Okay I quickly knocked over the rest of your script.

The horror and gore comes way to late into the story and when it does it is kind of weak. A syringe stuck in the neck, a kick in the head, surgery.

Not good enough. genre is like a promise. When you write with in a genre you have deliver on that promise and give the audience what the come for. If you do not then you have broken your promise and the audience trust and they probably won't come back for more.  

Man i was thinking when I started reading this how cool would it be that seeing you have the Gwen character as a nasty bitch, that when she is in the lair of the monsters instead of being killed off easily and quickly like all blonds are she just get fired up and fights like a hell cat, picks all sort of wepons and massacres the inbred caniblas and chases them through the woods until they run screaming to the police and she still hunt them down in rage and lust for revenge. And then the police chase her and she have to lead them back to the house of murder to prove she is innocent.  That would of been cool. That's what I was hoping you where you setting up but you didn't.

I like the idea regarding the beauty cream and when you went into Amy and Gwen mind and reveal what they think it was funny as all hell.

But as I said the plot is all wrong and there is not enough horror.

Good effort. Keep writing, do your homework and I bet your next script will be a beauty,

Thanks for the review.  It's what I want to hear the honest truth.  What you said really hit home.  I think I need to watch the Texas Chainsaw Massacre.  I also need to read more scripts.  The reviews have been all good.

Now I have to execute.

Okay, I read through to about page 50. I think it's okay. A little dissapointing compared to what I had imagined. It's okay, just not what I'd expected.

However, I think it's pretty good for a beginner's script.

I am to finish the rest of it tonight.

I read the rest of it. It's an OKAY script, it's not the best, but not the worst. Just like I said before.

It's a good read, but it seems like alot of it wasn't researched.

better luck on later scripts.

What did you think it would be about?   Your review doesn't say much.  It's not a book it's a script.