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If I had to pick on anything it would be the long black screens parts. Maybe the dinner chat could be trimmed some and the sound is a little echoey. This however is just IMHO and I'm nobody.
The acting was good too. You guys did really well.
Thanks a lot guys! I'm kinda nervous about how this will go over with people...never cut a demo reel before. Glad you enjoyed.
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...and the sound is a little echoey.
You caught me. I was eager to put this up (it's been so long since any Marigold anything went on the net), so the audio that's included hasn't been worked yet. That echo is the unfortunate product of low-budget mics. It will, however, be significantly lessened (though probably still present, sadly) in the final cut.
Chris; that was a seriously, heavy duty, butt stompin little piece! Excellent job! I understand the limitiations of the equipment in terms of production values, but that aside, the shots you got and the action that you were able to convey using those tools was tight, gripping and kicked some major butt! Nice!
Joe
Failure is only the opportunity to begin again more intelligently - Dove Chocolate Wrapper
I couldn't make heads or tails of the story but the shots were awesome.
Just a quick note - this is a demo reel, not a trailer for the movie. In fact, it's sort of a trailer for me - my capabilities as a writer, director, and editor (and DOP, I guess). The idea of said demo reel would be as a business card to potential investors, producers, or other industry types.
And thanks again to everyone who's enjoyed. Thanks to Mike and Chris for calling it a 'reference' to Dogs and not a 'ripoff'...
Awesome reel. Definetly gonna have to check out the script. I have to say I kinda dislike the 'Dogs' reference/homage. It was so blatent that it had m saying "did Harvey Kietel ever say 'die quiet?'" I think it actually gives it a stigma of bad amatuer stuff, like a fanboy rip-off which the direction and the other clips don't. I think in the context of an entire film it would be okay but as a clip, it may hurt more than help.
That being said, it still looks awesome. And I do look forward to reading the script.
I just checked this out and it looks pretty good. The dialogue sequence maybe a tad long for a trailer but then I guess this isn't advertised as trailer. I loved the quick flash montage at the end.
Check out my scripts...if you want to, no pressure.