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Posted: December 3rd, 2008, 9:54am Report to Moderator
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Thanks for reading.


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Another reason it was not funny too is cause do you remember how all the aliens in Mars Attack where killed?  It was kind of goofy and surprising the first time but not so the second time.


Even "Mars Attacks" wasn't all that innovative in its choice of weapon.  Remember "Attack of the Killer Tomatoes"?

Anyway, I'm just quoting that block of text of yours for those who read the first draft and suggested the change.


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to quote phil "you need to add more pimp"


People keep saying that, but it's nothing more than another way of saying "make it better".



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Quoted from Shelton
Anyway, I'm just quoting that block of text of yours for those who read the first draft and suggested the change.


We never said it was new.  We just said it was funnier than screaming.  And I still think so.

Honestly, the haunting strains of "Puberty Love" were running through my head when I suggested you go that route -- but really, how many people are going to remember AotKT?


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People keep saying that, but it's nothing more than another way of saying "make it better".



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...pimp everything...guns...cars...pet dogs...


I think this is a good suggestion about adding more "pimp".  Take every object, no matter how mundane, and pimp it up.  That could be pretty funny.


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I think this is a good suggestion about adding more "pimp".  Take every object, no matter how mundane, and pimp it up.  That could be pretty funny.


That's pretty much been done though.  There aren't any guns or pet dogs in the script, but the only car that appears outside of the ice cream truck is King Aloysius', and that's pretty pimped out.  Jimmy shows up to the O-pimp-ics on his bike sporting spinners, and the fake pimps have adjusted their wardrobes to accomodate their new personalities.  

It could probably be taken a step further in that regard, but part of it is that these people aren't really pimps and/or hos, and are simply using things that they have on hand to "get the job done".  Miss Pew has a feather boa, but wears orthopedic shoes, or Jimmy's "Peter Pan" hat for example.


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Huh? You mean Attack of killer tomatoes is a real, real movie? What wacked out producer would wanna do that? Dang. and I thought Killer tomatoes was just a hollywood urban myth.

And please, please Shelton I hope you're not telling me that Tim Burton pinched a gag from another movie. That would really upset me as I adore Tim Burton and treasure his movies and it would break my heart if it turns out he is just a hack.  


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