Quoted from mcornetto No worries Jeff, thanks for letting us know. Just as a note, I start a new job tomorrow so I have no idea if I'll have access to the internet much less the ability to visit Simply Scripts.  So I won't be able to update the tracksheet when Jeff goes and I probably won't even be able to update this thread.  I'll take care of it when I'm home which may be a bit on the late-ish side.

Don't worry, we'll keep the home fires burning.

Sandra

Sorry for being late with this you guys.  I still feel like crap, but I've got it done.  Just checking it over now and trying to "bold" the headings.  It should be up in less than an hour.

Ok Jeff,

I'm excited to read the next scene. Remember: Lots of fluids.

Sandra

OK, it's up!  I'm not thrilled with it, but I got it done.  I feel like crap, and writing wasn't easy (amazing how many mistakes I was making...like every single workd had to be retyped!).  Guess I'm a bit loopy at the moment.

Hope you guys like it.

I don't know what else to say but "perfect"!!!

This scene brings us down from up in the clouds somewhere, shows us the mysterious dogs being hauled off and generates some sympathy and future dreams of a happy ending out of Jack.

Jack's enjoyment of golf green despite the gruesome circumstances, the idea of his thoughts entertaining a honeymoon in Niagara-- it all meshes perfectly with the great serpent that "ruins" his game and slides out of the water.

If I were to call a scene perfect, this would have to be it. The flu certainly didn't hurt this whatsoever!!!

Seriously, kudos and more Jeff!

Way to go!

Sandra

Wow, I'm glad you liked it Sandra.  I was worried, as things just weren't coming to me very well.  It may have been the vodka on an emty stomach plus the flu that helped...who knows?

Well Mister Bush!  You have a couple of fans...myself being one of them! I think the golfing is so true to Jack Stone's personna.

I loved how you went back and tied in the relationship with Albert through the CB and Eddy's sinister self answers...

I too liked the silly/harmless connection between Sam and Jack...nice, friendly banter back and forth...

Sorry that you took yourself out though  ;(  Not to worry...I will remember you!

Fantastic work...whitty, fun, real and "cheesy good", all at the same time!!  

You may have had a stuffy head...but you didn't have a stuffy mind! *wink*  

I have been up in Washington State for the past 4 days and am just now getting caught up with all the additions on the site.  (Sitting at the airport at present) Sandra and George...marvelous job and also kudos with the collaboration...it shows!  

Nice tie into the 3:00 in his dream...and what a whickedly awesome dream!  My applause for all of the last 3 posts!  VERY NICELY DONE!!!

~m~

I've been thinking about Jeff's scene and I want to add some reason to why I think it's goes deep.

First, we can wonder: Why does Jack want to go and play some golf at a time like this. But why does anyone do anything? And what's that first stage of grief? Denial?

I think that this is a really good "psychological" example of "dealing" during these times.

Jack starts dreaming and talking about honeymoons almost like he "knows" the end is near. He can probably feel it in his very bones.

And now, I can't help but think about the correlation with Citizen Kane. How? The encapsulation of good times and memories is all wrapped up inside "the sled". It doesn't matter what "the thing" is.

For Jack Stone, it's golf. To just go out and have that experience despite everything-- that's what he wants and even if he dies, he's gonna do that. And he does.

Because of that, I consider Jack Stone's character a complete success. Again, a bittersweet ending.

It brings this script above any gore factor or normal (stupid word to use) kind of horror and I appreciate that work a lot.

Sandra

Very nice scene Dreamscale. Short and sweet. Things are really getting intense now. It's funny how most of the initial scenes were long sequences with lots of action, and yet these more dialogue-oriented posts are much stronger.

Sad that Jack had to go. Swallowed by a snake *shudders* :S Why's everyone killing their own characters, anyway?

--Julio

Quoted from ReaperCreeper Very nice scene Dreamscale. Short and sweet. Things are really getting intense now. It's funny how most of the initial scenes were long sequences with lots of action, and yet these more dialogue-oriented posts are much stronger. Sad that Jack had to go. Swallowed by a snake *shudders* :S Why's everyone killing their own characters, anyway? --Julio

Lots of reasons.

Save the others, kill yourself.

Make sure your character has an interesting death.

or just dont want to kill off someone elses character

Glad everyone seems to like my post.  It was difficult for me as I've been sick for a week now and my computer has been on the fritz.  I just replaced my 7 year old cable modem (normal life expectancy is 2 years).  I'm back up and running adn everythign seems to be working again.  I'm still under the weather but feeling a bit better.

Looking forward to how this will all play out.

Quoted from ReaperCreeper Sad that Jack had to go. Swallowed by a snake *shudders* :S Why's everyone killing their own characters, anyway?

I wanted to go for something more heroic for Dr. Fleming, so I wanted to write it myself. I also knew I could create another one if I did, and you better believe I won't kill Wolf (or Timber) off. I will miss James, though. I liked him.

I'm dying to know what this "Wolf" and "Timber" thing is?  They sound like dogs to me.  Do tell...

*evil laugh* Just throwing another monkeywrench into what we believe the world to be. After all, the real world is unpredictable, so this one should be too. I'll let them be revealed in due time.