Ashley: You're kind of missing the basics. These are problems on the first 1/4 page.
Quoted Text INT WEST HOUSE - DAY
Ty walks downstairs
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Should be: INT. WEST HOUSE - DAY Need to CAP TY (as is the case with all characters) when first intro'd. Give us some description of the setting - we don't know if we're in a mansion or a slum house. Describe your characters. - Physical traits at least.
Quoted Text TY ( Hey mom dad hasn't responded yet |
Missing a comma after Hey and a period after yet. You have grammar errors throughout. Check out Grammerly - it's free.
Quoted Text AVERY (30) He will buddy I am sure he will
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need a comma after will. A period after buddy. A period after the last will. Never have a character speak before they are introduced.
Quoted Text TY When is he coming home
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? needed after home. Do some Google research on script format - get some grammar tools. You need to develop the basic building blocks. |