Hey DV44...welcome to the jungle!

Thanks for choosing my script for your first review...very cool.  Glad you enjoyed it.

Damn, this thing was written a long time ago, and this is a very old outdated draft.  I've been "rewriting" it for literally years (not that much actual writing going on, but it's on my plate).  I actually was aiming to get the final version done earlier this year, but alot has changed in my life.

The long, drawn out first Horny Toad scene has gone through major revisions and has been cut way back, including "story" details that just weren't pertinent to the plot.  There is also a new scene, involving Carlie in the restroom, being scared by 1 of the "kids" watching her and creeping her out.  I think it's pretty cool, actually and adds some tension early on.

There have also been alot of corrections and cleanup over the years.  I really need to finish the damn thing and repost.

Hope you enjoy SS.  It's a great place to learn and meet peeps all over the world.  Let me know when you post your first script and I'll give it a look.

Take care, bro and best of luck in your writing.

4 years?  Yeah, I wish...much, much longer, actually.

This is my first born, my only baby, so I guess I'll nurture her till she's 18 or so.  

I've done very little with it over the years, but always wanted to fix her up.  I should be done this week with her repairs.  Some nips and tucks here and there, and IMO, she's fucking ready to start dating...with Hollywood, that is. HaHa...we'll see.

You know, "shopping around Hollywood" isn't as easy as peeps think...especially if you don't live in Cali, and/or don't have the coin or connections to actually shop it.

I had some early success and ended up turning the potential deal down, as the budget was too low and the coin coming my way was way too low.  Some called me an idiot....well, almost all called me and still call me an idiot, but I'm glad I did what I did.

Is this a dead horse?  I sure don't think so, but in reality how many Spec scripts aren't dead horses?  Maybe I enjoy riding around on dead horses.  I don't know, and there's no way to ever know, but I'm not going to be dismounting any time soon.

Final draft to be posted soon (I mean it this time).   I should have her finished today or Friday at the latest.  So, please don't read this old draft now...wait for the new Fade to White 6.0...coming soon to Simply Scripts.  

I'll be looking forward to reading the new updated version. Good luck!

Thanks, DV.  I'm Jeff, BTW.

Hmmm, looks like an earlier post that I responded to was deleted or removed by the poster.  Oh well, I'll leave mine up for the Hell of it.

Hey Jeff- Nice to meet you, I'm Dirk. I think someone posted before me than deleted it. Oh well.

Quoted from Dreamscale Hmmm, looks like an earlier post that I responded to was deleted or removed by the poster.  Oh well, I'll leave mine up for the Hell of it.

Quoted from DV44 I think someone posted before me than deleted it. Oh well.

Off topic: I posted twice in the "Releasing Frank" script that I'd printed it out and was going to read it. Both posts disappeared. I think something may be going on with the forums.

On topic: If you post the script, I'll give it a read.

Thanks, Doms.  It should be finished for 1 last final time soon and then reposted ASAP.

I know that the Mods will delete posts in which someone says I'll read your script when nothing else is said.

The post in questions that "disappeared" asked why I had been working on this for 4 years and whether or not it was a dead horse that I should put to pasture.  Not sure if the actual poster deleted his own comment or a Mod thought it was an inappropriate post.

Quoted from Dreamscale Thanks, Doms.  It should be finished for 1 last final time soon and then reposted ASAP. I know that the Mods will delete posts in which someone says I'll read your script when nothing else is said. The post in questions that "disappeared" asked why I had been working on this for 4 years and whether or not it was a dead horse that I should put to pasture.  Not sure if the actual poster deleted his own comment or a Mod thought it was an inappropriate post.

Good to know.

When you finish and upload, I'll read your script.

Is your script a horror in the Saw or Hitchcock-sense?

Quoted from Doms Is your script a horror in the Saw or Hitchcock-sense?

No, neither.  I like to think of it as old school meets new school.  Old school "trappings" turned upside down on their head, delivered in a way that actually makes sense.  Characters act and talk like actual humans, and don't do stupid things to get themselves killed.

Can you tell I'm a big fan of it?     Yeah, I am.  Most have problems with it and probably still will, as it's non standard in every regard - structure, story (or lack there of), plot...Hell, everything.

I could even shoot it over to you before it's posted if you want.  Let me know in a PM with your E-Mail if you want it.

Take care.

Quoted from Dreamscale The post in questions that "disappeared" asked why I had been working on this for 4 years and whether or not it was a dead horse that I should put to pasture.  Not sure if the actual poster deleted his own comment or a Mod thought it was an inappropriate post.

I deleted it.  For starters I posted it last night, then deleted it because I thought, (after the fact) it might be an impolite question or possibly discouarge you, and that's not what I'm all about.   Then you responded to the deleted post, today.

In any event, you answered my question.  Best of luck.  Btw, it takes a good five minutes for this thread to open.  Might wanna start a FTW pt.2 thread, if that's possible.  Just a suggestion.

Quoted from M.Alexander Btw, it takes a good five minutes for this thread to open.  Might wanna start a FTW pt.2 thread, if that's possible.  Just a suggestion.

Haven't finished FTW2 yet...  

Hmmm..it does?  It opens instantly for me.

No question like is impolite but I appreciate the gesture of removing it, since you thought that way.

Finishing her up now...

Quoted from Dreamscale No, neither.  I like to think of it as old school meets new school.  Old school "trappings" turned upside down on their head, delivered in a way that actually makes sense.  Characters act and talk like actual humans, and don't do stupid things to get themselves killed. Can you tell I'm a big fan of it?     Yeah, I am.  Most have problems with it and probably still will, as it's non standard in every regard - structure, story (or lack there of), plot...Hell, everything. I could even shoot it over to you before it's posted if you want.  Let me know in a PM with your E-Mail if you want it. Take care.

If you're not a fan of your own script, it's probably not a good read.

Hi Jeff, I'm up to page 25. Your clearly a talented writer and you seem to have had a lot of feedback to this script already so as much as its worth, I'll give you a quick review of the first 25.

Loved your visual descriptions of the snow and surroundings. Liked the introduction of the killer and the killings accept the kid being killed, IMO Its a dark subject I don't think belongs in any script or Movie.

A lot have mentioned the Bar scene and Yes I agree, I understand you want readers to get to know the Characters but for a Horror there is a long time with nothing scary happening.

Some really great writing here. I read the  unproduced  scripts on SS to learn the do's and don't from good and bad scripts, so far this is a do script

should finish this tonight and will let you know what i think of the rest.

Cheers...  

Hey Stu, thanks for giving this a look.  Glad you're liking it.

I actually just finished the long awaited final, final draft.  The one you're reading is very, very old.  I will be submitting a repost this weekend, but if you'd like, I could send it to you first so you can read the revised, much better version.

Let me know.

Hi Jeff, I'm on UK time so I didn't see your post until after I had finished. I won't bother giving you my feedback if you have already done a revised version.

I'm doing my monthly Edinburgh to London train journey next weekend, i will save your new version for then and get back to you.

Cheers...Stu