Quoted from RayW Too much blabby blabby. Characters fail to integrate. The language does match the target audience or MPAA rating. Too much blood. Not enough blood. Is this supposed to be satire or dark comedy? Transpose settings B and D. Alternate ending(s). Making this a period piece adds three times the cost. Clarify the protagonist's arc more at the beginning or end. Use ellipsis instead of (BEAT). Use (BEAT) instead of ellipsis. Use ... for drifting off. Use -- for interrupted dialog. Stretch the time at the beginning. Shorten the time at the end. Add more humor. Stuff life that.

I wouldn't mind all that Just thinking reading my rewrite would do me more good. And also I don't want my reader to suffer

But what Ray says with page numbers = perfect feedback.

First of all, everyone reviews scripts differently...and that's a good thing.  Your reviews here should be no different than your normal reviews.

Now, if your normal reviews are only a few paragraphs long for a feature length script, you're obviously not offering very much in terms of critique and feedback.

If you're wondering what kinds of things to comment on, I'd recommend the following:

1)  Story/plot
2)  Characters
3)  Action
4)  Writing/format/grammar
5)  Overall/general

Within the topics there are numerous things to look at and discuss.

In terms of reading and reviewing every single script, I'd look at it like this...are you expecting everyone to read your script?  If so, you should in turn, read every script.

I plan on reading each and every script and I plan on giving extensive feedback and help on every script.  Now, I will say that if I literally cannot get through a script because its too bad or too whatever, I will at least read as much as I can and give extensive feedback and help that will hopefully steer the writer in the correct direction.

I'll most likely read and review the scripts by writers who have given me feedback in the past, first.  From there, I'll probably go in some sort of order of how well they appear to be written, and I can easily tell that from the first page.

I think we'll have 10 or 11 completed scripts by Saturday.  I strongly urge everyone to actually complete the script by the deadline, as if it is a real deadline.  That's what makes this challenge so valuable.

Let's do it up, guys and gals!!

PS  We forgot about George!  Maybe we'll have 12 scripts?

I'll go for the "by Act" review strategy.

I'll probably leave 4-5 posts for each script I read.

1) The first 10 pages.
2) Act I
3) Act II
4) Act III
5) Overall

And I'll comment on story, characters and writing in each of the section.

And yes, I'll stop reading if I really can't through it, although I'll try my best.

Herman, you may run into some problems if you go by acts, as some scripts are written nonstandardly in terms of structure.

I imagine that many of these scripts will have a nonstandard look and feel, based on the fact they're all dealing with amnesia, which will lead to lots of Flashbacks, and out of order events.

I'll write 1 post initially, and if the writer or others chime in, I'll continue the discussion.

Everyone can do it whichever way they choose.  That's the beauty of it!

OK, I just need to work on a logline now, which I really sick at!

I understand what you meant by running into problems if I do it by acts.

Like I'll be saying something in the script is a problem when it'll be resolved later on. I understand that, so I'm usually more lenient and forgiving in the beginning.

However, I disagree with you about the non-standard structure. Even with flashbacks and out of order events.

Non-chronological stories need to have some sort of structures, too. Right? Things still need to be in a logical order for the readers to understand.

So what I mean by three acts is this:

Act I - setup of conflict
Act II - escalation of conflict
Act III - resolution of conflict

That way, regardless of whether the story is told in linear or non-linear fashion, I can still see what the writer is trying to do.

Just don't tell me:

First 10 - there are problems all over here
ACT I - sux
ACT II - could be better
ACT III - you have problems
Overall - whatamess!

LOL! I can't do anything with that kind of vagary.    

Really, I don't think any one of us will have an extremely messy script. Every script should have some merits of its own.

Some maybe are better with action and plot, others with dialogue and characters.

A near-properly formatted spec script, with no huge block of text, should be guaranteed a read through.

I hope you're right, Herman, but actually, I highly doubt it.

I'm betting that the vast majority of these scripts will be far from good, and many will be downright bad.  Hopefully, I'm wrong.

Regardless, this challenge was created to help us do 2 things...write a complete feature script on a subject that was chosen for us, and prove to ourselves that not only can we do it, but that we can do it in a tight 7 week time period.

So, with that said, any and all scripts that are completed are already successful of those 2 main things.  Getting them to a level where they're actually a successful/marketable script is entirely another beast.

DELETE.

>> They can't be messier than Men To Rise, right?  << (anonymous author)  

LOL!
Maybe I can get a "Most Improved" participation ribbon!

Maybe I should delete that message. It doesn't sound too nice.

I'll make an effort to read all of the scripts, though it will be over a couple of weeks.

I urge all SS'ers to check at least a few out. Maybe if people stopped reading shorts and the odd scripts that pop up here where the author doesn't reply to any reviews.

This is a massive pet hate of mine and the same for a few of us.

It's time to stop wasting time on these scripts that the writer doesn't acknowledge.

I might cop some stick for this attitude but I'd rather see these worthwhile efforts rewarded with reads.

Cheers stevie

>> I'm betting that the vast majority of these scripts will be far from good, and many will be downright bad...

Getting them to a level where they're actually a successful/marketable script is entirely another beast. <<

I think most every kernel of concept is marketable, so my objective will be to read all of 7WC entries as both a director filming the project and as the paying audience.

Push here. Shove there. Edit this. Add that = Poof! The next POTC or LOTR!
HA!
I wish.


Dreamscale, come to think of it, have I read any of your prior work here?

I've read several of Dogglebes, a couple of McClung's, at least one of MedStudent, Bert, Brianna, Pia's and Mr Z's.
I don't know if I've read any of George or Cornetto's. And Screenrider I gotta get to.

>>  I urge all SS'ers to check at least a few out. Maybe if people stopped reading shorts and the odd scripts that pop up here where the author doesn't reply to any reviews...

I might cop some stick for this attitude but I'd rather see these worthwhile efforts rewarded with reads. <<

No.
I don't think you should.
I think that's a dead on balls approach.
One I'll certainly be committing to.
And I'll probably take weeks, as well.
Four weeks to write one = four weeks to read and remark on a dozen?
Plausible.