Steve Buddy

Thanks for the read, we appreciate it. Gary pretty much covered everything. The first 10 really need to be more fast paced. I also feel that Dale's character was becoming to similar to Russells besides the end, when it came it together.
As it is, it's really our 2nd draft and with the great comments from the SS members will help point us in the right direction.

Thanks again

Mark

Hey Mark,

Because you have mixed reviews on this one and I have been a friend on SS for quite a few years, I thought I would download this and give you some feedback.

I also owe you for a read or two along the way so it would be a pleasure taking a read and giving you my unbiased opinion.

I will comment directly into the PDF file and will email you back though will also leave some general feedback on this thread when done.

Give me a day or two and I'll hit you up.

Regards Alex

No problem buddy, we have re drafted since this an will probably need a few more drafts before we're happy lol.

Any comments are greatly appreciated

Mark

Hey Mark,

You should have I in 5.

Let me know how you go.

Alex