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Penoyer79
Posted: September 3rd, 2012, 11:02pm Report to Moderator
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I'd say he's like Clancy Brown in "Shawshank" except Bob Gunton still pulled the strings. An interesting sort of fella...


Bob Gunton was The Man on Shawshank. there was no disbute there. Nothing happened on Warden Norton's watch that he didnt approve of or know about. Captain Hadley was simply an Enforcer.

On Mars... the line is much more blury and complicated.

Farthing - runs the facility....he's a man of ambition and accomplishment...but as michael wrote in his bio - he boils down to a glorified 'yes man' because he's afraid of conflict and afraid to get his hands dirty.

i think he smells the winds of change back on earth... and the best way to continue his meteoric rise to the top - is to use this job - and Leon - to get in good with Bernard.

of course the rub in all this is the murders . Farthing could very well be responsible. if he is.. i see it as he's finally snapped...and is now making some sort of power play.

and if Farthing is not behind the murders.... either way he's looking at a very serious showdown with Bernard Napier - who will not be happy with Farthing when he learns of all this chaos and bloodshed going down on his multi-billion dollar pet-project...all of it happening on Farthing's watch. With Leon now on board Mars... Farthing is well aware he has become both expendable, and the perfect fall guy.

this gives both men a very powerful motive.

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mcornetto
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Good going, Penoyer!  So, I guess Connie bit the dust this time.   Be sure to clean up the rest of your �

You can avoid this problem by doing a reply to the thread rather than a quick reply from the text box at the bottom of the thread.  Also, always use full edit because quick edit will change certain symbols.

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You can paste your post to a simple text editor (like Notepad - I use Notepad ++ which is free and provides some additional functionality) and then copy it from there.    

Nawazm is up next.    I'll update and send an email after I'm through with the rest of my work day.  
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haha yeah...poor matt has no one but himself to blame. i couldn't believe how beautifully he set his own character up to die.

and poor Dash... i dont think he'll ever get over this one.  

i think i got all the symbols cleaned up... let me know if you see anymore.
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Matt Chisholm
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Quoted from Penoyer79
poor matt has no one but himself to blame. i couldn't believe how beautifully he set his own character up to die.


I had an inkling she wouldn't last long. The black guys never do in these scenarios.

Nice scene though. You set Leon up pretty nicely.


I can't live the buttoned-down life like you. I want it all. The dizzying highs, the terrifying lows, the creamy middles. Sure, I may offend some of the blue bloods with my cocky stride and musky odors. Oh, I'll never be the darling of the so-called "city fathers," who cluck their tongues, stroke their beards and talk about what's to be done with this Homer Simpson?
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All updated.  Email sent.

Preparing poll.
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nice work everyone! People are dropping like flies. I wonder if any martians are gonna show up!  


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Hmm, looks like everyone has been introduced. Guess that gives me a little less freedom.
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Sen Warren is actually in the Commons... or heading to the Commons...
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Sen Warren is actually in the Commons... or heading to the Commons...


Noted.

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To the new folks...

Just because you have 48 hours to post, doesn't mean you should wait 48 hours before posting.  

We kind of like to keep the game moving at a brisk pace if we can.  You can help with that by posting as quick as possible.  


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Sorry everyone for taking so long. Jeremy Graves' bio is coming in the next hour but I thought I should post the scene to avoid any more delays.
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Jeremy Graves, 29.


Born in one of the worst slums in New York, Jeremy Graves lived in a large warehouse with two thousand other people for most of his life.

As a child, he was always interested in mechanics and computers, searching every dump in the city to find spare parts for the gizmos he was working on. Although he made many interesting gadgets, no one dared to look at anything made by some rat from the slums.

His big break came at the age of eighteen, when he stumbled across an old motherboard from a used IBM 5100. From there, using his years of experience, he designed one of the most advanced robotic systems known to man. A computer with a faster processing time than any normal human being. It could interact and see all, even developing feelings if told to. With that, he was hired by Microsoft immediately.

For years, he was never credited for the design, eventually bursting and leaving his job. He then began working on his next project, ALAN, a computer that can run whole bases and buildings with no aid from a human. When he finally finished, he discovered that the US government was building a base on Mars and were looking for expert programmers. After hearing that, the first thing he did was reveal his design. The funders were amazed, offering him one of the highest paid jobs on the base which he happily accepted.

He moved to Mars Base when construction ended, working with many of the staff to perfect ALAN's duties. When alone, even though he seems happy, Jeremy hides a terrible secret about ALAN. One that no one but him must know, only at gun point will he reveal it to anyone...
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mcornetto
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Good job nawazm.   I like that sneeze is red (I added that to the Lexicon).


Everything is updated (I hope I got it all right) and email is sent.  


The boy who could fly is up next.


Couple of things that came up....

1.  Always include the map location on your slug.  It might be a bathroom but you should slug it as INT. COMMONS - BATHROOM because I have to keep track of this stuff and it's confusing if you don't include the map location.  

2.  Try to spread people around a bit more.  The thing about these games is that people seem to want to bring everyone to the same location.   Try to avoid that.  Smaller groups -  different locations will make the reading much more interesting and easier to follow.  Plus it gives you more time for story development for the characters involved.

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The boy who could fly
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Oh Jeebus, my turn is next, kinda confused as to what to do since everyone is pretty much clumped together no one can really be the killer since everyone is with someone, this is gonna be a challenge!


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