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Posted: January 29th, 2008, 8:58pm Report to Moderator
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Panama by Ryan and Russell Smith - Comedy - Luke, a substitute teacher takes on what he thinks is just another temp gig but soon finds out that Panama Elementary is a school with much more than meets the eye.  89 pages - pdf, format


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I just finished reading your script and I have to say that the dialogue is great! Great dialogue makes a script interesting. At least for me it does.

I think the story was good and it was structured well, however I didn't like the ending. I would've rather seen Luke come back to the school a little "harder" of an individual but still could keep his wits about him.

I read the script from beginning to end in one sitting so it had my attention from the git-go. I liked it.

Well done!  


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