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Don
Posted: September 27th, 2015, 7:43am Report to Moderator
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The Haunting of the Pirates Treasure by Scarlett Fox - Drama -  A gang of pirates find treasure in the depths of Moccasin Cove.The pisrate's become haunted by the gypsy's curse. A gypsy fortune teller reads their Future in a crystal ball while she steals the jewels they're wearing, and jinxes the couple. A witches fable with a haunting. syfy with gila monsters on board the ship and sea serpents. 104 pages

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Don  -  March 18th, 2019, 11:16am
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Dreamscale
Posted: October 2nd, 2015, 8:11pm Report to Moderator
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Well, Scarlett, the good news is that you've got a very cool name.  The bad news is your logline and script.

You're missing several apostrophes in your logline.  It's also extremely awkwardly written and gives us very little in terms of what this script is about.

Page 1 of the actual script, is...well...it's a mess, sorry to say.  Very awkwardly written. Missing major Slug changes.  Impossible to visualize, because as written, it makes no sense.

Wish I could be more positive, but I can't.  SS is a great place to learn, so join in, read and comment on other scripts, and get to know the peeps here who are all very willing and ready to help.
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