Lee - No one cares.  It wasn't racist or offensive at all.  There are plenty of writers out there that have done far worse than that Chinese "what" scene, which was actually one of the funnier parts of the script.  Honestly, when I read that scene, I didn't even have the words "racist" or "offensive" in my head at all.  It was just a silly, goofy part of the story, that's all.  What I think Jeff meant by it being "mean spirited" was that you're trying to aim this toward kids/children, but here you have a cop beating up on a witness to a crime and then brutally throwing him through a glass window.  He's totally right in a way, that one could see this as a scene not directed toward kids/children.

Oooh the drama.

Lee, I'm actually shocked that you are only 24. You have a bright future ahead of you in this game if you stick at it.

I'm not going to read this as the title tells me all I need to know. However, I've lost a little respect for you throwing a fit and declaring that you're leaving over one bad script. If Jeff did that he would have stopped years ago. It doesn't bother him that nobody likes his stuff, he will damn well write it anyway. You actually have some fans.

This script will be forgotten about in days... ask for it to be taken down, or remodel it for children.

I suppose I owe everyone an apology for my outburst last night.  I don't know what came over me, guess it was just one of those rare "bad" days I get.

I feel like an idiot for doing it.  

Jeff, nothing you said made me feel bad about anything or got to me.  You were right on it not being for kids, I misread the comment and I sincerely apologize if I acted immaturely towards you for trying to help me.  

Real world pressures got to me I suppose.  I'm under a lot of stress at home, work's driving me insane with all the damn deadlines.  For those that don't know, I was a Graphic Designer at a pen company, and I'm the ONLY one, so when I get a whole folder stack of "wanted designs" thrown at me on possibly the worst damn day of every year (June 30th) then I really, really get P.O'd for no reason.

And what you saw was the result.  What you didn't see was me quitting my job this morning.

I'm not sure why they thought having 1 designer for an entire company was a good idea, been doing it for 5 months and I can't do it anymore.

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See, I love it here.  I like to think I've made a few friends here and I'd rather not throw away everything I've worked so damn hard to achieve.

So the script remains online.  As do my comments.  Everyone has a bad day once in a while, we're humans, right?  Perfection is a word we can never attain.

I apologize for last night.  My sole focus now is to give back to the boards, to read more and to help people as you folks have helped me.

-Lee

Lee, this is great news.  I went to bed last night feeling terrible, thinking my words drove you away.

Steve is right in what he said - the Asian guy scene is not racist - it's just that it's an Asian guy being beaten because of how he speaks, and I don't think it's for children in any way.  In fact, I wouldn't even want Dustin's 9 children to see such a thing, but then again, being Dustin's kids, I'm sure they're treated to much, much worse on an hourly basis.

I also understand what you're going through in terms of work related stress.  I am "the" Underwriter for a national MGU - as in the only Underwriter and our successes or failures fall entirely on my shoulders.  I work from my home and yesterday, I received a very terse E-Mail from my boss, saying he would be visiting me at my "home office" at 9:30 AM the following morning (which is now this morning), and to "please be available".  Obviously, I am quite concerned with this visit, as he lives 1,000 miles away or so and has never once even seen my home office.  I'm either getting a pink slip or a fat bonus and the stress is literally dripping off of me.

Also glad you're leaving your script and comments up, as it is a human thing to make mistakes, say things we don't mean, and offer up things that aren't our best work.

Best of luck on the job front, mate, and hang in there on the screenwriting - for once Dustin is correct - you do have a bright future!

Take care.

Jeff, thanks for understanding man.  

I find it odd that we're in the same boat, or was until I jumped out into the shark infested waters of unemployment.  Working alone is great, but sometimes it gets a bit much.  You likely spend a lot of time in MS Word, whereas I spent the majority of my last 5 months in Photoshop trying to figure out new designs.

It's great at first, then you start to, like I did with scripts, see similarities with everything you do, or feel the constant weight of your boss saying "I need this by this time and that by that time".

Best of luck with the home visit, hope all goes smoothly.  I doubt he'd come 1,000 miles to fire you, in my experience, this happens either over the phone or by email.  He's likely on his way to see your set-up or, as you said, give you a big-fat-bonus, with luck, the latter.  More money =

As for me, I'm taking this script and working on a similar concept (lacking comedy) about an Angel and a Demon working to solve a murder in Heaven, so hopefully something promising comes of it.

Then I have to go to the benefit office... which should be fun, lol.  

-Lee

Quoted from Leegion Best of luck with the home visit, hope all goes smoothly.  I doubt he'd come 1,000 miles to fire you, in my experience, this happens either over the phone or by email.  He's likely on his way to see your set-up or, as you said, give you a big-fat-bonus, with luck, the latter.  More money =

Well, it turns out my boss didn't make - he sent his henchmen instead and they packed up all my computer stuff, gave me a tiny severance check, no reason why I was being let go, other than a terse letter saying they decided to go in a different direction, and 15 minutes later, I was standing there alone, in shock and unemployed.

I think it's about time to start drinking...HEAVILY.

Not a good way to start the new month.  This Kid's in big trouble...

Quoted from Dreamscale Well, it turns out my boss didn't make - he sent his henchmen instead and they packed up all my computer stuff, gave me a tiny severance check, no reason why I was being let go, other than a terse letter saying they decided to go in a different direction, and 15 minutes later, I was standing there alone, in shock and unemployed. I think it's about time to start drinking...HEAVILY. Not a good way to start the new month.  This Kid's in big trouble...

Well that freaking sucks.  Your boss, man, what a corporate douche-bag!  Sorry, man.  

Thnaks, guys.  The drinking has definiitely commenced, and nthank God, my girlfriend is here as well.

quote from dreamscale -- they packed up all my computer stuff, gave me a tiny severance check, no reason why I was being let go, other than a terse letter saying they decided to go in a different direction, and 15 minutes later, I was standing there alone, in shock and unemployed. -- end quote

I'm awfully sorry that you got used so badly, it's that stupid former boss who loses out --
obviously he's a fool.  And a coward.  

Sorry to hear. Drink today. Pick yourself up tomorrow.

Thanks guys and gal.  I am so beyond anything I;ve ever experiened, and I almost mdme a big mistake in driving crazy and doijg somethijg I never would do.  Thankl Teri my baby...she saved me tongiht.

Sory guyys...I'm aov=bvioulsy an total ass holke
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Quoted from Dreamscale Well, it turns out my boss didn't make - he sent his henchmen instead and they packed up all my computer stuff, gave me a tiny severance check, no reason why I was being let go, other than a terse letter saying they decided to go in a different direction, and 15 minutes later, I was standing there alone, in shock and unemployed. I think it's about time to start drinking...HEAVILY. Not a good way to start the new month.  This Kid's in big trouble...

You could always sell your arse. If you work really, really hard, you should at least be able to cover your food bill.

I can see how that scene could be offensive, but honestly I don't think you should worry about it. I might be biased because I myself am asian, but this type of thing has been done in so many times that by this point I don't think anyone would care if another person did it in another screenplay. And it also looks like it might be integral to the story, so cutting it out might not even be an option.

Also, this:
As for me, I'm taking this script and working on a similar concept (lacking comedy) about an Angel and a Demon working to solve a murder in Heaven, so hopefully something promising comes of it. Sounds super interesting.

Fuck, that's dreadful news, Jeff. Sorry to hear that, bro.

Lee-- really don't think this one's for me. But as I said, I am happy to read any of your work based in reality, as that's more my cup of tea.

Let me know!

No Angels in Heaven is my next script.  It's reality-based yet has a fantasy element, the fantasy part is that it takes place in Heaven, but it is most definitely grounded.  

-Lee