Pros

An interesting idea with a lot of potential...two hunters seeking the perfect woman. Potentially says a lot about man's desire to own women and the way they view the opposite sex.


Cons

More comedy than horror.

I'd like to see you have a go at a serious version. I think there is grounds for something good.

Hi, Joseph

Keep your title point size at 12, like everything else.

Begin with left justified FADE IN:


Both contrast in hunting styles: Alex in dark leather with
a TRANQUILIZER GUN and NIGHT VISION GOGGLES while Blaine is
a rough looking man carrying a CROSSBOW.

Cap your characters on their introduction.

Both contrast in hunting styles: ALEX in dark leather with
a TRANQUILIZER GUN and NIGHT VISION GOGGLES while BLAIN is
a rough looking man carrying a CROSSBOW

Alex, looking everywhere but down, has
stepped into one of Blaine’s BEAR TRAPS.
The trap snaps shut, not completely before Blaine realizes
it and whips Alex’s foot out of the trap.
LOL! WTH was that?!

Dialog is kinda goofy throughout.
This is like... Nickelodeon with sex, lethal weapons and buffoonery.

lBOOM! Alex shoots the SIREN dead on with his tranquilizer
gun, putting her into an instant sleep.
Love that moooovie magic!

Alright.
Next OWC that's a comedy and you're good to go!
Crazy. you're funny.
Don't go near any guns, please. TY!