BLB, Thanks so much for reading my script. I intend to return the favor asap. The issues you pointed out are all symptoms of this affliction I currently have called...not having an air tight plot. HA HA. As I mentioned to decadence I was doing my rendition of La Dolce Vita, except we'll call it floating through a nightmare. Its seems I got caught up in the careless free flow haze just like my character and things stopped making sense very early and the work suffered.
Another thing you're right about is the complexity of subtext. If the tracks aren't laid well enough it just becomes an inside joke. One of those works and one of them doesnt. Thanks again. |