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That was OK...very little plot, but still...I don't know. It just seemed like this one lacked any spark to make it unique.
"Zombie Attack" had no plot at all, but it managed to have a little spark that made it better than it actually was...the black/white and music. This really didn't have anything.
Although, the ending scene when the shirtless kid runs out and freaking slams his head into the door!! *!* ah! That was hilarious! Did that guy mean to do that? Because it looked very painful! Ah...sweet, dude...absolutely sweet.
Sorry to be so harsh...I just didn't find anything in this that makes it stand out.
That's okay that you didn't like it. I don't expect everyone to. The kid hitting his head on the wall wasn't planned, that's why it looked so real! Thanks for watching!
I would say that this short film suffers from the same problem as that short script of yours that I just read. You must have a story, otherwise there's no point and people get bored. You can actually get away with poor acting, filming and sound if the story kicks ass, but you have to have a story.
I know this was made on the fly for an exam, but I bet you would have got an even better grade had there been a story somewhere.
I didn't get why that guy kept falling all the time. I know it was just a dream, but when I watched it I thought he was either drunk or having seizures.
Thanks for watcing Pia and Helio! Everytime a make another movie I always learn alot more. I plan on making a longer short for my next film, which means that I will soon start looking around for a script(probrably on this site). Hopefully I continue to improve as a director.
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