I have a tripod and used it all of the static shots. I made a steadicam-type apparatus and left it in the car when my wife ran off and left me there, so I didn't have it...doh! I felt a lot of the moving shots didn't turn out too badly, really. The outside moving shot is the one I disliked the most as it shook a lot and the one I most wanted my steadicam for. You can tell I had to chop it and transition it for it to be even close to acceptable and even then, it's not so good...oh well.

A quick amusing anecdote on Ben McBride...he wasn't supposed to be in it. His wife, Michelle, was scheduled to be there along with Jenifer, and our guy was going to be someone else who had been in theatrical productions before, but he texted us with a family emergency in Arkansas after we were supposed to meet, and Ben, having brought Michelle, graciously responded to our begging to play the male role. He was great.

Thanks for the compliments thus far, and I hope everyone else enjoys it.

Good job on ur translating script to film. Not bad at all!

Dude, I can't see it

Could you please upload it on youtube or something?

It's always satisfying to see something move from the page to film -- and even though the credits were my favorite part     (you didn't have to do that) -- I suppose I should comment on the rest of it.

I thought the sound was fine.  It seemed to improve later, in fact.  But I am no expert on that.

I liked the garbled voices, and found that to be a very effective device, with it's implications for insanity.  And you credit yourself as doing the music.  Is that original?  Good job with the music at the end, either way.  It corresponds well to the action on screen.

I liked how when Ben walks and disappears from the frame you can still see his shadow on the wall haha.

I might have put the bullet hole someplace else.  What she has there doesn't look like a kill shot to me.

Your actors did well.  That girl screaming "NOOOO..." was startling, and I had to turn down the sound.  You can tell Ben that he has a good presence on camera, too.

A good first effort from Willson Pictures.  I wonder when they will start soliciting scripts?

I felt like if you and the others were good enough to help me improve on the script (which I used a lot of the comments from, you may notice), then it's not too much to go ahead and say thanks in the credits. And yup, there is a shadow on the wall after Ben disappears...that's one of those things I couldn't fix.

Yes, I wrote the music for the final montage. Thanks. Music was actually my first interest in the writing field, and my first scripts were musicals, so that's my umpteenth composition.

I had some concern over some sound being too loud and I guess the NO! scream is too loud then. I may go back in and turn it down.

As for uploading it elsewhere, the major providers of streaming video all use the same basic devices, so if you can't see it here, try going to http://www.myspace.com/georgewillson and see if you can view it there. I may do youtube at some point since it's short enough, but I don't know.

Thanks for the comments.

Okay I got it now. The problem was I had an old version of my Flash Player. -.-

This turned out good for a first shoot! I can't wait to see some more stuff from you with some higher budget equipment.

By the way, where's the music from? The song in the credits sounded a little David Lynchy but what about the rest?

--Julio

I wrote the music and played it on my Yamaha sequencer. The credits sound is me overdubbed about 8 times saying a variety of different things as well as whispering more stuff overdubbed another 8 times or so. These sounds were mixed into the final films under the credits. Both of those sounds were used within the film as well.

I did use some sound effects, but 95% of the sounds and such were completely original including the music.

I'm glad you got it working.

Hey George, that was a neat little short. It was kinda trippy. The acting wasn't so hot, but that's a flaw that you personally couldn't help. Overall, I liked it. Good job. Here's the links to a couple of short films I directed if you're interested.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sY1nHhKzWmc

http://www.veoh.com/videos/v5332579j3A3FnW

If you watch them, PM me and tell me what you think.

Heh, very interesting.  

Highly stylized picture that you brought to the floor here.  I assume that this was done in Windows Movie Maker, as some of the sounds/effects look familiar.  The acting was good, especially Ben's part.  I found him to be a little more believable, but kudos deserves to go around.

Impressive, Mr. Willson!

The primary editing was done in Moviemaker along with the all of the effects and the title at the beginning. About the only thing I used Premiere for (as I didn't want to use an editing system I was unfamiliar with to cut this together) was to extract frames to color out the microphone and/or pole (there were nearly 200 of these frames that I had to color out in Photoshop one by one), and to correct my rather large sound issue and then mix the sounds. None of the sound was done in Moviemaker, and while I originally did the end titles in MM, I had to redo them in Premiere as some of the alterations changed the titles I'd originally done. Tere were some minor edits done in Premiere as well, but not much to make note of really.

Moviemaker is a really good editor and it has some powerful effects that worked well for me. I had to go online for some of the coloring and such and add some of those in, but it did really well for a free editor. If I didn't have the sound issue along with being incapable of keeping the mike out of the shot, I probably wouldn't have used Premiere at all.

Thanks for the watch, Golem and Greg, and I suppose a watch for a watch is fair, Golem, so I'll have a look. I did try to do something interesting and make it look and sound like more than just a home movie, and while it is not perfect, I do think I achieved that, and my next one will be that much better for the experience.