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SSC2WC What's your logline? (currently 1523 views) |
Zack |
Posted: February 16th, 2017, 8:09pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4487 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Pitch your story with one sentence. For many readers, this is your first chance to hook them. What's your logline?
~Zack~ |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: February 16th, 2017, 8:16pm |
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The great force that is Ian Pitt teams with Dr. Smith to hunt down the remaining cannibals outside Baltimore, and put an end to the 1,000's of deaths caused by the hermit cannibal, Elijah. |
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Zack |
Posted: February 16th, 2017, 8:31pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4487 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Quoted from Dreamscale The great force that is Ian Pitt teams with Dr. Smith to hunt down the remaining cannibals outside Baltimore, and put an end to the 1,000's of deaths caused by the hermit cannibal, Elijah. |
Pure gold. ~Zack~ |
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Dreamscale |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 10:28am |
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Pure gold. ~Zack~ |
I may add something about Helen. |
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CameronD |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 11:14am |
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Kosher - Late night munchies for a young couple at a deli turns deadly when the kitchen runs outs of pastrami. |
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Zack |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 1:17pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4487 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Kosher - Late night munchies for a young couple at a deli turns deadly when the kitchen runs outs of pastrami.
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You've got my attention. ~Zack~ |
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ChrisBodily |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 2:36pm |
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A Cut Above the Rest - A food critic uncovers the dark truth about a burger joint that has never gotten one bad review... or else. Sound tasty? |
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DanC |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 4:07pm |
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Old Timer Killing villains since 1980!
LocationBuffalo NY Posts1131 Posts Per Day 0.34 |
As a child, Fred accidentally imprisoned a creature, drawing its enmity. Now, it's free and wants revenge by destroying every aspect of Fred's life.
Is it okay to put that in 2 sentences, or should I go for a seemingly near run-on sentence?
lmk
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Dreamscale |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 4:09pm |
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Grandma Bear |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 7:19pm |
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LocationThe Swamp... Posts7961 Posts Per Day 1.36 |
Going to try to write something this weekend, but it depends if a baby decides to come or not! I suck at loglines, so I don't have that yet, but I have two stories in mind. One monster and one cannibal. Roach Motel and Eat Me. |
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Zack |
Posted: February 17th, 2017, 10:13pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4487 Posts Per Day 0.69 |
Roach Motel and Eat Me. |
Both sound very promising. Lol And good luck with the new baby! |
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Digitaldecayfilms |
Posted: February 18th, 2017, 5:51pm |
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LocationSeattle, WA Posts50 Posts Per Day 0.02 |
The Feasting House - A young man inherits his grandfather's farmhouse, but the kindly townsfolk aren't quite what they seem. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: February 18th, 2017, 6:49pm |
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LocationUK Posts4319 Posts Per Day 1.14 |
In the Genes - Celebrity organ cloning is all the rage with the Hollywood elite but when the organs start to go missing it's down to the lab's under fire boss to root out the culprit.
Finally an idea! |
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Female Gaze |
Posted: February 18th, 2017, 7:47pm |
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In the Genes - Celebrity organ cloning is all the rage with the Hollywood elite but when the organs start to go missing it's down to the lab's under fire boss to root out the culprit.
Finally an idea! |
That sounds awesome!!!!! |
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Conz |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 11:15am |
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This logline is not good.
Demon in the Sack - A frazzled man recounts the events of a terrifying date to his immature co-workers.
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| I'd list my "work" here, but I don't know how to hyperlink.
"Career" Highlights -2, count em, 2 credits on my IMDB page. -One time a fairly prominent producer e-mailed me back. -I have made more than $1000 with my writing! -I've won 2 mugs... and a thong. (polaroids of me in thong available for $10 through PM)
@vc_wg - because I crave attention |
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Steven |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 11:19am |
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LocationSouthern California Posts466 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
I'm bad at loglines, does this even make sense?
American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking. |
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DanC |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 12:41pm |
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LocationBuffalo NY Posts1131 Posts Per Day 0.34 |
I'm bad at loglines, does this even make sense?
American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking. |
That isn't too bad. I think I'd go on and explain what type of cooking. Right now it reads like a comedy. Good luck Dan |
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Steven |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 12:45pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts466 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
That isn't too bad. I think I'd go on and explain what type of cooking. Right now it reads like a comedy. Good luck Dan
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American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking an exotic cut of beef. I dunno, doesn't matter. My submission is based on Patrick Bateman so nothing will ever come of this. |
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JEStaats |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 3:10pm |
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Old Timer No sh*t, there I was....
LocationTucson, AZ Posts1735 Posts Per Day 0.62 |
'Too much gluten can be hazardous to your health.'
Kinda lame but it makes sense when you read it. |
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CameronD |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 3:50pm |
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American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, a business man tries his hand at cooking.
Change this to an a. Unless it's a known character, you generally steer clear of mentioning specific people in a logline. But I think this works well enough. We know he's a murder and businessman and he's going to start cooking. The only question though is why is he? Or what is the obstacle in his way? |
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Steven |
Posted: February 22nd, 2017, 3:55pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts466 Posts Per Day 0.16 |
American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, a business man tries his hand at cooking.
Change this to an a. Unless it's a known character, you generally steer clear of mentioning specific people in a logline. But I think this works well enough. We know he's a murder and businessman and he's going to start cooking. The only question though is why is he? Or what is the obstacle in his way? |
I've already said this is based on Patrick Bateman, so whatever. He tells his buddies from work about this new, exotic diet he's trying out and offers to cook them a meal that night. So, they come over and have dinner. I wanted it to be funny in the same way American Psycho was. |
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