I thought, good, a nice comedy.

Then I get down to that mentality in the dialogue at the bottom of page 1 and it's

oookay - chuck it.

Sandra

Okay nice nerd vs bully opening.

bottom p2 - He takes the fishbowl back home?

P3 "Our man…" this stuff hurts your story. There is no me, no we, no us or our in a story, especially not on p 3. It's a fallacy that such kind of writing works. Instead, it just makes me think you the writer isn't sure that I invest. And I invest like I'm there, with Hugh, him (not with your writing), story … there's no border between me and Hugh, well, as long as you say so - as you did.

P4 lol full Walter Mitty tone finally coming

P6 ups, aliens weren't allowed I guess regarding the real life 2017 parameter

All right. Charming to some degree but it's not completely convincing me. The story is too long considering that the script merely works with a wink of irony and superficial gag. In a slow Story that isn't so deep, instead of many average punch lines and jokes of same pattern by design, I'd prefer a quicker in and out with few true highlights. At least that's what I think when the drama around can't withstand for ten minutes and more, as I see it here. The whole alien part felt a bit constructed.

Still, it's a good effort I think. Some funny episodes were in there for sure.