Hi writer,
First and foremost, congratulations on finishing a feature and getting it out there. It takes a lot of work and can be easily overlooked in the feedback.
Overall, I see potential here, this was definitely a creative piece, and you clearly understand and have a passion for horror. I would say though that this did feel like a comedy-horror at times, particularly some of the behaviours and dialogue from Bud and Quinn. Kinda a tongue-in-cheek piece?
Anyway, what I should flag with you were some issues I had with some of the writing - there was quite a bit of clutter, particularly in the first 10 pages - which made it a less enjoyable read for me.
For example this -
'A series of semi-trucks hitched to empty trailers are parked along the outer left edge of the lot.'
Could be just this -
'Semi-trailer trucks line the lot.'
And
'A light blue 1985 Chevy Chevette glides through the lot overtop the painted parking lines.
The chevy comes to a halt in the middle of the lot.'
Could simply be -
'A light blue 1985 Chevy Chevette pulls up.'
Basically, you just want to make your sentences as concise as possible - make it as easy a read as you possibly can. I did struggle at times, had to re-read certain passages to get my head around them because they were too wordy.
Always put the reader first, I say
You got an interesting concept here - Just needs a bit of a tidy-up.
Good luck, keep writing - keep re-writing!