I wrote Deserter.

Got the idea late and decided to get it done asap as my birthday was the same day the scripts were due.

I read a lot of a fantasy book series I'm into right now and very little screenplays, so that would explain my heavily overwritten entry. Just got to writing it out and never really payed attention to how I was telling the story.

I did have a different ending planned out. It still would've played out as Hubert being attacked by those he deserted but that last image would've  revealed that he was nowhere near water, the oxen were actually dead, and he was suffering from exposure before he succumbed. It may have made the ending a little better anyways.

His fellow travelers weren't intended to be zombies, I was going for a more "Wild West Mummy" type of deal. It's crazy how well preserved that mummy is. I thought it would make a good thing to haunt Hubert with with the others looking somewhat like that guy.

Thanks to all those who have commented.

After I read your example eldave1 I re-read my entry and seen just how overwritten it is.

Thanks to Pia and Don for a very memorable OWC.
I enjoyed reading all the entries.  Very talented writers here.
And even though there was some heat, I didn't get burned this time.

Also, a special THANKS to Jeff for taking the time to give me a detailed review!
I truly appreciate it.  
And thanks to everyone else for their feedback.
Now, off to rewrite.

SEE YOU IN OCTOBER

I guess it's time to let the cat out of the bag.

My script was titled...

DIE, FLUFFY, DIE  -  AQUAPUSSY

Thanks, Dave.
Weather Worn was awesome.

I shoulda known Wish You Were Here was Jeff's. A few things give it away in retrospect, the cocaine, the rum, the hot couple on the beach. And this:

For some reason, this hit me rather hard and I actually had to go outside and have a smoke when i finished.

I think I know who wrote this and if I'm correct, I am shocked this person used a "non standard" title on the cover page, lol!

Thanks to Pia and Don for a very memorable OWC.
I enjoyed reading all the entries.  Very talented writers here.
And even though there was some heat, I didn't get burned this time.

Also, a special THANKS to Jeff for taking the time to give me a detailed review!
I truly appreciate it.  
And thanks to everyone else for their feedback.
Now, off to rewrite.

SEE YOU IN OCTOBER

I guess it's time to let the cat out of the bag.

My script was titled...

DIE, FLUFFY, DIE  -  AQUAPUSSY

Dream Weaver,
Thanks, Bill.  
How are you man?  Been too long.

I saw two scripts I knew were yours.
They were very Brit and both contained the word “whilst.”

Cheers