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Wrappin' it up tonight leaving tomorrow for some clean up.
And I just ran into a minor snag: I can write this twist reveal of the bad guy to be either the local big wig or the bastard closest to home.
Which guy p!sses you off the most? (I'm gonna kill him good). Is it the holier than thou boss' boss in another state that's never around but always p!ssin' in your cornflakes? Or is it your ball bustin', d!ck head supervisor that constantly threatens you with your career?
Uh...shouldn't you have in mind who the culprit is before you start writing?
If you can really choose, then probably there is a setup problem. The ending won't feel inevitable. Instead, it might come out of left field.
But again, I haven't read your script, so maybe I'm just rambling here.
I'm on page 113, finishing up my finale sequence. Going to start the denouement soon.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
Herman - Thrillers are about setting up multiple POTENTIAL bad guys.
Left field is just sloppy trade craft.
So who do you want to stick it to at work? Your boss doin' his/her job of making you do your job? Or your boss' boss making him/her make you do your job?
Herman, sometimes, IMO, an "out of left field" reveal, if actually, and properly set up, is cool shit. Love it...BUT...if not set up at all, or just downright silly or nonsensical it's crap.
KILL THE SUPER!!!!!!! Have his boss have the super's secretary do the deed, while disguised as a candy striper during a big parade.
Now gotta fix things up in the beginning, make up a title and a logline.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
I started writing mine without a clue as to what was going to happen. It evolved little by little and by page 30 or 40, I had it all worked out. I didn't even know the McGuffin until the page finally came to actually say what it was. I don't usually write that way, but felt like doing it this time. I may do it more often. Planned is sometimes easy to write, but sometimes, you get caught up in the details, and when the time comes and your character says go left but your outline says go right, you might be unwilling to break from the outline for fear of losing your story. Some of my best have been to have a basic idea of where I'm going and just writing to get there.
That's the moment when the characters live on their own and you can feel how they would react to certain situations.
Outline is flexible, anyway. I just know my beginning, act I turning point, and my ending. Then I just brainstorm scenes, not knowing how the characters would react during those scenes.
FEATURE:
Memwipe - Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller (114 pages) - In a world where memories can be erased by request, a Memory Erasing Specialist desperately searches for the culprit when his wife becomes a target for erasure -- with his former colleagues hot on his trail.
Alright. I got my notes. I got a pizza. I got a six pack of Becks and a day off on Monday, which means the school stuff I need for Tuesday can wait...Gonna plug in me some old school metal (I'm thinking Priest, Maiden, Rhoads era Ozzy) and see if I can't get this bastard put down.
Failure is only the opportunity to begin again more intelligently - Dove Chocolate Wrapper
Maiden should definitely help! What a great band! The new release is great, too, BTW.
Are you saying you haven't written any actual pages of the script yet? Huh? You're going to write a feature in less than 30 hours?
WOW!
Start off with Wasted Time, go back to 22 Acacia Avenue, then jump forward to Alexander the Great,and then back again to Die with Your Boots On. That should get the creative juices flowing!
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