Hi Sheikh - if you let me know you're on these boards I'll post a full review for you You've misspelled misogynist in your logline. Your logline describes a script that interested me so I'm reading. First off - your copyright preamble should go (if anywhere at all - I wouldn't bother) in your title page, not your first slug. Your description paragraphs are too long. In my opinion (and others disagree) there's nothing wrong with long period w/o dialgoue, but the paragraphs need to be much shorter to aid reading. You have a character, Anabell, who is not formally introduced or described as far as I saw. I can't get much further than a few pages in. I don't know these people and the description is really making it hard to get through. You clearly have a way with words and if you had some more time to work on this, it would be a great script I hope you keep trying. |