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I'm not sure if it's possible for the director to tell us that they are one year older in each photo.
There was a lot of funny moments in this short. However, your lead character had no clear goal. Also, the ending was too dark to fit in this comedy. I'm not sure how people would react to that kind of ending.
Since the clock is ticking, this is gonna be super brief. Not too technical.
You have a few missing commas and a missing space in the opening line. It should be "Kakis," not the possessive.
Kim Paige. A Melissa McCarthy type?
So, we open with two people flipping the bird for no apparent reason? Okay...
Are we talking a tabby or a jaguar?
iPod? What's wrong with a CD? Or the radio? Who even still has an iPod? I never had one to begin with.
Hard for anything, let alone Tom Jones, to blare out of those puny speakers, unless it's hooked up to the car stereo, or good headphones.
A few grammar niggles.
"The Lion Sleeps Tonight" should be capitalized. No excuse for that.
"pee distraction"? WTF is that?
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The sound of LOUD CHEWING can be heard.
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the gates of hell await
Literally?
I admit I skimmed. The story didn't engage me, but you have good taste in music. Writing needs some work. Lots of missing commas and spaces. And a lowercase song title (a very popular oldie, mind you).
The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards. Third - Honolulu Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr