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I go with write whatever you want, because at the current moment, it's yours. I specify guns and cars in my scripts, too, because it is actually an important detail.
It's a reader thing at this point. Not an audience.
So... as a reader YOU don't care, right?
AR15 rifle. AR15 carbine. M16. Machine gun. You don't care, right?
I draw clear distinctions between the reader, the producer/director and the audience.
I'm most familiar with being in the audience, and as such, when I see directors directing actors to do preposterous things my "suspension of disbelief" comes crashing down. Hot wiring cars. Picking locks. Cocking revolvers. All of these things irritate me just like unfilmables irritate you.
>> Do you think your audience will relate to what an AR15 is? I sure wouldn't. << So, the question I'm seeking an answer for is specific to readers rather than an audience.
I know my screenplay's demographic audience knows the public does not have access to M16s but does have access to AR15s.
I know a director worth his salt will know this and will go to great lengths to simply use the correct props.
However, I do not know if a reader will have his or her eye snag on:
Bob grabs the AR15 tactical rifle instead of the AK57.
vs
Bob grabs the AR15 tactical carbine instead of the AK57
... when I know eventually the director would run across it.
(And if anyone catches that deliberate error in those lines that'll just be proof of what I'm talking about.)
Top: AR15 rifle with the longer barrel Bottom: AR15 carbine with the shorter barrel
I tend to agree with Blonde. I just wouldn't get too detailed in your descriptions. Guess it all comes down to how often you're giving out these details and how important they actually are to the story/plot.
Com'on Blonde, you can finish it on time! How many pages have you written? I bet more than me.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
Maybe you can just finish your Act I and have us take a look?
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
I could, but I'm really getting into the one I mentioned. And, that one has to stay in my head because it's a really easy write so long as I remember it.
However, to just make you feel better, I came up with a new plan. Being that it's action lines that trip me up, I've decided to skip them for the moment. No, I'm not crazy. I mention location changes and write little asides to remind myself that actions bring about the dialogue I just wrote. Works so far. Page 16 in 13 minutes.
Actually, I have a similar problem. I know how the scene goes, the starting point and the end point, but I have a hard time writing descriptions and realistic dialogue.
Any help?
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
OK, that's progress. Some days are better than others, as long as you keep at it! We can all complete this and have a nice, feature length script under our belts that we wouldn't have had.
Good progress for me today, again (for me, at least). On page 53 now and got through a tough part and provided some huge revelations. First big set piece is just around the corner now, so I can't wait to get to it and crank out 10 pages, as I know it will run about that length.
Gunning for page 70 by Friday (was hoping for 55 by today, though).
Pia, you re-read yours yet and start on the rewrite finally? C'mon peeps! Let's do this!!!
Page 23 right now, hoping to end my Act I soon. But I think it'll be closer to page 30.
This is the longest screenplay I have ever written, BTW. I have only written shorts, but never a feature.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
Herman, that's cool! You can do it, bud. I know you can. Think how proud you'll be when you complete your first feature!
Pia, I hear ya. I'd rather not be the 11th hour guy, but I may be here. I really want to get done with at least a few days to spare, so I can fix it up where needed. At least, I'm on the back side now and things are easier than harder, since I know exactly where everything's going now.
How many completed scripts are we going to have by Saturday, 9/4? Count me as 1!!!!
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