Hey DS.

Thank you very much for the very kind words.  I'm glad you liked it and really glad you got an experience out of it.  That means a lot for a writer to hear.

I'm glad you liked the realism of the script.  I know a lot of screenwriting books and teachers tell you that people don't want to watch real life, they want to watch great heroes in great impossible situations.  And that's true.  But I'm just wired differently in that I have to be emotionally attached to the characters and that's what I try to incorporate into my stories.

It's funny how you should mention Smithers' aside.  I can't stand asides and thought really hard about taking it out.  But it just felt natural coming from Smithers for some reason, so I left it in there.

And I get your gripe on page four.  I don't know why I put it there and not earlier in his description.  It was just something I wanted to do while writing.  I'll have to visit that again.

AOF is the Action On Film International Film Festival.  Somebody from this site brought it to my attention and then a production company I work with mentioned about it too and said it was a really good festival, so it seemed like a good idea to enter.

Thanks again for your kind comments, DS.  Do you have anything posted on the boards yet that I could check out?  Let me know.

- Mark