesting turn Michael, killing the doctor.

A lot of things are coming to a close. I wonder how it's going to end?

Good luck MBCgirl


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Congratulations are in order for both Bert and Michael for writing excellent scenes!

I thoroughly enjoyed the reads.

Lovely blends of action and dialogue. The location of the scenes were also interesting. I loved exploring the sauna. I thought it was a really good choice for where this scene played out.

I love the sci-fi/supernatural factor that's happening in the elevator scene with the intricate clockwork and later- the green grid. Really strong visuals.

Cornetto's come back to life scene is fabulous. I loved the romance between Morgan and Cornetto. I think there is tension in this scene that is remarkable!

I'm completely impressed! Good job!

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I hope some of you noticed that the killer game thread went on to page 2 in a marvelous synchronicity for the 2nd round.  I hope that Morgan isn't too upset with the turn of events, I notice she hasn't checked in.

I have also split the discussion for the 1st round into a separate thread located here http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-collaborate/m-1224878017/

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I for one am feeling a bit better.  Looked like I was about to get some action, then next thing I know,the cuffs are on and I'm going down.  Glad I was able to somehow power out of that  sticky situation.  It's good to be alive!

Great posts you guys.  It's amazing how fast these are going up.  Very impressive!!!
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I hope some of you noticed that the killer game thread went on to page 2 in a marvelous synchronicity for the 2nd round.  I hope that Morgan isn't too upset with the turn of events, I notice she hasn't checked in.



Hey people...I am here   Had to work for a few hours today but am done and ready to review and plan...

Cornetto...I'm counting on you to avenge my death baby...but please make sure it's slow and painful and that Bush knows it's a payback!  There's a bottle of vodka with a pill in it...and it's not a happy little pill either!

The kids are living with my brother in Australia...so I fully expect you to locate them and love them since theire mom is no longer alive. Boo hoo...  They're 13 and so delightful...their names are Ashley and Ashton.   Remember one thing...I loved you...till the very end.............

I'll have the new scene posted tonight. Cheers to all!  



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I think Ashley and Ashton from "The Spirit Men", might be related to Rupert Fontaine and his brother, The Photographer, from "Come Saturday Mourning".

I wonder if Nic also has a twin. I'm kind of thinking he does- photographers like this usually do- especially when they're on a ship like this.

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New scene is posted.  I couldn't get the scene captions to bold...not sure what is up with that.  MC will you take care of that for me?

Hope everyone enjoys the read....


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

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poor me. I'm dead. Mourn time for me...lol. This is a interesting take on the resurrection. I wonder how it's going to turn out.


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
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I'm sorry Gabe   I had a hard time picking who I was going to kill...it's weird being dead myself and still killing people through other characters!

Hope you enjoyed it...at least a little. *wink*


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It's alright. Now, I can really start messing people up. HAHAHAHA!  Wait till you get a load of me.  

At least I died by peacefully...except for being smothered.  


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Hey MBC!

You did good! Interesting turn of events. Whew! *wipes his brow* I thought for sure you were going to off my character. Thanks   Alffy is really racking up those kills.  Poor Gabriel - at least he'll look like he died peacefully in his sleep.

The tracksheet is updated and emails are sent.  Alffy is up next.    
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It's alright. Now, I can really start messing people up. HAHAHAHA!  Wait till you get a load of me.  

At least I died by peacefully...except for being smothered.  


Oh yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Gabriel plays for HIGH STAKES! I LOVE IT!!!! And Ooooh I love it!

I think I've already got a load of you Gabriel and it's just LOVELY. OH SO PRECIOUS!

And my dear Morgon is going to be so lovely with Cornetto and it will not end! Their love cannot die! Ooooh oooh oooh! This is a love affair that needs to continue.

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I can't kill you my darling Cornetto   What would be the point! *wink

Glad you like the interesting turns...and twists.  

Take us away Alffy!

~m~


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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The game is so interesting and is coming way better than I expected. Seriously.

The sad thing is that - I"M NOT ALIVE --- da*n.

Michael since i'm killed and can't be bought back to life, then it would be nice if you could tell me when another will hit the board. So hopefully i won't get killed (you hear me YOHN)

Great job guys. Keep it up.



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He goes through Gabriel’s pants..


Steady, people will get the wrong idea about me lol.  Anyway I'm next and I've already racked up another kill...watch what you drink.


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Steady, people will get the wrong idea about me lol.  Anyway I'm next and I've already racked up another kill...watch what you drink.


Well...my man Alffy...you ALWAYS have your hands in your pockets...not sure what the twitching is about...and if you notice in the scene I just wrote...You were twitching a little more than usual when you knew you were going to be "outing" Mr. Ripley...

Now with regard to looking through Ripley's pants...it was strictly to look for the keys to the safe deposit box...Believe it or not! Tee hee   

After all...Ripley is loaded in more ways than one...but especially in the money factor!  Alffy just wants what is his.  

I took your pill idea in room 86 and used it here.  

Take note though...I also equipped a few other people as I went.



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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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The game is so interesting and is coming way better than I expected. Seriously.

The sad thing is that - I"M NOT ALIVE --- da*n.

Michael since i'm killed and can't be bought back to life, then it would be nice if you could tell me when another will hit the board. So hopefully i won't get killed (you hear me YOHN)

Great job guys. Keep it up.


Nik-Nik...just because you are dead doesn't mean you don't get to write any more scenes.  I was already dead and had to write one without myself being alive...boo hoo.

My point is this...you are still an inportant part of this game! So keep your pencil sharp!

~m~


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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Quoted from NiK
The game is so interesting and is coming way better than I expected. Seriously.

The sad thing is that - I"M NOT ALIVE --- da*n.

Michael since i'm killed and can't be bought back to life, then it would be nice if you could tell me when another will hit the board. So hopefully i won't get killed (you hear me YOHN)

Great job guys. Keep it up.


Don't worry Nik, I've got plans for you my dear one. I love a photographer like you!!!

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OK I've posted. I'll appologise if my scene isn't the best but I'm a bit pushed for time tonight and I don't want to hold things up, also it's a bit hard to follow where everyone is now lol.


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OK I've posted. I'll appologise if my scene isn't the best but I'm a bit pushed for time tonight and I don't want to hold things up, also it's a bit hard to follow where everyone is now lol.


Don't worry Allfy, it's hard to follow even when you're studying it because we're all thinking differently.

I'll read it as soon as I can here- I've just had some work to attend to.

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Finally an answer for all that crotch cupping. Nicely done Alffy.  

Good morning everyone.  Melbourne Cup Day here.  That's a holiday for horse racing where everyone dresses up like it's the 1890s.  Well not quite all but some people do.

GM is up next and I can almost guarantee that he'll be up to no good.  

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Unfortunately only those crazy Mexican's from down south get to have the day off for the racing, It is business as usual for us folks up North. Well at least until after lunchtime when the whole city will descend on a bar somewhere to watch the race and have a few drinks.

Alffy, you may have saved Ste's life there, hope he is grateful.......




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LOL! I'm glad you found a cream for that!

I love the elevator PING!

Excellent!

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I hope you wash your hands after your done alffy. lol.

I wonder what's going on with ste and Dana. Interesting.  


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OK I've posted. I'll appologise if my scene isn't the best but I'm a bit pushed for time tonight and I don't want to hold things up, also it's a bit hard to follow where everyone is now lol.


Just my 2 cents...hoping to help with the connects of our scenes.  I went back three entries and read each one, jotted down what I felt were significant, "moving forward" additions for the characters...then I checked the board to see where everyone was at.  Cornetto is awesome about updating the track sheet to keep us on track, so if nothing else, check that out before you write.  

In some ways I think it's a bigger challenge to follow the story line laid out before us, while either advancing, moving or killing characters with our additional scenes. (Whichever MC tells us to do)  I know if we were ever called in to work on a project, it would need to make sence and follow the established story line.

I'm probably a little bit more dogmatic about this...but I really want to learn.  

I know Cornetto said we can go off in our own direction, but I feel that part of the learning curve here is to respond to the rest of the story in a way that moves it forward.

NOT to say you didn't move the story forward Alffy   But use the tools provided when possible. That's what they are there for.

Nice job with a tub of cream.  *wink*

P.S.  This is no way meant to be negative...but merely contructive comments on my part.  It's interesting to see how far we have come and where we are yet to go...

~m~


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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Alffy, you may have saved Ste's life there, hope he is grateful.......



Yea, I thought I was a goner there. Nice job Alffy.


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I know Cornetto said we can go off in our own direction, but I feel that part of the learning curve here is to respond to the rest of the story in a way that moves it forward.


That is part of the learning curve - not a forced part but one nonetheless - collaborating on your scenes will increase the readability of the script but it's optional in this first game.  

I'm learning here too. I need to learn the rules you need to ensure effective collaboration.  That's why everyone has lots of leeway on this one.  I have to learn what to prevent next time and put rules in place for it.  

I think as a goal for this game, making it  to the end is sufficient.  When we are done we'll have collaborated on a (don't look back and rewrite type of) first draft of a feature script.  

Of course we aren't going to ever rewrite this one - but, who knows, we may rewrite future ones.
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GEEZ!!!  A lot of people have been snuffed since I last checked this!
Am I still alive?
I'm confused about all the dead coming back. And why is Bert dead? I wanted to get to "know" him first!!
I'm naked in a sauna and there are no birch twigs and I get no action??!! What a messed up game!!  


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GEEZ!!!  I'm naked in a sauna and there are no birch twigs and I get no action??!! What a messed up game!!  


You are still alive...having a meal compliments of Morgan (I'm dead)

You are also dressed...helping Cornetto carry me into my room.   You were quite stunningly naked while it lasted! *wink

~m~


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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When my turn comes up, I will do everything possible to make sure that every single character, be they alive or dead, will be magnificently naked.

Some cruise, huh?  Nothing but killing, cloning, pyramid portal openers, gems, vampires, evil A & B operatives...  Not much in terms of relaxing and cruising.

Here's to more nudity!!!!
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Its down to the final nine: Cornetto, Pia, Dreamscale, Ste, Allfy, Dana, Yohn, Gm, and Blakkwolfe. (sorry GM and Blakkwolfe).  

I really wonder whose going to be the last one standing.


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
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Any you guys shouldn't forget T. Joe.  Just because we are skipping his turns doesn't mean his character should be ignored.  Otherwise he might end up the survivor.
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Quoted from Mr.Ripley
Its down to the final seven: Cornetto, Pia, Dreamscale, Ste, Allfy, Dana, and Yohn. The  weird part is that its seven. I really wonder whose going to be the last one standing.


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And why is Bert dead?


I killed myself.  How is that for thinking outside of the box?

And getting everybody naked was just a bonus


Hey, it's my tiny, little IMDb!
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I killed myself.  How is that for thinking outside of the box?

And getting everybody naked was just a bonus


It still sucks... I had some ideas I'd been working on...
You'll never know now what they were though.  



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Just my 2 cents...hoping to help with the connects of our scenes.  I went back three entries and read each one, jotted down what I felt were significant, "moving forward" additions for the characters...then I checked the board to see where everyone was at.  Cornetto is awesome about updating the track sheet to keep us on track, so if nothing else, check that out before you write.  

In some ways I think it's a bigger challenge to follow the story line laid out before us, while either advancing, moving or killing characters with our additional scenes. (Whichever MC tells us to do)  I know if we were ever called in to work on a project, it would need to make sence and follow the established story line.

I'm probably a little bit more dogmatic about this...but I really want to learn.  

I know Cornetto said we can go off in our own direction, but I feel that part of the learning curve here is to respond to the rest of the story in a way that moves it forward.

NOT to say you didn't move the story forward Alffy   But use the tools provided when possible. That's what they are there for.

Nice job with a tub of cream.  *wink*

P.S.  This is no way meant to be negative...but merely contructive comments on my part.  It's interesting to see how far we have come and where we are yet to go...

~m~


I think perhaps, that when this is done, it would be fun to actually work on creating a few different stories from this using the characters and working more with their individual characters.

Moving the story forward is a very important thing, but it depends too what effect you're going for. Someone might want to dive into character mode and it might wind up weak storywise and then you might get someone else who is doing an excellent job with the story part- or at least so it seems, but it's dialogue heavy or whatever it is deficient in.

I think you raise a good point here though. Something just to really keep in mind when we are working on a true script.

Like I said, it would be interesting to create variations just on this first and second round of killer.

I'm really thinking a lot about the different characters. I like Alffy's scratch problem and Yohn, the detective with a problem mustache. Working with the Zadora character I think would be really fun to make her more complex than just an orgasmic phantom of the night. The relationship with Morgan and Cornetto I'd like to explore more.

There's a lot going through my head with the characters. I think many spins could be put on this hundreds of times over just by creating special circumstances in each voyage. Like for instance: A character like Ste takes a vow to give up drinking and gambling and wom- NO. He can't give up women.

But whatever circumstances change in each successive voyage- one thing stays the same: they all have to die except one. But then, reincarnations abound in Killer.

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My first impression when I read the rules was that each character was supposed to do their own killing of another character when it was their turn to kill.  I assumed that when you were killed you could only write character developing scenes to support the story.

Cornetto - the moderator would hold the control on who's turn it was and give us the word either way.

In my case...I was already dead and still got to kill someone   

As Cornetto mentioned though - and to his credit...he has kept us informed, aligned and motivated!  I think this is an excellent concept and exercise in writing.

It would be very cool to write a collaborative TV series this way, but there would need to be more guidelines to follow.

Everyone is engaged in this, which really shows and no matter who is left standing...it is really fun to be a part of this.

I wonder if Cornetto dressed up as an 1890's Australian frontiersman today for the Melbourne Cup?

Keep the words flowing!

~m~


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.


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My first impression when I read the rules was that each character was supposed to do their own killing of another character when it was their turn to kill.  I assumed that when you were killed you could only write character developing scenes to support the story.

Cornetto - the moderator would hold the control on who's turn it was and give us the word either way.

In my case...I was already dead and still got to kill someone   

As Cornetto mentioned though - and to his credit...he has kept us informed, aligned and motivated!  I think this is an excellent concept and exercise in writing.

It would be very cool to write a collaborative TV series this way, but there would need to be more guidelines to follow.

Everyone is engaged in this, which really shows and no matter who is left standing...it is really fun to be a part of this.

I wonder if Cornetto dressed up as an 1890's Australian frontiersman today for the Melbourne Cup?

Keep the words flowing!

~m~


I agree, it would be interesting to do a series this way. And of course, drawing up parameters and instructions are a good idea if we want to be strict about what happens.

What's also a possibility, too, to make it even more interesting, (like it could be?!_ ... but would be to exchange scenes with a partner. For instance, I might write out an idea for a scene and someone else writes it. And vice versa. This would advance a different set of skills I think where a person is "thinking" in the telling mode. Does that makes sense? What I'm trying to say is that one is organizing a kind of treatment plan or a summary, it's quite a different process than writing scenes themselves.

A lot of good work here all around and very interesting- even if the logic factor isn't here at the present.

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I have some interesting ideas for the next game.  It will be different from Killer but along the same lines.  We can discuss it after we finish this game (I'm just concerned here that we start discussing new ideas before this one is finished - everyone knows where that leads).  What I will do is create a thread where we can discuss new ideas for games and rules so we can keep them out of this specific games discussion.

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When my turn comes up, I will do everything possible to make sure that every single character, be they alive or dead, will be magnificently naked.

Some cruise, huh?  Nothing but killing, cloning, pyramid portal openers, gems, vampires, evil A & B operatives...  Not much in terms of relaxing and cruising.

Here's to more nudity!!!!


I've got plans for writing more of that too.

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Please, Moderator Cornetto...pick me!!!  Pick me!!!  I want to show the beauty of the human body...in all of its magificence (sp?).

Way too funny you guys!  I can't stop laughing actually.  Some great stuff here for sure.

PS  Can we get like $7 million togther between us and make a kick ass movie that will gross at least $23 million at the NABO, and then another $17 million overseas, and of course, another $28 million in DVD?  I've got $1,450 I can put in as of right now.  After this week, I will have $1,775.  I know...it's not quite there, but it's a start at least.  If I work next week, I may be able to throw in close to $2,000...will that do it?

Send more Albertan herb...quick!!!!
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Please, Moderator Cornetto...pick me!!!  Pick me!!!  I want to show the beauty of the human body...in all of its magificence (sp?).

Way too funny you guys!  I can't stop laughing actually.  Some great stuff here for sure.

PS  Can we get like $7 million togther between us and make a kick ass movie that will gross at least $23 million at the NABO, and then another $17 million overseas, and of course, another $28 million in DVD?  I've got $1,450 I can put in as of right now.  After this week, I will have $1,775.  I know...it's not quite there, but it's a start at least.  If I work next week, I may be able to throw in close to $2,000...will that do it?

Send more Albertan herb...quick!!!!


Well, if we work like crazy and keep the faith, who knows what could happen. Maybe Gabriel can open his big bank account for us all to enjoy LOL.

I'm drinking chamomile tea at the moment, maybe that's what does it!

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I don't have the key. You need to ask allfy to give it back.

And dreamscale, why not include nude ghosts as well.


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You're pretty good at this game, you know that Gary.  

Alas Poor Alffy...I knew him, Horatio.

Nic is up next and as I understand it, he's developed quite a picture in his mind about who's gonna be exposed, I mean, disposed of next.  

The tracksheet is in the bar and the digital communications have been sent.

Cheers,

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Cheers Mr C, though would'nt go that far. Just trying to keep myself out of harms way

Thought it might be fun to try and get everyone together again, not sure how it will work out though, see what Nic can pull out of his bag.
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Some great installments and things seem to to be stepping up a gear.  A lot of people in transit to the bar!

So it's NiK's go next eh...

erm...

NiK... wonderful, merciful, non-grudge holding NiK... did I mention how attractive you look today! Did you do something different with your hair?!
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NOOOO!!!!!! I go to work and when I get home i've got a scalpel in my eye ouchy!!
Nice way to go though I guess. Great bit of writing there.


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NOT to say you didn't move the story forward Alffy   But use the tools provided when possible. That's what they are there for.


I know what you mean but I was trying to bring back a couple of characters that had disappeared for a while, meaning they'd been in the same location for a few turns. Don't worry though you didn't offend me or anything lol.

By the way I think we should get this copyrighted straight away or I bet we'll soon see this on the big screen lol. I can see the reviews now, 'incrediblely hard to follow but stay with it as the complex story unfolds and it all becomes clear, oscar performances all round'. lol


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SNiK... did I mention how attractive you look today!


I'm always attractive

I'm not a revengeful type of guy - but that doesn't mean next time i won't give it a shot

Hope i wrote my scene well, since i was in class at the moment and rushed to don't make you all wait.

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Oh my, stuck in creepy haunted room with creepy pictures. How did I get into this room, I wonder. I thought I was going to the bar...now i really need a drink. lol
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Cornetto...is that your 1890's frontiersman costume???  Yowser!
Ouch...I just hurt myself staring at the screen!  lol  

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I just read the new post...I was a bit surprised...as I'm very sure I killed Gabriel  

He swallowed a very potent poisen pill dissolved in water and I even checked his pulse in stateroom 301.

So can you kill a ghost? ;0 Oh my!

Everyone is heading for the bar...Cornetto darling...would you please put your clothes back on?


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On second thought...DON'T put your clothes back on...leave that delicious picture up there for a while!


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I have some interesting ideas for the next game.  It will be different from Killer but along the same lines.  We can discuss it after we finish this game (I'm just concerned here that we start discussing new ideas before this one is finished - everyone knows where that leads).  What I will do is create a thread where we can discuss new ideas for games and rules so we can keep them out of this specific games discussion.

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I'm really not suggesting that anything change with how it is going...I was sharing what I interpretted the rules to mean...I'll zip my lips for now.  When we get done with this one then we can discuss our options.

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Everyone is heading for the bar...Cornetto darling...would you please put your clothes back on?


Why do I get the impression that is not the first time Michael has had that request?


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I died twice. Ouch. I wonder how this is going to be explained.

Poor Alffy, that's what you get for trying to kill me. lol. A lot people are dying off quickly.  


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GM and Nik, I absolutely LOVED your scenes!!!!

The visuals were excellent with the bullet that ricochets off Ste's crotch and heads towards the crystal. I could easily see this happening slow mo.

Then Yohn is "apparently" dead and I love Ste's dialogue: "Balls to this, I'm going for a drink!" Perfect!

It's now understood why Patrick had the strange dream of Sandra- there was a connection there.

The twist with Yohn still being alive- saved by his tape recorder is fabulous! It had to come in handy!

It's excellent you writing in T Joe's narcolepsy. I loved it! I just felt like I was walking on a tightrope between action and humor and I love this style.

And finally, we're back to blood thirsty Zadora- ever now pursuing the lovely Dana Orange.

Nik, I'm just so glad to see you working with the "The Room". I really feel this as something I'm drawn to as well. The POV work in the shifting perceptions of the pictures was simply fabulous and the twist when Dana says she's married and she won't tell who-- just really keeps one in a page turning mode.

I just can't compliment enough here. I really love this so much and when you ended the scene with someone approaching Dana, (must be Zadora) and now she tries to get back INTO THE ROOM. I just think it's absolutely brilliant!!!

You guys both did such an excellent job. Wow!!!!! REDRUM! REDRUM!!!!!!!

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NOOOO!!!!!! I go to work and when I get home i've got a scalpel in my eye ouchy!!

By the way I think we should get this copyrighted straight away or I bet we'll soon see this on the big screen lol. I can see the reviews now, 'incrediblely hard to follow but stay with it as the complex story unfolds and it all becomes clear, oscar performances all round'. lol


I think that if some of our anchor writers who are good with storyline could pull this together, it would be truly magnificent. I'd sure go to see it!!!

I'm kind of thinking of it as a Buffy meets Strek Trek meets Love Boat adventure that keeps entering Bermuda in a reincarnation kind of cycle- and whoah! I just hope I can write an entertaining scene even if I'm just as lost on this voyage as everyone else. Too many interesting things happening- interesting characters. I love it!!!

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Quoted from Sandra Elstree.


I think that if some of our anchor writers who are good with storyline could pull this together, it would be truly magnificent. I'd sure go to see it!!!

I'm kind of thinking of it as a Buffy meets Strek Trek meets Love Boat adventure that keeps entering Bermuda in a reincarnation kind of cycle- and whoah! I just hope I can write an entertaining scene even if I'm just as lost on this voyage as everyone else. Too many interesting things happening- interesting characters. I love it!!!

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I just realized I made a pun: Anchor Writers: Get it?! Anchor?!!!




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Nic! You can't kill a ghost. In the interest of no rewrites we'll move on.   This scene will be expected to be some sort of illusion.  The tracksheet does not change. The  next person who goes will be expected to remedy this situation.  Yohn is up next.  Instead of a character scene he has a murder scene.
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I am worried I may have confused Nik with having Yohn still looking for Gabriel. Yohn does not know he is dead and is still looking for him (that is what I gathered from previous posts anyway). If that is the case sorry Nik, you probably should have waited until after class to read it. When I was in school we used to draw pictures of naked women in class* can't believe you are writing scripts!

*Of course I had not idea what a naked woman actually looked like back then, we used to just guess. When the time came I was more than a little disappointed to discover women only actually had 2 breasts.
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Sorry guys, i didn't mean to kill Gabriel, but believe it or not the tracksheet i had on my computer had him alive...

So i did that way.

Hope that's not a problem.



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So Cornetto, I hope that you delete your internet cache on a regular basis? The last thing you need is somebody else finding tracks of a google image search for "naked sailors"

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Well we can change the name of Gabriel and put another character - i still want to kill Yohn as a matter of fact hehe. Even though i don't know if it's good.



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No rewrites Nik.  Sorry.  

And GM, How is it that you knew exactly what I searched for?  I think someone else better do some cache purging. lol.
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Quoted from Sandra Elstree.
The visuals were excellent with the bullet that ricochets off Ste's crotch and heads towards the crystal. I could easily see this happening slow mo.

Sandra


All I can say is Ste must have balls of steel for a bullet to ricochet off of them and up to his belt buckle!   It might work in reverse at least. tee hee

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haha balls of steel. It's dark magic...that's my explanation. Either that or he's a robot hell bent on destroying humans who take luxury cruises.
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Oops...it was a crystal, not a belt buckle   I remember Sandra crying out...NO! NO!


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Well now I'm really confused? People nearly dying and now people dying twice lol.


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All I can say is Ste must have balls of steel for a bullet to ricochet off of them and up to his belt buckle!   It might work in reverse at least. tee hee

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LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I meant to say belt buckle-- I guess I couldn't help but look down!




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Ste has balls of steal? Maybe he is from the north east of England so you never know. It's strange in a script where most characters are losing their clothes, Ste hasn't. I say strange because Geordies don't usually wear shirts unless it's absolutely necassary.


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haha balls of steel. It's dark magic...that's my explanation. Either that or he's a robot hell bent on destroying humans who take luxury cruises.


Shoot!!! That's all we need now are robots! I can't stop laughing! It's Gabriel with his laugh inducing powers! He's died twice... poor Alffy's been stabbed in the crotch and in the eye!! Yohn can't keep his mustache straight- Dana tries like hell to get out of THE ROOM, and now she's tryin' like hell to get back in- Cornetto's running around naked!!! T Joe's the only normal one around here-- and he's got NARCOLEPSY!!!!!!! HA-HA-HA!!!!!

Please help me!!!! This may be a crazy ride, but I've loved every minute of it.

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and he's got NARCOLEPSY


This has to be the best way of explaining why a character hasn't done anything or gone anywhere for a while during the story lol. Pure genius in my eyes.


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This has to be the best way of explaining why a character hasn't done anything or gone anywhere for a while during the story lol. Pure genius in my eyes.


Absolutely, and someone now needs to draw up a scene with him about to shoot someone and he falls asleep just before pulling the trigger or plunging the blade!




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I see that killing Gabriel twice wasn't a good thing to do by me, but I thought he was alive.

Well, do you still like the scene even if we killed him twice?



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Yes, Nik.  I liked the scene.  I thought you did a nice job creating the atmosphere and story.   I understand that because of technical reasons you had the wrong tracksheet.

However, there was another rule issue with this scene even besides killing Gabriel a second time.  It was not clear who the killer was.

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It was not clear who the killer was.


I don't think this is a problem. DANA KILLED HIM. But the camera was used by Nik to kill the people in the photos.




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Oh. Ok. I see how Dana killed him. Clever. I didn't really notice that until you told me.   I thought the bullet came from elsewhere. Sorry.
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Oh. Ok. I see how Dana killed him. Clever. I didn't really notice that until you told me.   I thought the bullet came from elsewhere. Sorry.


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And I was able to vomit the posion so it didn't have any effect. lol.


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WHOA!! Captain you are HOT!! Hahaha!!  

I'm naked again? And I killed Mistress Morgan?
Who will I sink my teeth into next?  I'm not picky. Just so you know.  


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Ste has balls of steal? Maybe he is from the north east of England so you never know. It's strange in a script where most characters are losing their clothes, Ste hasn't. I say strange because Geordies don't usually wear shirts unless it's absolutely necassary.



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I think I killed Mistress Morgan by smashing her with the handle bars from the wave runner that were handcuffed to my wrists?  She tried to kill me because she thought I killed her sister (my x wife) by handcuffing me to a wave runner and lowering me into the ocean.  I somehow used my bulk and powered out by breaking the handle bars off the wave runner.

Zadora, you merely drank her blood and maybe did some other mystical stuff to her dead body.

Isn't that right?  Or am I missing what happened?
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...and maybe did some other mystical stuff to her dead body.


That's one way of putting it.

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I'm into necrophilia now?
And drink expired blood?
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Sounds like it...and all while you're magnificantly naked!

If I'm worng, someone please let us know.  Obviously, this is hard to follow and confusing as Hell!  Everyone is posting so fast, it's almost impossible to keep tack.

Great job everyone!  And congrats again to our magnificantly still naked Cornetto!!!
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Dreamscale - you are correct in your description of events that have taken place.
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Thank you Captain.

Your post sounds very robotic...hmmm...maybe as someone suggested earlier...there are some robots onboard now as well as the clones and ghosts.  What more can we bring into the fold?
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Hate to ruin the naked parade...but our Countess is dressed.  She was naked, fighting in the sauna when the captain took her to help him carry Morgan's body to room 402.  She was dressed, magically in seconds.  There's really not much the countess can't do.

Don't worry too much Zadora...I was only dead a mere few minutes and my body was still warm.

However...by the looks of our captain...he is still unclothed, running around with just a hat on   What a pleasant picture!


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Thank you Captain.

Your post sounds very robotic...hmmm...maybe as someone suggested earlier...there are some robots onboard now as well as the clones and ghosts.  What more can we bring into the fold?


Oo-ooh!!! Pick me! Pick me! I know! I know!




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Thank you Mistress..you are correct.  Zadora has put her clothes on...for now.  I have this strange feeling that she will soon be magnificantly naked again once again.

As I said earlier...if I have my way, everyone will be naked and magnificant!
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Thank you. A fully clothed necrophiliac sipping expired blood sounds so much better than a naked one.  


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I'm not sure we'd all agree with that...

Zadora...you will be nude again...soon...very soon...
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Not a robot, just back to work after a four day weekend - so I kind of feel like one.

Zadora not nude?  How can this be?!
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I've got a "life rope".  Whoo!


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I've got a "life rope".  Whoo!


Used to tie people up!



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Used to tie people up!



I prefer to choke people with it.


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Actually Zadora is naked, in the script I wrote...



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Actually Zadora is naked, in the script I wrote...




Things are bound to get kinky- ghosts, clones, vampires, robots and all! (Oh sorry, did I miss out on any faction?)

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I thought Zadora was naked in yours because you didn't follow that she had put clothes on in the portion I wrote GM Seems like everyone wants her naked...so the majority rules!




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No word from Yohn yet.  If we don't hear from him by tomorrow morning -- my time -- then that will be 24 hrs and we'll postpone his turn.  More than likely we will hear from him but just getting us prepared.  
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I'm here, and will have something up by tonight!
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No worries.  Thank you for checking in Yohn.
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Just to confirm, I'm to write a murder scene, right?
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Excellent!

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Excellent!

*Rubs hands together whilst laughing manically*


Why don't you try killing me for a second time. I did it in my scene. haha.

What are you guys talking about naked things wooooooooo.



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yeaaah. Nudity all around. It's natural, it's okay, but then again..it might be cold.


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Next part is up.  Sorry for the delay, had a hectic day but I was determined not to miss my go.

Hope it satisfies.
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Nicely done Yohn. Lots of suspense In that one.  I'm not sure who was killed though.  I guess becoming undead sort of counts but...?

Sandra is up next, so everybody fasten their seatbelts.  It's going to be a bumpy night.
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Oh boy...here we go!  I predict pyramid portal openers, clones, ghosts, and...hey, whatever happened to all those clones?  Where'd they go?  I bet we're about to find out...

Go for it Sandra!

Nice job Yohn.  I was waiting for T Joe to fall asleep sometime soon, and you picked a great time for it.
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Yohn, the man! The man that can!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!! Thank you for writing in the scene with T Joe falling asleep!!!! I so wanted to see that!!!!

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Ok. I don't want anyone to be confused this late in the game so here's how it's going to look on the sheet, along with some rules for the undead thing.

Dana will be considered not alive on the trackhsheet.

Dana and Morgan can be encountered individually but follow normal vampire rules.  Essentially, they should be considered part of the Zadora's character.  If Zadora goes then they go too.

Cheers,

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Ok. I don't want anyone to be confused this late in the game so here's how it's going to look on the sheet, along with some rules for the undead thing.

Dana will be considered not alive on the trackhsheet.

Dana and Morgan can be encountered individually but follow normal vampire rules.  Essentially, they should be considered part of the Zadora's character.  If Zadora goes then they go too.

Cheers,

Michael  


I love how you're trying to rationalize this: Normal Vampire Rules!!!



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Okay... I admit that I have not stayed on top of this. I've been busy. I'll read through the KG thread tomorrow, but right now I'm very confused.

When is my next turn? I hope it's not until next week because I won't have time to write anything until then.

Geez!!!  Naked people and vampires everywhere...  Is this true?




If so, I LOVE it!!  


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Ooooh Kay.  I think Sandra has climaxed.  She should be coming down now.

I'm not sure who's dead in that one.  Is it my character?  I think so.   Anyone think anything different.  I'd sure like to know. Help.  

Orange is up next.  May the boss have mercy on her soul crystal.  

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I think we should try to keep the story simple... Maybe it's just me, but I feel lost at sea...


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Ooooh Kay.  I think Sandra has climaxed.  She should be coming down now.

I'm not sure who's dead in that one.  Is it my character?  I think so.   Anyone think anything different.  I'd sure like to know. Help.  

Orange is up next.  May the boss have mercy on her soul crystal.  



Yes my dear one, you were certainly chop-chopped by a zombie! Add zombies to the ghosts, clones and vampires! LOL

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When's my turn?

I need to know so I can study this first.


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When's my turn?

I need to know so I can study this first.


I think it's really soon Pia.



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Whoa Nelly!  Sandra my dear...you are a creative one and I just have to laugh...where the hell is all this coming from???????

I feel like I fell downthe rabbit hole and I can't get out! *wink*

I thought Cornetto died too...but then I wasn't sure...maybe it's my simple mind...but I am lost at sea.........

~m~


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Whoa Nelly!  Sandra my dear...you are a creative one and I just have to laugh...where the hell is all this coming from???????

I feel like I fell downthe rabbit hole and I can't get out! *wink*

I thought Cornetto died too...but then I wasn't sure...maybe it's my simple mind...but I am lost at sea.........

~m~


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Sandra, I would love a bag of whatever it is you have.
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Sandra, I would love a bag of whatever it is you have.


You give me a bag of what you've got, and I'll give you some coffee and we'll call it even.

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I feel like I fell downthe rabbit hole and I can't get out! *wink*


I think I'm the one that fell down the rabbit hole.

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I think I'm the one that fell down the rabbit hole.

The track sheet is updated and emails are sent.


You DID! You fell through the floor down to the Dream Engine Room!

Well, ... at least you got to change your avatar!

Big Hugs and Love to you Michael and all of our Cast!

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Sandra,

That was a nice written part you had there. It made me laugh at the scene where me and Gabriel wave at the audience. That was one hell of a good element.

It is good to see you moved the story forward with the ghost things - since i messed it up, killing Gabriel for a second time. But your part gives my part a sense hehehe.

Well done.

Michael, what's this thing with you avatars. No matter how much you struggle my avatar is the best

See, Sandra? Joker is clapping his hands congratulating about your wonderful part. Also it's clapping for Michael who came up with this Killer Game idea.

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My lovely Dana, you wrote your part so fast. I liked it. Actually it reminded me of Ste's character, and i'm waiting for Ste's turn. C'mon Ste.

I enjoyed it Dana, and i still can't believe how good this game is coming out.

Ohh, Joker is clapping for you too.



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Nicely done Dana.  I appreciate you getting us back on track.  I loved the reveal with Zadora.  

I am definitely down the rabbit hole.  But it looks like I'm not dead yet.  I just going to let you guys go with it. We will take care of these extra bodies.

Bush is up next and let's just hope that he doesn't fall down that rabbit hole too.

EDIT: Tracksheet is updated and emails are sent.

Because of the rule I made earlier about Dana and Morgan being an extension of Zadora's character I had to count  the kill for Zadora.  I just thought that was the only fair thing to do.  Everyone ok with that?    

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Michael, I don't think the tracksheet's updated for me. Still showing Yohn being next and everyone's off to the bar.


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Michael, I don't think the tracksheet's updated for me. Still showing Yohn being next and everyone's off to the bar.


That's why Gabriel got killed twice. I had the same problem.



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Try refreshing the page.  If that doesn't work you can clear your browser cache.  You can also always get the current tracksheet at http://www.freewebs.com/mixelpixel/tracksheet.jpg
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Nicely done Dana.  I appreciate you getting us back on track.  I loved the reveal with Zadora.  

I am definitely down the rabbit hole.  But it looks like I'm not dead yet.  I just going to let you guys go with it. We will take care of these extra bodies.

Bush is up next and let's just hope that he doesn't fall down that rabbit hole too.

EDIT: Tracksheet is updated and emails are sent.

Because of the rule I made earlier about Dana and Morgan being an extension of Zadora's character I had to count  the kill for Zadora.  I just thought that was the only fair thing to do.  Everyone ok with that?    


Michael, ...

You are our darling and no matter what stuff we pull on you...

I will bow down and worship you!!!!


Love and big Kavana!!!!

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Crap!  Micheal put his closes back on, fell down the rabbit hole and now he IS a Rabbit! Not just any rabbit mind you...but a bunny rabbit that is skipping along!

Great job Dana...although I think with the way Dana and Zadora have been circling each other throughout this exercise, it would have made more sense had their been some play on this earlier...but I like the premise for sure...

Sorry about my logical brain... lol


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Wow, I'm literally speechless after Sandra's post.  There were a number of words I'm not even familiar with...is it just me?  Simply wild!  I actually think there's some interesting and good writing here, but really, really whacked out.  There definitely must be something in that Albertan air...

Amazingly quick post, Dana...adn well done also.  Someinteresting new angles here. I do agree with MBC though that this new backstory doesn't really make any sense based on what's been said earlier.  I do like it though...it just needs to be inserted much earlier.  Good job though!

OK, so now it's back to me.  We've had some cold winds blowing down from Canada lately.  Something seems to be taking over my mind...my thoughts...my...

Get ready for the return of the Pyramid Portal Opener...

Watch as the Dream Engine kicks into high gear...

Sit back and sing along as the entire cast comes out for salty versions of "Edelweiss" and "The Sound of Music".

And prepare yourselves to be amazed as the SS Craven sprouts wings and flies off into the Heavens...

(What do you think of that, Sandra?)

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Well I think that's generally one of the downfalls of this kind of exercise, you can't really go back and add in foreshadowing and other little hints. But i think given what we have so far it works fine *shrugs*
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Sweet baby Jesus, what's going on here? I'm now past confused and entered a realm much deeper...probably somewhere in Sandra's head, so there's no coming back lol.

Yohn, great writing, it was very funny.

Sandra, what can I say, you've outdone yourself again. What a weird and wonderful life you must live in, perhaps you should visit us sometime lol. Only joking, I actually thought it was great.

Dana, nicely done. Bringing things back into focus.

Things are motoring now but I'm also worried about when my turn is, if I have another? I'm at a wedding on Saturday so I might be pushed to write anything. Unless of course I can get a seat at the back of the church and sneak my laptop in. Don't think I can afford to miss a day without checking in.


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Alffy, you already had your second turn a while ago. Enjoy the wedding.  But whatever you do, be careful of rabbit holes.
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I was wondering about another go because I thought we only got two goes each but there's still seems much more to go. I'll be sure to watch out for rabbit holes too. What's your avatar from? Is it Peter Rabbit or something? Kinda reminds me of 'Watership Down' too. That film just makes me cry like a baby though lol. There's only so many times you can use the 'no, it's just something in my eye' routine.


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Dana, I loved the slip into the back story of Dana and Zadora and the transition from this into the bar with the light!

Alffy, the rabbit is from Alice in Wonderland

Dreamscale, I love what you might have planned!

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Nicely done Yohn. Lots of suspense In that one.  I'm not sure who was killed though.  I guess becoming undead sort of counts but...?

Sandra is up next, so everybody fasten their seatbelts.  It's going to be a bumpy night.


Yeah I thought I'd go a different route and make someone undead rather than dead-dead.  Hope that hasn't messed things up too much.  I just liked the idea of three hot and mostly naked vampiresses roaming around the ship! I was going for a three brides of Dracula vibe!

I love your writing Sandra, and would love to read more of your work.  Though some may see it as 'flowery' I'm greatly entertained by it!

Great installment Orange! I like the back story with Dana and Zadora.  Yet another twist in this already twisted maritime fable!

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Alffy, the rabbit is from Alice in Wonderland


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Alffy, you already had your second turn a while ago. Enjoy the wedding.  But whatever you do, be careful of rabbit holes.


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OK, here it is!  Everyone is magnificently naked, and we've got a new problem to deal with.  I wanted to bring Zadora and Morgan into the mix, but pretty much ran out of room.

Hope you all enjoy!
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Vampire sharks.  And I thought I'd seen everything.  

Well, Bush that was a nicely done second turn.

Ripley is up next --

Believe it --

Or not.  
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I'm still alive??!!

I know you people are afraid of me!  

Nice one Jeff... Don't look behind you....

I'm disappointed Ripley's not around anymore. I had planned to extract money from him. Oh well.


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This is completely entertaining!!! I love it!!! Vampire sharks!!!! This Killer's got to get made into a movie. You know, I'm thinking about how businesses and inventions happen and they become successes and you know what the people often say when asked, "How did you come up with the idea?" A lot of times they answer, "Well, you know actually, it started out on a lark. My buddy and me we were having a few drinks and..."

The script would obviously need work, but I would love to see it; so it goes to show you we've obviously got talent aboard.

Now what I'm imagining is that Zadora has REASON FOR REVENGE!!!

Nice and juicy!!!!

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A vampric jaws. How fascinating. lol.

I wanted to pop in here so no one thinks I've disappeared. I'm going to think about this and probably enter a post tonight or tomorrow latest.  


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Love the word "vampiric"...I wanted to use it, but it came up as a non word, so I decided not to throw it in.  Damn...I'll use it next time, cause it sounds very cool.

Keep your old friend, Bush, alive Mr. Ripley...please?  Remember, we go way back.  Clean out those damn Ladies of the Night!

Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.  It's alot of fun...alot more fun than I anticipated for sure.

Good job Captain Rabbit!
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Love the word "vampiric"...I wanted to use it, but it came up as a non word, so I decided not to throw it in.  Damn...I'll use it next time, cause it sounds very cool.

Keep your old friend, Bush, alive Mr. Ripley...please?  Remember, we go way back.  Clean out those damn Ladies of the Night!

Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.  It's alot of fun...alot more fun than I anticipated for sure.

Good job Captain Rabbit!


Bush, just because it's a non word- doesn't mean you can't use it. Take a look at the evolution of language. I like good grammar and spelling, but I'm not so pedantic to restrict my thinking in such a way that "just because it's been this way, it should stay this way". For example: LOL It's not a word, or is it? That could be debated.

I think "vampiric" is an excellent word.

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Sandra, my dear, I agree whole heartedly.  I have no problem bucking the system, as you might know.  I had it in there, and I did several checks on it, and I got a bunch of "no, no, no's".  My bad, as I love the way it sounds...and reads.

I doubt I'll have another shot at it, but you can bet your Pyramid Portal Opener that I'll throw that word out there first chance I get...but then again, I won't be able to use that "word" unless I'm writing a "vampiric" script.

Hey, seriously, I puposely threw a bunch of whacky stuff in here for you, girl!  I love your whacky imagination, and I will continue to jest about your Albertan herbage.  Hope you liked the crazy turn of events.  I wanted to bring back some of your "creations", but I didn't see the way, or the light, so to speak.

We'll see what becomes of our beloved 3 pants too small Captain, lying below deck, quivering from whatever ails him...other than a probable broken back.

Let's hope that Alffy continues with teh same zany, crazy shit going down.

You do realize, I hope, that at this point, every single character, be they alive or undead, is completely and magificantly butt-ass naked!!!  How could one ever think it could turn out this way?

Funny stuff for sure...
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Okay...thought since everyone is supposed to be naked I should be as well   No doubt the Countess and I are naked and looking for blood and revenge.  

Good job there Bush!  You had me laughing many a time...I throw my hands in the air and just give up...no logic needed anymore...we now have a mako vampire shark, so all things logical are thrown out the window...or at least overboard!

This is indeed a very entertaining collaborative effort...I'm in...the question...how will it end...or will it ever really end...that is the true question!

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Okay...thought since everyone is supposed to be naked I should be as well   No doubt the Countess and I are naked and looking for blood and revenge.  

Good job there Bush!  You had me laughing many a time...I throw my hands in the air and just give up...no logic needed anymore...we now have a mako vampire shark, so all things logical are thrown out the window...or at least overboard!

This is indeed a very entertaining collaborative effort...I'm in...the question...how will it end...or will it ever really end...that is the true question!

Vampire Morgan


I don't think this can end. I love you guys so much and it's really something special to work with you all.

This has been a karmic experience for sure. (As Yohn would say) Note to self: Dont' try and explain "Karmic" falling through floors to a weird Dream Generator is enough.

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Tracksheet is updated and emails are sent.  We are really getting close to the end here only four more turns and three more characters to go.
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At least i went out with a BANG!....vampire sharks ftw
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At least i went out with a BANG!....vampire sharks ftw


I hear that! Kick-ass way to go! ...AND butt-nekked to boot!

Note to self: 100th post! Yay me!
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I like the way the word sounds too. Vampiric.

I actually learned alot through this experience. thanks guys. Hopefully it shows in my upcoming script.


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Entry entered. It's a bit small but I didn't want to expound on many things. Besides, keeping track of the characters locations had me confused. lol.


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It is a bit smallish.

What's the shark doing while they're all enjoying their nudity?
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Ripley...I was so looking forward to your entry...there just isn't a lot here...but I suppose you were short on time...I do like Zadora...she is in position to be the winner here unless something happens.  Cornetto has something special in his pocket...so he needs to find his own pants instead of the ones he's wearing that are too small and someone dirtied! yuk!

Bush...where are those handcuffs when you need them!  I suppose that's the price of getting naked!

The ship's course is set...where are they going...wherever it is - it cannot be undone! lol  

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I'm wondering with the ever reducing cast, if the rules for the murder scenes can be changed? Do we still have to have two characters alone?

Good job by the way Gabe. I feel a battle is about to commence in the jacuzzi! haha


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I'm trying to keep things simple. I could have easily confused the readers by adding alot of details. But I'm trying to cut that down in my writing. So I decided to go for short, simple, and broad. I didn't want to show favorites between Bush or Ste or constrict the other writer in what to do next.  

I'm interested in how the next writer will handle the fight. lol. That's going to be funny.    

About the shark, I really didn't think about it much. She could be Zadora's pet after the fight? lol.


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Well it's a bit neck and neck at the moment. (get it 'bit neck')

Good job Gabe - don't worry about the size - they tell me it doesn't matter.  It's how you use it that counts and I think you did a good job of beginning the wrap up in your post.

Though I am a bit pissed off because I lost the 5 buck that I had on a T. Joe win.  

Just kidding - it was two bucks.  

Just kidding again - I'm no gambler.

Ste Brown is up next.  And I certainly am not going to bet on whether he is he going to choose the naked man or the naked woman. Questions of that nature are best left to the individuals involved and should only be talked about in hushed voices.

I'll post the updated tracksheet soon.  

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Well done Gabe.

Now it's Ste turn. Finally, let's see if Ste as well is addict to nudists



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Poor T Joe. Ah well, I can see him hangin' in there, ready to fall onto another  ledge and neatly into a new life.

Good job Gabriel, I loved the "head knock". Fabulous stuff!!!

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I'm trying to keep things simple. I could have easily confused the readers by adding alot of details. But I'm trying to cut that down in my writing. So I decided to go for short, simple, and broad. I didn't want to show favorites between Bush or Ste or constrict the other writer in what to do next.  

I'm interested in how the next writer will handle the fight. lol. That's going to be funny.    

About the shark, I really didn't think about it much. She could be Zadora's pet after the fight? lol.


I think that's an excellent idea!!!! Make the shark Zadora's pet!! That would be fun!!!



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Michael, Their at the sunbed terrace not at the jacuzzi. But it's close by...I don't know anymore. lol. That was part of why I made the entry so short and simple. The locations were driving me crazy. Not like I'm not after going on this boat trip. lol.

Can't wait for your entry Ste. Sorry for putting you in a bad position to fight. Lol. Hope you make it out alive.  


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I say Ste and I join forces and kill that blood sucker once and for all!  We've got some drinking to do anyway...

BTW, how is Zadora laying out on a recliner, naked as a jaybird, enjoying the sun, anyway?  The sun has got to be taking its toll on her pale-ass body.
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Michael, Their at the sunbed terrace not at the jacuzzi.


Oops! Sorry Gabe.  I'll let Ste know.


STE!!! THEY'RE AT THE SUNBED TERRACE - NOT THE JACUZZI!!!

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She's no ordinary vamp. She's one of the first one. lol.

I don't think he heard you Michael. Shout it out more.


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What was that Michael? Didn't quite hear ya pal.

I'm at work tomorrow...yeah, a Saturday!? But I'll get my part written at some point tomorrow. Maybe while I'm waiting for the Calazaghe fight...it's a late one.

I say naked wrestling! haha


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This is how I envision the Gabriel character:

(n)http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vyJD1ZZmjxA&feature=related(n)

(Jude Law - The Holiday)

...and I think the peace of mind he's looking for in this segment is the same peace of mind each character aboard the ship is looking for.

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This was why I thought Bert might have been thought way too above the normal thoughts of his day:

(n)http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8v_2wlhOXLI(n)

I imagined him like this person talking.

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that is not the bert that appears in my fanta... mind!!

I'm amazed I'm still alive. Too bad I don't get to kill someone in my next turn. I would've loved to.  


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Sandra,

that is not the bert that appears in my fanta... mind!!

I'm amazed I'm still alive. Too bad I don't get to kill someone in my next turn. I would've loved to.  


That's ok though Pia, just go with what you feel in your heart. In this particular exercise, I think that was the idea because there were no clear rules defined at the outset. In the next game, we'll try and work more within a specific genre because I think we know that that's where we need to aim in the next work.

Go for it though girl!!!! Don't hold back!!!

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I enjoyed this discussion and I felt that somehow our "Bert character" is in this dialogue and I didn't want to make him a total nutcase mad scientist. I wanted to make him into a good man who maybe went a little too far-- pushed the edge.

(n)http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ml0FqyFYfrU&feature=related(n)

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Sandra...

I'm not known to be one that holds back!  


You're a good girl!!! Sorry, "good vampire" LOL.

This will be so much fun to see play out!!!

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I've been researching Dr. Francis Collins as a blueprint for Bert. I was very interested to find that:

Raised on a small farm in Virginia's Shenandoah Valley, Francis Sellers Collins was home-schooled by his mother until the sixth grade. He attended Robert E. Lee High School. He is the youngest of four sons, which includes his brother, Dr. Fletcher Collins, who currently holds the title of "Assistant Head of Middle School" and "Director of Curriculum" at Collegiate School in Richmond, Virginia.

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I'm very interested here because I home-schooled my children as well. All are very successful. My middle daughter, pursuing an arts degree, recently received over $5,000 dollars in scholarships.

If one were to take the "Bert" character in this vein, it might be an entirely different movie.

Again, I'm just playing with thought- such an interesting exersise this has been!!!

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Quoted from Sandra Elstree.
...our "Bert character"...I didn't want to make him a total nutcase mad scientist.


Too late, babe.  Those that know me well would completely concur with this description.

So I finally had a chance to catch up on my reading tonight.  Some interesting turns, indeed.

As with my last turn, I would not neglect Sandra's post.  Wacky and hallucinogenic -- sure -- but there are interesting fragments there.

I am also a fan of the shark.  Stupid?  Sure.  But fun.

I also regret Alffy's passing.  I had hoped to have my own chance for a bit of editorializing on his troublsome package.  Too bad.

So -- Ste, Pia, and Bush are all that remain -- and curiously, Ste and Pia are the next two remaining turns.  It will be interesting to see what they do.

But the last turn is mine.  And it's a kill.  Be warned.


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Wonder if Mr. Brown has fallen asleep. Must be pretty late in England about now.
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Something must be causing a disturbance in his agenda. He said he had to work today, but that he would get on it tonight, (that's tomorrow over there). He's probably working on it right now I bet.

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Ste probs got caught up in the Calzaghe fight but I'm sure he'll post soon...I mean who could lose interest in this now? It's gone completely nuts! Vampire sharks!! Amazing.

Missed out on the discussion board yesterday but I've soon caught up, wondering who they can possibly cast now with all the nakedness, not too many actors will feel comfortable lol.


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Working on it now folks, sorry for the delay. My local club won in the FA. Cup yesterday so a lot of drinking last night. White russians, Vodka and Johnny Daniels mixes, doesn't it?


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Posted. Forgive me if it's a little short and shit...I'm still quite drunk!


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Hey Ste,

You must still be drunk if you tried to turn on the sunbed.  I think by sunbed they mean deckchairs.  But I think we get what you were aiming at.  Poor roast Zadora - I think she got a bit overdone.  

I figured you would go after her anyway.  It's her turn next.  I wonder how she'll take her revenge.  There are crueler fates than death.

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I too thought of sunbeds as the things you get a tan under, I think it's a British thing. We call deck chairs....deck chairs actually or sun loungers.

Oh and Ste, white russians...nice! Love them too but they get me cained too easy.


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Nice job Ste!!!  Glad we joined forces.  Also glad you were hammered...nothing wrong with that!

Only question is, how did it go from early morning to moonlight?

Love the "warcray and spinning windmill attack.

I'm surprised my Mako never came back into play.

Looking froward to seeing what happens.  
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Working on it now folks, sorry for the delay. My local club won in the FA. Cup yesterday so a lot of drinking last night. White russians, Vodka and Johnny Daniels mixes, doesn't it?


I like White Russians too...but always forget about that drink until someone mentions them...you can drink a few of those...and then I think it's Jack Daniels...I've had many a fun times that I can barely remember while hanging with "Jack"

I liked this...it's possible that they had a tanning bed on the sundeck...whatever the case...what a great way to kill a vampire...

Sounds like the MMA has a new move...."The Windmill Punch"   (kind of like the "Flying Superman" or the "Spinning Back Fist" punch)  *wink

Good job Ste...hope your head feels okay today

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Ste, I absolutely love the idea of "Why can't we be friends' playing against a fight scene!

I think with Dana's comment explaining "why" Zadora was out in the sun (heavy duty SPF) as written into prior dialogue would be excellent. Not a "real" explanation, but a fun one.

Dying in a sunbed was an excellent idea I think!!!

You've made my morning with this scene.

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Only question is, how did it go from early morning to moonlight?

  


That's an easy one!!! The Bermuda Triangle time overlapping thingy! LOL

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I'm surprised my Mako never came back into play.



In my mind, the shark is still there, with a Scooby doo, "Rooby rooby roo!" He's attracted to some kind of Shark treats! Ann thus has lost interest in fighting for now.

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Hey Ste,

You must still be drunk if you tried to turn on the sunbed.  I think by sunbed they mean deckchairs.  But I think we get what you were aiming at.  


I just imagined here that a sunbed (a tanning bed like at the salons) was out on the deck. Who knows why? I think the answer to that is that furniture and stuff around the ship kept shifting because of the time overlaps. Yeah, that's it. The bar has beds and gym equipment and the gym has a good set up for drinking. And stuff from the beauty salon is out on the deck.

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I like White Russians too...but always forget about that drink until someone mentions them


That's strange, I usually forget things after drinking them lol.


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Pleased you liked it Sandra, it was either going to be a sunbed or alcohol poisoning from drinking my blood haha.

My head's fine now. Burritos and soft drinks work a charm!


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I just decided to start drinking again...that works also...
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Wow, the story turned a bit odd did it not? Where is the shark now? very funny!!

I have had the most miserable weekend camping on what was supposed to be sub-tropical island but a thunderstorm put paid to that. Reading this on Sunday morning lifted my mood somewhat.

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A far as I know, the shark is still in the Jacuzzi...maybe it's dead now?  Who knows.
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I'm not going to be gentle with you Stephen! I can live with being fried on a tanning bed, but ramming your fist into the face and kicking the head of an old woman...  

I should have something later today or tomorrow. I'm pretty busy today, but I'll try.  


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Hey now Ste!  I thought we were a team there bud?  Don't be throwing me under the bus.

Countess Zadora...no revenge is necessary.  Remember that I got you a pet vampire shark for an early Christmas present!  I thought the two of you could enjoy lots of good times.

Looking forward to seeing how this is going to wrap up.  Great job all!
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I think the pet shark died...our lives (Morgan and Orange) hinged on Countess Zadora winning...as Cornetto mentioned in an earlier post...if someone takes out Zadora, then the other vampires are done too

However...dead or not...our Countess gets to draw the last blood!  

By the way...whatever happened to Cornetto wallowing around on the floor below when he fell through a metal floor on a ship??? Nothing was mentioned of him again...

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Funny how the last few entries are taking almost as long as the rest of the game.  I'm going to have to work something in to increase the incentive at this point in the game.
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Do you mean I should post something quick?

I was trying to figure something out that would tie loose ends together and it might be a longer post...

I think the later in the game we are, posts should take longer... no?  


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It was not a criticism, just an observation about the last few entries.  You should, of course, take the time you need to give the end appropriate justice.
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Do you mean I should post something quick?

I was trying to figure something out that would tie loose ends together and it might be a longer post...

I think the later in the game we are, posts should take longer... no?  


I think this is to be expected. It's a very common thing that happens in our writing- outline or not I think.

We begin with a "full speed ahead" kind of attitude. We're in love with characters- the whole thing is entertaining and exciting, but somewhere along the line, we have to face the facts... And because we were "as a group" having different visions of this, we were left in a muddle; so our only redemption is A VAMPIRE!!!!

I think that there is a "Vampire Consulting Firm" in the Other World, and they know all the ins and outs of life by virtue of the fact that they are able to live so long before reincarnating.

Perhaps Zadora works at The Firm as an "Eric Brockovich" and is able to settle all scores with her uncanny wit and wisdom!!!

I love your avatar Pia!!!

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I think...to Pia's credit...that we all got a little spoiled because our posts were going up much faster than the 48 hour limit requirement.

She admitted that she was busy...so I'm waiting on pins and needles for her entry and to see who is left standing...who knows...maybe one will be left sitting

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I think...to Pia's credit...that we all got a little spoiled because our posts were going up much faster than the 48 hour limit requirement.

She admitted that she was busy...so I'm waiting on pins and needles for her entry and to see who is left standing...who knows...maybe one will be left sitting

Go Pia!



The pins and needles have been generated and it's exciting to see how Pia will traverse this crazy kingdom and work through the muddle that has resulted. I am really excited to learn how she will pull us out of it!!!

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Do you mean I should post something quick?


I agree.

Some of the posts seemed a bit rushed -- with continuity tossed to the wind -- and they might have benefitted from at least a few more hours(?) on the drawing board.  I never understood what the big rush was.

That, and life outside the boards will intrude -- at least, from time to time.

Take your time, Pia.


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I must admit, having not visited the boards yesterday I thought the S.S.Craven would have indeed run it's course by now. The posts were flying up and sometimes perhaps a little too quick. I don't envy you Pia, you got to somehow tie things together when it's going a stray, good luck.


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I never understood what the big rush was.


It's important to have the deadline.  Things don't get done if people don't have deadlines.  It certainly would be quite different doing this exercise if we had to wait a week between posts or say we had no deadline and someone wanted to take a year.  I'm willing to extend the time for posting from 48 to 72 hours - if everyone wants that but, I think, no longer.  And after that period I will enforce moving on to the next turn.

I'm sorry if it seems like I'm coming down on Pia about this because I know she is very busy right now but if Pia didn't have time to do this there were other arrangements that were discussed and could have been made.  Pia chose to take this turn and she knows the rules - you all know the rules. I'm here to enforce them for you and I will do that whether it makes me a monster or not - even if I piss off a couple of people because I cancel Pia's turn.  

I let you have a lot of leeway with this game as far as creativity was concerned but the rules that I provided are there for a reason and I do expect them to be followed.  
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It's important to have the deadline.  Things don't get done if people don't have deadlines.


Don't get me wrong, Cap'n C.  I agree, and think you have been doing a good job of keeping things organized.

My point is that if you have 24 hours -- or 48, or whatever it was -- I did not understand why some people felt compelled to pound something out in an hour or two and post it up straight away.

At one point there were, like, 3 or 4 the same day, I believe -- and sometimes important details that had gone before were completely disregarded.

My only point was to encourage those that participate in your next go-round to take the time to study the previous posts -- and let their creativity simmer a bit -- without imposing some arbitrary self-imposed deadline on themselves.

Enthusiasm is great, but nobody is going to gripe if you sleep on your contribution -- and read through it again the next day before you toss it up.


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Gasp!!!

I feel stressed now!

I did read through the whole thing today (took a looooong time) trying to get a handle on everything so I could tie up a few ends... there were quite a few.

I was too busy today to write mine though. We were busy at work which is good and takes priority over anything else and then we spent the afternoon and early evening recording some stuff for the Doritos commercial I'm attempting to submit for the Doritos Superbowl contest. Wish me luck!

I will definitely have something written before the end of tomorrow. Sorry I'm taking so long.    


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Quoted from bert

My point is that if you have 24 hours -- or 48, or whatever it was -- I did not understand why some people felt compelled to pound something out in an hour or two and post it up straight away.

I think that is because I slanted the game toward quick posts.  This is our first try at this - it's going to be illogical - always is when people do this sort of thing the first time.  So honestly - I thought - the best goal to aim for was to finish.  

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At one point there were, like, 3 or 4 the same day, I believe -- and sometimes important details that had gone before were completely disregarded.

Important to whom?  There's more than one person writing this - someone doesn't want to pick up a storyline that probably means it isn't important to them.  Collaboration is the story lines that survive.

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My only point was to encourage those that participate in your next go-round to take the time to study the previous posts -- and let their creativity simmer a bit -- without imposing some arbitrary self-imposed deadline on themselves.

Absolutely. The next go has story, more focused sets of characters and some special rules thrown in to encourage the continuation of story lines.  I hope that people go more for quality than speed with the next game.  I hope that you join in as well, bert.

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Enthusiasm is great, but nobody is going to gripe if you sleep on your contribution -- and read through it again the next day before you toss it up.

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I don't necessarily see the quick posts as a bad thing. I know personally before i even wrote my scenes I had an idea of what I wanted to happen next, which was why it was quick for me to write my posts and even then I waited a few hours before I posted just to make sure it was what I wanted to say and how I wanted to say it.

Given that this is our first exercise like this, i think that (like Ccornetto said) an ending was more important than say, making sure everything made sense and fell into some synchronized order. I think getting a feel for how we work together and also what kind of story we can create was more important than creating a logical plot. Of course there are going to be things that are left out, of course the finished product will have many missed forshadowings and character opportunities in addition plot holes up the arse, but I think that's something that is bound to happen in such an exercise with as many authors and as many different interpretations as we had.

I'm sure as we get more used to each other's way of writing, each other's strengths and weaknesses, and perhaps start bouncing ideas off one another a little bit more (as opposed to ""waiting to see" what another person does) we will be able to create a more stable yet dynamic story.
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I do agree that you are the captain of this effort Cornetto...and I believe the rule was 48 hours for our post.  I also agree that as moderator you are in the position to crack the whip if need be to keep this game moving...it would be awful if we had to wait more than 48 hours for a post.

I do believe along the way we did get excited and that excitement kept the game moving along as everyone was engaged and motivated by that excitement.

Keep up the good work and know that we appreciate all that you have done in putting this together and keeping it rolling...so much behind the scenes...you were diligent to keep the track sheet updated, send the emails and keeping track of everyone.

Without some form of accountability it could get out of hand...so w in no way think you are being pissy

I also still believe that when it is someone's turn and they have been notified by your email that they have 24 hours to respond and confirm/let you know they are capable of completing their portion within the 48 hour time frame.  If not, then you can make adjustments and notify another person in order to keep the game running smoothly.

Cheers to the man down under!

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someone else better write my turn then since I clearly missed the 48hr mark.

Sorry I got busy with other stuff and ruined anyone's excitement.


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You didn't ruin everyone's excitement and sorry that you ended up busy during your turn and that it caused a lot of stress for you. That could happen to anyone of us so we all are very sympathetic about it.  We even had a helpful and useful discussion about this sort of situation.  If you really want to skip your turn we'll just go directly to bert - I'll send him an email.  

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Alright -- as long as Pia agrees.

So, what's left -- Ste and Bush walking off to the bar?

After everything that has happened -- death, mayhem, carnage -- our intrepid comrades are still in search of that elusive martini?

What kind of trouble could these two possibly find on this otherwise abandoned boat?  And only one survives?

Sheesh.  I thought Pia was going to set something up for me.  

I'll have to think on this a bit.  I might have an idea -- but it won't be pretty.



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Bert, whatever you decide to do, could you put our clothes back on us?  We've been naked together far too long!

Can we both jump on the Mako's back and have him take us back to civilization?

Or, can we just hang out at the bar until we get shitfaced drunk and pass out?
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This is to our Pia...I want to clarify my post in case there is a misunderstanding... when I mentioned the 48 hour rule it was to confirm the rules that Cornetto had set up moving forward.  I still agree with these rules...however...in an earlier post I mentioned that you were busy...so I think everyone understood that it might take a little more time for you to post and I believe we were all fine with that.

For future projects and games like this though...it brought out some good exchange between us, as moderator it is quite a task to manage 10 + participants and keep us on track...so I believe my post was more prefaced to the upcoming game with regard to timing.

I personally really wanted to see what kind of revenge the Countess would play in the demise of one of the remaining characters!  You may be toasted in a tanning bed...but revenge beyond that could be horrific!   




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Quoted from Grandma Bear
someone else better write my turn then since I clearly missed the 48hr mark.

Sorry I got busy with other stuff and ruined anyone's excitement.


Pia you didn't ruin anything. Sometimes in life as you know, we truly do have the best intentions and still it doesn't work out.

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Sorry folks. I really wanted to write something, but I got busy making a Doritos commercial for the Doritos Superbowl contest

I had planned on doing a second commercial penned by Shelton, but we ran out of time...  It took us four days just to make the 30 seconds of the first one.  We had a lot of fun though and I learned lots, but as a result I flunked my S.S Craven duties.

I'm sure Bert will sort it all out.  


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Best of luck with the contest - when do we get to see the commercial?

Ste was very lucky that he didn't incur the Wrath of Zadora.

Will he fare as well with Bert? Or will Bush take the Grand Killer title?

  
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It's done.  And the winner is....

Well, whoever it is, may he reap the many rewards that come with being the sole survivor of the maiden voyage of the SS Craven.

Believe me, they'll get what's coming to them....in the end haha.


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Somehow, I think this all goes back to the "breaking the rules" thread.


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Thanks Bert for a fitting ending.  

I guess that's it.  Bush is the Grand Killer until next time.  

I'm giving Ste his own kill.  So the final tally for kills is:

#1 Zadora - 5 Kills
#2 Alffy - 3 Kills
#3 Ste - 2 Kills

Well done everyone!

And don't forget to join us for the next game.  A Sci-Fi/Horror called Shiva.

Cheers.
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I loved reading/watching this last scene! What a way to go! I couldn't stop laughing.

Excellently done Bert! What was that last part again? Loved it!

Sandra



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Ah...the winner?  Or maybe the biggest loser?  Nicely done.  Very entertaining.

Wush they would have brought teh Mako up with me...I think I could have had more fun with him (or her) than those slimy aliens.  Guess I'll be busy for the next 50 years taking care of those beauties.

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Bertie...you are a funny man!  That was quite comical...and such a disappointment to the Bush man...having to slave away and provide sexual services for all the alien blobs of porridge! tee hee

Pia...I wish you a ton of luck on the Dorito commercial...when is the decision made...when will you know?  That is certainly exciting!   


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I love words and the fact that when the page is blank...there's nothing there until words are formulated in my brain. Those thoughts...rushing through my viens and out my finger tips, find "life" on the page.  

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Awesome Bert!!! I knew you'd be the one that could tidy this up in a great way!!

Soon Morgan! Soon.  


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wow...I'm not so sure that Bert is the winner here...I mean he survived but...wow...lol. The last line made me laugh, imagine waking up the next ...morning or whatever and realizing that whole tentacle thing with your ear last night wasn't just some horrible dream. lol.

God Job everybody, yeah!
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Loved it.

Good job Bert.

It has been a great game this one, i personally enjoyed it, can't wait for the other.

Cheers



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The tracksheet is updated with the final scores.

Once again thanks to all for participating.  
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Haha, nicely done Bert. I'll take my fate over Bush's anyday.

Well done everyone, it's been a laugh.


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Very funny ending Bert, made me chuckle. At first I read the alien was a giant testicle but on reading it again I see it says tenticle lol. Anyway great ending to a weird story and a good game.


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Great ending bert!

This was a really enjoyable game and I can't wait to participate in more of these.
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