I agree, it's a bit of a mess, but that doesn't mean that it can't be fixed.
Just a couple of recommendations from the first few pages:
The title and your information needs to go on a seperate 'title page'. The first words of the script need to be 'FADE IN:' flush left.
Forget all of the camera cues, unless absolutely imperitive - directors don't want to be told how to direct.
Unless it is a full blow action sequence, eg: chase scene, you don't need to use single line paragraphs. You can group alot together, eg: Page 2 -
'He puts it through the machine and hands her a ticket, smiling, exposing his thick brown snaggletooth grin.'
Is Sadie the woman from the gas station? If so, she needs to be named then and given a small description.
Parentheticals should be used sparingly and kept to one line. If the script flows properly the actors will know how to act it out and if there is more than one line used then it needs to be described in action. Eg:
WOMAN
(shyly)
Just one. They're all the numbers
of my family member's birthdays. I
feel lucky with the lord.
He amorously eyes off her attractive figure.
CASHIER
Really? Well little lady...good luck.
TV TALKING HEAD? Mabye TV PRESENTER #1 and TV PRESENTER #2.
In it's current state it's hard to read and hard to understand as a screenplay, but with lots of work could be something good. Read a produced script and you should be able to pick up some hints.
Hope this helps.