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Of course it works in screenplay format. That's exactly what we're doing for this OWC.
I get what you're saying, but chances are extremely good that written by even a very good writer, this would not read well at all.
It runs over 9 minutes, but if you really think about it, could you write even 5 pages of this? And, if you could, would you expect anyone to enjoy those 5 pages? I don't think so.
This works based on 2 things - the acting and the production. That's it. There's no story here, nothing makes any sense, and to top it all off, there's no ending. And, let's remember those waves in the first minute - WTF is that supposed to be?
Re Curve: There is a story imh. The waves, I agree, looked disconnected like ocean swell - even though there are plenty of accounts here in Oz, at least, of people dam surfing - really dangerous, and a lot of water goes through dams. But this one's empty, so why the water except for adding atmosphere?
She's knocked out or asleep when we first see her, so you immediately get: how did she get here? And you also see how perilous her situation is. Then there's a noise from below - a howling? That added a creepy supernatural element to it, and that she's not the first. It's a terrifying premise - not having anything to hold on to.
Add a bloody hand, and... There's nothing quite like a bloody fingernail ripped from the nailbed and hanging by a thread.
The ending was a bit of a letdown. If the chain around her neck now wrapped around her hand is to provide traction, I didn't buy it.
Do I care about the end? Not really, Cause the ride was so suspenseful and so much fun. Well, maybe a little bit I care...
It would read well in the hands of a skilled writer.
It's also a good exercise in running a script through our heads, imagining the action taking place, instead of picking apart the writing.
I really wanted to be in this one and thought I'd sneak in enough time to get it done, but it’s not looking possible unless I get something down tonight which is very unlikely.
My biggest issue would be getting all the reviews done as I fly out to Iceland tomorrow.
Hopefully there is another no dialogue challenge down the track.
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