I really liked this, it was very suspenceful, solid story and characters, the only thing i didnt like how it ended, i was hoping you would have ended it and have some clousure for the survivors and what happens to the dead now that day has arrived.

Thanks for reading Corona --

The ending was abrupt, I have to agree, because, well, where I was heading there really wasn't an ending I could think of. So I left it at a "what are they going to do now?" feel, I guess.

Sean

I've been really wanting to read this and printed it out when it was first posted but I'm just now finding the time to read it.



SPOILERS









-Some of your dialogue sounds a little "on the nose". You can tell some of it is there only to benefit the audience's knowledge of the character. there's nothing wrong with that but some of it sounded unnatural forthem to say.


Pg 12 -OOOHHH! Potential COMET ZOMBIES!!!! ala "Night of the Comet" I LOVE it.

Pg 34 - Why are they making such a big deal about Blake and Sydney having sex? They're married aren't they?

Pg 41 - This is just great. When comet fragments attack! I'm lovin' it!

Pg 47 - Very well written plane crash! GREATNESS! At this point....i'm hooked. Go comet zombies, go!

Pg 61 - This scene reminds me of the one in FD2 when the same thing happens to CLear and her face goes all Oh so crispy right in front of our very eyes! I find it quite convenient that both sets of survivors winded up with each other's loved ones out of everbody in the world.

Pg. 95 - Uh, Whose Chase? I think you mean "The Chad"

Pg. 126 - This vent scene reads familiar...It's great though.

Pg 131 - Close to the end and no clear resolution in sight. Something tells me that this is going to be another one of your EVERYBODY DIES MUHAHAHA endings.
Aw damn! I was rooting for BLAKE....shame.

Pg 133 - oh wow. That quite sad.

DONE

I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! If this was played in theaters there would be a lot of pissed people. Please tell me there's a sequel in the works.
This was a pretty good read. I was surely entertained. I actually liked that you took time out with your characters because it payed off as I actually care for a few of them they mostly all died though. I hate that it just ended there though. Otherwise....I loved it. ZOmbies movies never get old.........actually they do but this was more than tolerable. If you haven't already I suggest you go rent NIGHT OF THE COMET. It also has COMET ZOMBIES but it isn't really about the few zombies I don't think. I found the movie to be quite hilarious actually. Also there's one called WARNING SIGN that I think would interest you.

Thanks for the great read.


-SHAWN

Shawn...

Wow, you printed this out? That must've taken a while! Unless you have one of those really fast printers and I wish I did.

Yeah the dialogue I still need to work with.

Haha I really want to see Night of the Comet. I remember watching some on Sci-Fi once, but I can't really remember it too well since it was like 4 years ago.

Yeah when Father Michaels gets charred, I kind of wanted the same effect as FD2 with Clear or in FD1 with Alex at the very end of the plane premonition.

Yeah, Chad. For half of the script, I started writing Chase for some reason and I had to go back and change it all!

The vent scene is probably similar to The Descent when the cave collapses.

Haha WRONG! Or maybe you're right? Who knows what happens to them after the end of the script.

No sequel. I suck at sequels and if I tried, it be very terrible. Haha yeah the ending is kind of abrupt, but I couldn't think of anything else. And for me, no zombie movie ever gets old.

Thanks for reading! And I'll check out Warning Sign too. Sounds....interesting. Prepare for a review from me, Shawn.

Sean