NO IT WAS NOT. SHOW DO NOT TELL, was the only comment. ENOUGH of this. GO AWAY.  

QUITE CLEARLY, as I have repeated 10 times now..  I do not agree.  "We all know about show, don't tell".    END OF THREAD. GO AWAY. BYE.

Why is this still running???
Previously --
Now I Teach by Joseph J Caruso - Dramedy - A story about a man in his 50's who tries to teach after working in the IT field for over 30 years. How he copes with his new life, the strange faculty, insane principle and the new challenges of teaching. 96 pagtes - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

NW3     Posted: November 12th, 2015, 6:14am     

I got a laugh where he says he was married for five years and divorced for five, and she says "Its rare that I see symmetry like that."
The problem is, that is page 20 and all he's done is meet the principal and some of the teachers.
Multiple issues here, Joseph, NOW I TEACH needs homework (see what I did there?), do you want it?
Joe

-- Obviously not !!

Dude....

1. You have 7 different writers take a look at the comment and all thought it met the standard of constructive criticism. You're just wrong here.

2. The feedback was free. Someone took time from their day to read your stuff and offer you feedback—FOR FREE. Where else do you get that deal?

3. If you disagree with feedback - cool. Just say thanks.... But I don't agree because....

It ain't this difficult.

Joseph, FYI, you can elect to upload scripts and mark the box For Production Purposes Only, No feedback required.

Also, if you'd like this particular thread locked let me know.

Nothing draws a crowd like a big fight. This thread has had over 1230 views in a couple months. I even read several pages of the script just to see what all the hubbub was about. Note to self:  When posting a work for review, make controversial remarks to stir the pot. Apparently a workable strategy. 😂

Seriously though writer, I actually became interested in your script. There’s a story here to tell. Please take this as intended:  I am an amateur at screenwriting. I have committed just about every “no-noâ€� in the book from formatting to flow to…everything. I have learned so much here from the advice given…for free. People donating their time to uplift our craft. Please consider removing the chip from your shoulder and receiving the advice in the spirit in which it was given. You’ll be the richer for it. I promise.

Quoted from jjcwn QUITE CLEARLY, as I have repeated 10 times now..  I do not agree.  "We all know about show, don't tell".    END OF THREAD. GO AWAY. BYE.

You've written a script in which people do little but talk for almost 2.5 hours.

At 110 minutes, My Dinner With Andre clocked in a half hour less, and many people will tell you they thought watching that film was a form of torture.

My constructive opinion is you need a lot less talking and a lot more doing, but not so much of it that your running time exceeds two hours at the absolute most.