Well, the basics are that my name is Jonathan Wilshin, I'm 15 and I started writing scripts at 11, I think. I started with 'Alien 3' after I was disappointed with the actual movie. It was crap, I know that now. As was, 'Daemon' one that I wrote shortly afterwards. And for a long time I just planned different stories and thought about writing.

Then, I wrote the first screenplay I am truly proud of, 'The Suffering'. I've been coming to Simply Scripts for a while, but only recently found out you can submit screenplays. I wrote a sequel which I have not yet submitted, and am currently starting work on what I hope will be a truly dark and scary screenplay. Horror and science fiction are my favourite genres , and, although I am British and stuck in Northern Ireland, I do hope to enter screenwriting as a later profession. Move to American, do a writing course I have planned, etc.

I am desperate for honest opinions on my script that don't come from my family and sound dishonest. I want to improve vastly on my work and any future work.

In short, Hi!

Nice to meet you..im kinda new myself... i guess. You sai "Move to american" im pretty sure its america not american but thats cool it was probably just a typo

Save what seems like crap at fifteen, until your'e in your twenties.  At the moment, you may be blind to which exact parts can be refined into pure literary gold.  Trust me.