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DustinBowcot
Posted: January 10th, 2015, 4:06am Report to Moderator
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I don't agree that she needs to be good looking. Most guys will fuck anything.
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Quoted from DustinBowcot
I don't agree that she needs to be good looking. Most guys will fuck anything.

Ha, I'm getting a few good laughs from the boards lately.

You speak for yourself on this topic, of course. Other more discerning chaps may beg to differ I'm sure. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder after all.



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Quoted from DustinBowcot
I don't agree that she needs to be good looking. Most guys will fuck anything.



I think this may be the first time I totally agree with you, Dustin.  

I was a bartender for 25+ years and I can honestly say...this is true. At 2am, any standards you had go out the window.


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Quoted from mmmarnie


I was a bartender for 25+ years and I can honestly say...this is true. At 2am, any standards you had go out the window.


That old country song: "The Girls All Get Prettier at Closing Time."



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Pia, I'm willing to fly over at my own cost to see the lead male, if he's sexy and hot.

I'll wear my short, tight denim shorts, and hopefully the lead male will fall in love with me and he and I can be together.


Stevie, that in itself is the making of a true horror story, but I don't think I'd really want to watch.

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Quoted from LC

Ha, I'm getting a few good laughs from the boards lately.

You speak for yourself on this topic, of course. Other more discerning chaps may beg to differ I'm sure. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder after all.



I actually do have standards... but most of my friends do not. They will have standards when it comes to judging women.. but when it comes to sex they'll do virtually anything.
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Quoted from DustinBowcot
I don't agree that she needs to be good looking. Most guys will fuck anything.


Most guys will.

However, I need wooing. Flowers, chocolate, music. Or at least a tenner.

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Rendevous: I'm sure I'm not the first to say this. Your comments always make me laugh.  If I see you've commented, I always check it out. Doesn't matter whether I've read the script or not.



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Quoted from Stumpzian
Rendevous: I'm sure I'm not the first to say this. Your comments always make me laugh.  If I see you've commented, I always check it out. Doesn't matter whether I've read the script or not.


I concur...

Do you concur?   Name that film?  

R I always enjoy your posts....even when I have no idea what you are talking about     


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Reef Dreamer:

"Catch Me If You Can." But, I confess, I had to look it up.



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If I see you've commented, I always check it out. Doesn't matter whether I've read the script or not.


I'm touched. Not like that time I went to the seminary. Really, they were all pushing and shoving and rubbing.

I'm going back next week.


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R I always enjoy your posts....even when I have no idea what you are talking about     


Why thank you kind sir. You're not alone in wondering. I often wonder myself.

I'd say that concurring comes from Catch Me If You Can. DiCaprio's character nicks it for his fake doctor role from Dr. Kildare, I think.

Praise is always welcome round here. Bring some biscuits too.

I'm available for barmitzvahs and parties. Chicken in a basket on the way out.

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Okay, we can not use this script as the original filmmaker wants to reshoot this one. He has become quite an amazing filmmaker so I'm excited to see how this turns out.

This is our new plan...

This is a long post for a short script. Dena and I are planning to shoot a short this year. We want to use http://herlonginn.com in the film. It was used in Doc Hollywood. We want to make a social statement with our film though.
This is something horrible that happened today that we want to use.
"My daughter and her husband were eating breakfast this morning when they heard a giant BOOM! They look outside and there's a car on fire. They run outside. The car had a tire blowout. Fishtailed and rolled and hit a pine tree. The woman in the passenger seat was ejected. She was really bad off. She had bit off her tongue and could not breathe. The driver was trapped in the car. My son-in-law tried to open the door, but it was locked. He tried to break the window. His arms got burned... A Navy guy stopped and tried to help break into the car, but the flames were too big by that time. The driver burned in the car...
Except for the Navy guy, everyone else, just slowed down their cars and took pictures with their phones...
That's what happened to my daughter and her husband today. Truly horrible!
What we would like to do, is make some kind of statement about us/humans who are now just slowing down to take pictures/film a traumatic event so they can post it on some social network rather than stop and help.
If anyone has a script that fit or can be rewritten to fit, please pm me or Dena.
We have a decent budget and will do our best to make this a great one.
Thank you!


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Whew! That is truly an horrific story - commiserations to all involved. It must have been very traumatic for your daughter and son-in-law, and I hope they soon recover from the ordeal - though I expect it will take some time.

Makes you think if just a few of those people passing and snapping away banded together maybe that poor man would have survived. Did the woman survive?

Sad and tragic to think most people's motivations are directed not in saving a person's life but instead are geared towards their 'viral' moment in the sun.

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What we would like to do, is make some kind of statement about us/humans who are now just slowing down to take pictures/film a traumatic event so they can post it on some social network rather than stop and help.


How long a 'short' do you envisage? Do you have a redemptive ending in mind or do you think that would lessen the effect of the message you're trying to put forward. I actually think you could do both and who knows perhaps the final message might be stronger... I don't know, just thinking aloud.

Perhaps we could do an informal OWC or 2WC see if any of us can come up with something you might like. ??

Have you both thought of writing this yourselves?

Re the location you have - that's one beautiful looking spot. Is interior and exterior available to you? Seems almost too grand and glamorous and a little at odds with your subject matter. On the other hand perhaps the contrast will work well.


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Quoted from LC
Makes you think if just a few of those people passing and snapping away banded together maybe that poor man would have survived. Did the woman survive?

She's in a coma.


Quoted from LC
Sad and tragic to think most people's motivations are directed not in saving a person's life but instead are geared towards their 'viral' moment in the sun.

I agree and that's what we want to make the short about.



Quoted from LC
How long a 'short' do you envisage? Do you have a redemptive ending in mind or do you think that would lessen the effect of the message you're trying to put forward. I actually think you could do both and who knows perhaps the final message might be stronger... I don't know, just thinking aloud.

No more than 10 pages.

No idea about ending or anything, but the more profound the better. We'd like to leave an impression on people.


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Perhaps we could do an informal OWC or 2WC see if any of us can come up with something you might like. ??

No. Cornetto and I did that with the hurricane and motel OWC. We both felt bad that it didn't workout.  


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Have you both thought of writing this yourselves?

If we can't find a script that is suitable to our needs, location etc. we will write our own. However, I always like a project better, the more "friends" I can involve. Also, I remember years ago when it seemed to me that everyone here at SS was getting produced. Everyone, but me. I was quite sad about that. Now I have more credits than anyone needs, so I'd like to share the experience with others.


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Re the location you have - that's one beautiful looking spot. Is interior and exterior available to you? Seems almost too grand and glamorous and a little at odds with your subject matter. On the other hand perhaps the contrast will work well.

I was set on shooting at that location long time ago. So, in this case, the location came before the story. This story we want to tell now, might be hard to work into that location, but if possible, I sure would like it.

As far as accessibility goes, it's pricey. Dena called them and they wanted $500 just to shoot outside. I might have to go down there and talk to them in person. Bring my husband along. He's a master negotiator.  


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Quoted from DustinBowcot
I don't agree that she needs to be good looking. Most guys will f#ck anything.

Concur.  (Didn't need to look up the reference, BTW. Knowed it already.)

I've seen a lotta ugly women with multiple kids.
Guys will LITERALLY doink anything. Repeatedly.
Laws even have to be made that state it's ILLEGAL to doink ANIMALS!
Seriously?! It occurs often enough to REQUIRE a LAW to not doink animals?
YES!
Pathetic.

You women fret and worry about the silliest things. We don't care.
Does your shirt come off, yes or no?
Solved.

Only a prissy man cares if your legs are shaved or your hair perfect or teeth white or even straight.

Does your shirt come off, yes or no?

Bonus: And the pants drop, too, right?





Alright... back on task...


Quoted from Grandma Bear
We want to use http://herlonginn.com in the film...

This is something horrible that happened today that we want to use...

What we would like to do, is make some kind of statement about us/humans who are now just slowing down to take pictures/film a traumatic event so they can post it on some social network rather than stop and help.

Beautiful location.
Cleaning those Corinthian crowns must be a PITA.

Love social statement films!  

For budgetary reasons I imagine you DON'T want to replicate the burning vehicle scenario, however some other slow-motion developing tragedy would work well.

No pool at the location, so a drowning in progress wouldn't work.

A suffocation or household product poisoning would work well.
Unfolding domestic violence, maybe?

The location's exterior grounds are great, but the greatest visual control will be shooting from  inside the house = great lighting package + increased risk of property damage = insurance cost.

Florida bugs oughtta be springing out pretty soon.
Better get a move on unless you wanna ADR the entire dialog.  

Hmm...

Will do some homework on household tragedies and toss out some ideas to develop.



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