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Don
Posted: September 1st, 2004, 11:12am Report to Moderator
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Breathless by Eddie Martinez - Horror - Sydney, Australia.... in the city of Haddington police are at a loss as to how the catch a sadistic serial killer known as the Haddington psycho. With already a hefty body count under the killers belt the police are trying desperately to catch the maniac before the next victim is found.... but this is a horror film and things could never be that easy.  - doc format.


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Brilliant, but at the end you said cindy alot, but she was dead at the time.
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I think that this could've been better and if anyone who survived that I thought should've died would have to be Kimberly. She was the worse character and I didn't like her at all. The story was good, but if she would've died it would've been better. I would've liked her to take Cindy's place because Cindy was way better.
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Hey, this was a pretty good slasher flick. The script was very descriptive, and the dialouge was top notch. The only bad things were sometimes you use different names for people, like near the end, but I got who you meant.

The only other thing I didn't like was it had a slow pace, and the body count was way low at the begining, but I was happy when it started to rise near the end.

The last scenes were really good, and I liked Jeff's and Cindy's death, but I think Cindy should have lived, and I didn't really like Jonathon. Maybe thats just me. But yeah, it was a really good script. Above average

A job well done.


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DOM
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Blake, what the hell do you mean "low body count at the beginning"? Nine people had been murdered!!
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I see you're influenced by movies like Scream, Halloween and others like that. That's cool. It was an alright script. I knew who the killer was though. Maybe that's from watching so many horror movies. Anyway, you should include the descriptions of the characters when you introduce them, not at the beginning of the script. I liked how it took place in Australia.


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