This was good right up until the ending - which went right over my head. Some of it was funny, some of it was weird (space onions?), some of it was just cool. It did get a little creepy when the whole family started to fall ill but then came the Alien and that sucked major ass - well, it did.

All in all a funny, creepy, confusing read. Kudos

Okay. Major points awarded for Space Oddity and a comet named after Bruce Willis. I also thought the origins of the food shortage were better thought out than most of what comes out of the genre. It seemed plausible yet wasn't overly political. It worked for me anyway. I also liked Dan's interaction with his family. I thought there was a lot of chemistry there. I'm not sure how I feel about the space onions being alien seeds (?). On one hand, it puts a clever spin on the Alien series. On the other hand, it's derivitive, which hurts the script even worse, considering how well it was set up. I mean, I knew there was something sinister about the stuff but I was hoping for a different angle. As for the ending, I don't know. Kinda fun. Kinda hokey. Not sure if it fit... I don't know. I'm on the fence.

Anyway, a mixed bag, overall. There's some really good stuff here but I'm not quite sure you guys really knew what to do with it. It's not bad but it could've a lot better.

This was enjoyable and very sci-fi. I did think the idea of a comet being named after Bruce Willis of all people was a little strange, but meh. It had a nice beginning, middle, and end to it, and unfolded nice and easily as it went along. I thought everything was explained pretty fairly as well.

It's actually a good thing that you didn't attempt to cover the Alien nod, since people would have probably given you a hard time if you had. It ended a bid weirdly, but that seems to be a trend on this one.

This had some solid writing and adhered to the theme, but overall I didn't really like this one for a couple of reasons. It felt like this short was stuck in second gear the entire time. Nothing really interesting or provoking happened. Even when the alien bursts out of Dan, it just seemed like a tired rehash on an old gimmick.

I called the ending as soon as Dan arrived in the cave. It reminded me of an old Futurama episode were the crew finds an irresistible source of food on a distant planet, and they discover that the so-called "Popplers" were actually alien babies.

Overall this was a good effort, but didn't work for me.

Hi,

I liked this.  Felt this followed the challenge set out and was an enjoyable read.

The Alien thing was a strange angle to mimic although it did work.  I do think that life growing within yourself is very creepy and what I think is visually creepy is to see  animals crawl under your skin.

The build up was good about the loss of food, war and the comet Willis.  And the actually ending was humorous.

All the best,


Javier